Against the Current
Trying to walk in New York4 total reviews
Comment from LoannaLois
This flows beautifully.I loved the whole concept.
The idea behind it was a really good one, and you painted an excellent
picture..It was easy to picture this in my. mind.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
This flows beautifully.I loved the whole concept.
The idea behind it was a really good one, and you painted an excellent
picture..It was easy to picture this in my. mind.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your read and the encouraging words.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I would have written:
"Walking in New York--
like a fish swimming upstream
against fierce currents."
But...that's just my opinion.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
I would have written:
"Walking in New York--
like a fish swimming upstream
against fierce currents."
But...that's just my opinion.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Yeah, thanks. I like your version better.
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You're welcome.
Best of luck! :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image.
-Syllable count is good.
-I like the use of one
connected thought.
-You paint a good picture
of New York.
-Good comparison to a fish,
following up with the current.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
-Good image.
-Syllable count is good.
-I like the use of one
connected thought.
-You paint a good picture
of New York.
-Good comparison to a fish,
following up with the current.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thanks for the read and the comments.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Poetic Friend
I have never been to New York, but based upon the New Yorkers know and what've seen on television, you described the scenery quite well.
I read a few of these entries. Thus far, I think this one really captures the essence of New York.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
I have never been to New York, but based upon the New Yorkers know and what've seen on television, you described the scenery quite well.
I read a few of these entries. Thus far, I think this one really captures the essence of New York.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the read and your encouraging words.