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Comment from Pearl Edwards
Very cute - Dejour's under construction sign. A good continuation of this story, and what an adventure Pepe is having and still more to come. I could easily visualize the scene between Lucy, Pepe and Dejour and with Billy and Nancy's characters I think children reading would relate too.Enjoyed.
cheers.
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Very cute - Dejour's under construction sign. A good continuation of this story, and what an adventure Pepe is having and still more to come. I could easily visualize the scene between Lucy, Pepe and Dejour and with Billy and Nancy's characters I think children reading would relate too.Enjoyed.
cheers.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
What an interesting prompt this is. To make up feel as if we are watching a movie or play and not just reading about it. Dangit all! There goes that thought. Anyway Mav another super job from your super cute Duck and Turtle Dejour. I can see it all happening, so mission accomplished. :))
Best of luck in the contest with this beauty.
Ange
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What an interesting prompt this is. To make up feel as if we are watching a movie or play and not just reading about it. Dangit all! There goes that thought. Anyway Mav another super job from your super cute Duck and Turtle Dejour. I can see it all happening, so mission accomplished. :))
Best of luck in the contest with this beauty.
Ange
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your script contest entry. I had almost forgotten about this story line. I am so happy I dropped in to see what was going on and catch this post. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
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I enjoyed reading your script contest entry. I had almost forgotten about this story line. I am so happy I dropped in to see what was going on and catch this post. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
I am getting a huge kick out of this. These guys are entertaining. Dejour is especially fun with his anti social responses. I could see this for sure animated on the screen. I wonder where you are going. I bet you are too. Hehehe!! NG
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I am getting a huge kick out of this. These guys are entertaining. Dejour is especially fun with his anti social responses. I could see this for sure animated on the screen. I wonder where you are going. I bet you are too. Hehehe!! NG
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from BOO ghost
Pepe escaped the gunfire of the fisherman and set out down the road where he met Dejour, a turtle, who became his traveling companion. Billy arrived at the school and found a girl named Nancy who had encountered Pepe on the way to school and spoken with him. While the other kids distracted the teacher, Billy and Nancy set out after Pepe. Not much time to review Lion King. Got to run.
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Pepe escaped the gunfire of the fisherman and set out down the road where he met Dejour, a turtle, who became his traveling companion. Billy arrived at the school and found a girl named Nancy who had encountered Pepe on the way to school and spoken with him. While the other kids distracted the teacher, Billy and Nancy set out after Pepe. Not much time to review Lion King. Got to run.
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from frierajac
It is an interesting and promising beginning to a story in script. So good, in fact, I didn't notice it was a scripted dialogue. The plot has to have something particulrly odd to the extreme and at the same time unexpected. Good luck in the continuation.
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It is an interesting and promising beginning to a story in script. So good, in fact, I didn't notice it was a scripted dialogue. The plot has to have something particulrly odd to the extreme and at the same time unexpected. Good luck in the continuation.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Michael,
A very good script for the watching the script contest. Pepe's adventures again...I love his name. It sounds like a dangerous adventure to me. The story of the monkey is interesting. Good job, sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
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Hello, Michael,
A very good script for the watching the script contest. Pepe's adventures again...I love his name. It sounds like a dangerous adventure to me. The story of the monkey is interesting. Good job, sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I am glad you are continuing the adventure of Pepe and Dejour as the try to find Billy. I could see the children's toys in the characters you created and the thoughts from children. Nicely done
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I am glad you are continuing the adventure of Pepe and Dejour as the try to find Billy. I could see the children's toys in the characters you created and the thoughts from children. Nicely done
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from apky
I read this so many weeks ago, I had come to think you'd given up the project or laid it to "brew" for a while. I'm glad its back and I enjoyed the continuation. The most vivid - and a little scary-indication - dialogue were these two:
Billy
Are ya' kiddin' me? This just looks like any old forest to me. A bunch of trees and some who knows what in the darkness. What's enchanted about this? It sure isn't golden.
Nancy
I've heard enough tales to stay out here if you want to go take a look for yourself. The way I've heard it told, when the clock strikes twelve, it all begins. That's all I know.
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I read this so many weeks ago, I had come to think you'd given up the project or laid it to "brew" for a while. I'm glad its back and I enjoyed the continuation. The most vivid - and a little scary-indication - dialogue were these two:
Billy
Are ya' kiddin' me? This just looks like any old forest to me. A bunch of trees and some who knows what in the darkness. What's enchanted about this? It sure isn't golden.
Nancy
I've heard enough tales to stay out here if you want to go take a look for yourself. The way I've heard it told, when the clock strikes twelve, it all begins. That's all I know.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I've just seen the links after I'd read part three! I'm going to go back and read those now, this part was really good, Mikey, I love children's stories. Now I want to find out what the enchanted forest is like at night. :) Your characters are lovely, I have an orange plastic duck in my bathroom! Well done, my friend. Loved it. One nit below. :) Sandra xxxx
If I were a duck, especially an(d) orange duck,
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I've just seen the links after I'd read part three! I'm going to go back and read those now, this part was really good, Mikey, I love children's stories. Now I want to find out what the enchanted forest is like at night. :) Your characters are lovely, I have an orange plastic duck in my bathroom! Well done, my friend. Loved it. One nit below. :) Sandra xxxx
If I were a duck, especially an(d) orange duck,
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
