Boiler Room
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Section 2 - Part 3: Ghost Sighting"Cody's worst nightmare from Hell becomes reality!
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Brett; this continuation of Cody's story is good. The four stars are for the fact I could feel your hurry in writing this part.
Nits; ' He considered telephoning Julius Shaw to inform him Justin Martindale was cleared to return to work ...for now.' (The ellipses isn't a pause, it is to show missing words.)
(The part about the incoming phone call on the Sheriff's personal phone was clumsy. There were too many changes in subject before he finally answered the phone.)
I usually like the organization of your work, and I felt this was messy.
~patty~
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Hi Brett; this continuation of Cody's story is good. The four stars are for the fact I could feel your hurry in writing this part.
Nits; ' He considered telephoning Julius Shaw to inform him Justin Martindale was cleared to return to work ...for now.' (The ellipses isn't a pause, it is to show missing words.)
(The part about the incoming phone call on the Sheriff's personal phone was clumsy. There were too many changes in subject before he finally answered the phone.)
I usually like the organization of your work, and I felt this was messy.
~patty~
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Normally, I agree with most of what you tell me.
However, this one I tend to disagree with.
However, do keep those comments coming. They assist in keeping me focused and on track.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
