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Comment from Eternal Muse
Brilliant! Shows the true power of free verse and so much more.
Takes you on a flight to space. I was enamored of
astronomy ever since my mother taught it in my school.
Stars... Myriads of stars. She was one.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Brilliant! Shows the true power of free verse and so much more.
Takes you on a flight to space. I was enamored of
astronomy ever since my mother taught it in my school.
Stars... Myriads of stars. She was one.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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I'm pleased you enjoyed this. Thanks for the kind words. mike
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Your free verse is amazing.
I posted a poem, a translation of a Russian romance, and just now added a video where Oleg Pagudin sings it. It's so heavenly.
Comment from Hitcher
I enjoyed your well crafted free verse poem friend, the sprinkling of rhyme and alliteration offered another dimension to 'what crosses my mind.' The recipient of your thoughts/words would indeed be a very lucky individual : ) and you of course would have found the ONE !
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I enjoyed your well crafted free verse poem friend, the sprinkling of rhyme and alliteration offered another dimension to 'what crosses my mind.' The recipient of your thoughts/words would indeed be a very lucky individual : ) and you of course would have found the ONE !
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah, Mav shall I compare thee to a summer's day? You are the embodiment of Shakespeare without the confines of the sonnet form with this gorgeous free verse.
I love how you've woven a fine strand of concrete imagery in and around the esoteric heart and mind in love and filled with a yearning to lasso the moon to bring your desired one close to you.
This is exceptional from start to finish. Who says love poems ever get old. Not in my opinion.
A superb piece of elegant and eloquent poetic genius. :))
Ange
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Ah, Mav shall I compare thee to a summer's day? You are the embodiment of Shakespeare without the confines of the sonnet form with this gorgeous free verse.
I love how you've woven a fine strand of concrete imagery in and around the esoteric heart and mind in love and filled with a yearning to lasso the moon to bring your desired one close to you.
This is exceptional from start to finish. Who says love poems ever get old. Not in my opinion.
A superb piece of elegant and eloquent poetic genius. :))
Ange
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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It is you, Ange, who are more lovely and more temperate, indeed. I'm inclined to simply believe these words and spend the next few days smiling. What encouraging and wonderful things to say. Honestly the imagery is easy to scribe when it appears before me. The heart and yearning speak for themselves, I merely scribble down their thoughts.
I may and try a little trick in the days to come just for you. Keep your eyes on the sun, I plan to make it wink.
Thank you so much, Lovely women
Mav
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mikey!
And THIS is why you are the recognized writer this month. Leading by example, as you always do, and making us strive to improve our game and aspire to emulate your success! This is WONDERFUL!!!!! (And you know that writing free verse is one of my least favorite forms lol thank goodness you don't hold that against me! Besides, you do it well enough for both of us!!)
This is amazing and truly a SIX!!! My favorite passage:
your words
a laureate's revelation
thrill like rapids coursing
through my mind
your heart revealed
in casual observation
smiles understood
tears shared in secret
unspoken fingers clasping
as I grasp stars in the night
to fill your sky
hoping it is I
you wish upon
Thank you for sharing! Your brilliance shines through like diamonds in the night!
Bravo!!
Kim
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Hi Mikey!
And THIS is why you are the recognized writer this month. Leading by example, as you always do, and making us strive to improve our game and aspire to emulate your success! This is WONDERFUL!!!!! (And you know that writing free verse is one of my least favorite forms lol thank goodness you don't hold that against me! Besides, you do it well enough for both of us!!)
This is amazing and truly a SIX!!! My favorite passage:
your words
a laureate's revelation
thrill like rapids coursing
through my mind
your heart revealed
in casual observation
smiles understood
tears shared in secret
unspoken fingers clasping
as I grasp stars in the night
to fill your sky
hoping it is I
you wish upon
Thank you for sharing! Your brilliance shines through like diamonds in the night!
Bravo!!
Kim
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
Comment from nbonner
Very vivid dream of the person you want to meet. It's nice to have these thoughts because sometimes they can come true. Thank you for sharing
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Very vivid dream of the person you want to meet. It's nice to have these thoughts because sometimes they can come true. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wish I had a six left to place on this post. The problem is, if I had read it the day you posted it, I would have a six. DARN!!! This is wonderful and I want to thank you for sharing it.
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I wish I had a six left to place on this post. The problem is, if I had read it the day you posted it, I would have a six. DARN!!! This is wonderful and I want to thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
Comment from rspoet
Hello Michael,
What crosses my mind is that this is a splendid poem
that crosses time and space
and has electricity enough to shock
the most casual who might happen to read
and say: Yes! that is it, exactly.
Wish I had the stars left,
I'll borrow six from that glorious image
Oh, to be on sugar mountain
RS
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Hello Michael,
What crosses my mind is that this is a splendid poem
that crosses time and space
and has electricity enough to shock
the most casual who might happen to read
and say: Yes! that is it, exactly.
Wish I had the stars left,
I'll borrow six from that glorious image
Oh, to be on sugar mountain
RS
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and presentation.
-Very well penned poem, Michael.
-The poem flows from one idea
to the next so smoothly.
-The imagery is vivid so
you can picture each scene:
"your words
a laureate's revelation"
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-Good image and presentation.
-Very well penned poem, Michael.
-The poem flows from one idea
to the next so smoothly.
-The imagery is vivid so
you can picture each scene:
"your words
a laureate's revelation"
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
Comment from Joy Graham
Wow! This poem and picture are bundled into a fine experience for the reader. I enjoyed your rhymes that were skillfully placed throughout in this free verse poem. Your message reaches through the internet and profoundly touches the reader. You are in top form here, Michael. This leaves no doubt that you are an excellent pick for Writer of the Month. Congratulations on that!
(I have a picture similar to the one you have here that I was pondering for a future poem. Now I think I better drop it. I couldn't come close to your genius here).
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Wow! This poem and picture are bundled into a fine experience for the reader. I enjoyed your rhymes that were skillfully placed throughout in this free verse poem. Your message reaches through the internet and profoundly touches the reader. You are in top form here, Michael. This leaves no doubt that you are an excellent pick for Writer of the Month. Congratulations on that!
(I have a picture similar to the one you have here that I was pondering for a future poem. Now I think I better drop it. I couldn't come close to your genius here).
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
Comment from dragonpoet
What a case of unrequited love. This guy needs to talk to this girl to quiet the daydreams and maybe take the chance to make some of them real.
I like the vignettes that describe what love should be like when it is shared.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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What a case of unrequited love. This guy needs to talk to this girl to quiet the daydreams and maybe take the chance to make some of them real.
I like the vignettes that describe what love should be like when it is shared.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
