Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

This is a magnificently presented work in very majestic coloration that pulls the reader completely on site to deliver this powerful story in complete grip. I loved this work and cannot offer anything to improve it in any way! HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Vance; thank you so much for this generous review of my 'Picture This' poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Hi Patty
Really enjoyed this Sevlette poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and lines throughout.
I particularly enjoyed the imagery shown which paints such a ghastly picture in the mind of these poachers, as an animal lover, and a member of WWF I abhor poaching and doff my cap in your direction for bringing it to our attention.....an excellent poem.
Mitchell.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Mitchell; I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and appreciate your praise of me bringing the subject of poaching into the light.

I'm a member of WWF, too!

~patty~

Comment from apky

Excellent

Wonderful.
The artwork and theme took me straight back a couple of weeks to when I was revising the chapter of Helena and Ramon in the dried up waterhole. You address and important subject and aske the most relevant question in the last stanza:

Graceful creatures become game
To sportsmen looking for fame
Species driven off to die
Conservationists ask Why?
Need to stop this gory trend
Or the wild life will just end
Can humans be far behind?

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Aki; thank you for the lovely review of this piece. I love visiting zoos and seeing the animals, but I always end up wondering if these poor captive creatures will be the only thing left to represent their species,

~patty~

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Need to stop this gory trend
Or the wild life will just end
Can humans be far behind?


Patty,

It's funny. I always picture you as much older when I read your comments and written pieces. Then, I come visit and see that profile pic and am reminded that you are still a youngster! hahaha! But a wise one, it seems. Your writing always reflects a knowledge past your years. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

awww - thank you! Since my 59th birthday is coming up, I am feeling the passing of time as I approach 60. I appreciate you calling me a youngster!

~patty~

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

I hate when these animals are poached. Good rhyming couplets and nice form. Interesting take on the picture.

~~Teresa~~

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Teresa; thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece,

~patty~

Comment from dovemarie

Exceptional

Dear patty, Great picture of animals browsing and grazing. The sunset reminded me of the sun going down on wildlife, a day ending, and wildlife ending. I also liked your question at the end: Can humans be far behind? It gives us something to think about. Thank you also for introducing me to yet another form of poetry, the Sevelette. I still don't understand patterns. Could you tell me again what aa/bb/cc/d is/ Dove

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Dove;
the aa, bb, cc and d - all relate to rhymes. The a's need to rhyme and the b's, etc.

As you can see in the pattern of my poem, the first two lines of each stanza rhyme, and the next two, and the next two - with a single line at the end of each stanza.

Does that make more sense?

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing - your award of the shining sixth star makes me very happy.

~patty~

reply by dovemarie on 15-Aug-2017

Dear patty, Thank you for your description of the pattern. Dove

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

that is what I said...when they are extinct we will be next.
Very well done and the repititions solidify the whole piece. I saw a woman posing against a giraffe she had killed...I was still trying to find it's fangs.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Barb; I haven't read your poem yet - have you disappeared from my fan list? (It seems to be happening a lot these days, and I'm missing posts!)

I appreciate your support of my piece and I'm glad you echoed the sentiments in yours,

~patty~

reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 15-Aug-2017

it is happening to a lot of people. I have told everyone that if I don't review it is because I am not getting messages .So far there are 6 that I don't get from but are on my list. I will check. you are on my list but not getting anything. Tom says it cant happen that way. lol

Comment from Possummagic

Excellent

This is a great little poem about the horrid practice of poaching. It describes it well. Many animals die simply because their tusks are wanted. The ivory trade has only increased with the bans in place . Ver sad.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for your time to review my 'Picture This' poem. I mourn for the wild life we lose every day,

~patty~

reply by Possummagic on 15-Aug-2017

You are welcome.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Patty,

a well written poem, words, rhythm and rhyme all flowing well ----
and sadly, this is going on today - wonderful, defenceless creatures
being slaughtered for gain.

Margaret

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Margaret,
thank you for this lovely review of my 'Picture This' poem. When I saw the picture, I felt such sadness that this is a rare sight now.

~patty~

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Patty,
You did a great job with Kerry's inventive new style. You handled a touchy, but so important, subject well. Your lines flow smoothly to tell of the horrors faced by these magnificent animals all for sport. Yeah, right? Those lazy 'bums' couldn't hit a fly with a bazooka. They have to have it handed to them on a silver platter. Then it is Look at Me all over social media.

My poem for the challenge is on elephants/poaching as is BeasPeas. Like minds as they say. Right?

Thanks for sharing & caring. Jan

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Jan; thank you so much for reading and reviewing my 'Picture This' poem. I so detest the poaches and 'sportsmen' who kill these gracious creatures for no REAL reason,

~patty~