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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Section 2-Part 1: Ghost Sighting"Cody's worst nightmare from Hell becomes reality!
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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Cody sure has grown to like the freedom and safety he had
Previosly only dreamed of.
I like the connection made between the boy and the dog as
Unwanteds rescued and now building a brighter future.
As always though dark clouds always linger and it seems Cody
May well feel their wrath.
The storyline is engaging and maintains interest and continuity.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Cody sure has grown to like the freedom and safety he had
Previosly only dreamed of.
I like the connection made between the boy and the dog as
Unwanteds rescued and now building a brighter future.
As always though dark clouds always linger and it seems Cody
May well feel their wrath.
The storyline is engaging and maintains interest and continuity.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from lyenochka
These sequences of memories and descriptions of Cody make me really like the boy and his wild outdoor lifestyle, including eating rattlesnakes. (oh my!) Realistic touch about Blazer liking the shade as I know black labs are really affected by the sun. One place I had a question was : ", he rode through the grey chaparral, " At the start, he "strolled" so I was surprised that when he went to play with his friends, he "rode." Was he on a horse? If so, shouldn't the horse get mentioned? Otherwise, enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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These sequences of memories and descriptions of Cody make me really like the boy and his wild outdoor lifestyle, including eating rattlesnakes. (oh my!) Realistic touch about Blazer liking the shade as I know black labs are really affected by the sun. One place I had a question was : ", he rode through the grey chaparral, " At the start, he "strolled" so I was surprised that when he went to play with his friends, he "rode." Was he on a horse? If so, shouldn't the horse get mentioned? Otherwise, enjoyable read.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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He was on his bicycle.
Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from emptypage
Ah, I see now. You are posting the word count TO DATE for the book. I was seriously wondering if you knew someone who thought 1100 words was a book after the last chapter.
I remember Cody now, too. I loved your stories about him.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Ah, I see now. You are posting the word count TO DATE for the book. I was seriously wondering if you knew someone who thought 1100 words was a book after the last chapter.
I remember Cody now, too. I loved your stories about him.
Nice job.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Again this is excellently written with no mistakes noted. You took us to the base level and introduced us again to Cody and his thoughts which make up the base of your pieces
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Again this is excellently written with no mistakes noted. You took us to the base level and introduced us again to Cody and his thoughts which make up the base of your pieces
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Always appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This part was wonderful to read. You sure are good at writing stories.
I really love to read them. I will always look forward to reading more.
Kat
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Brett,
This part was wonderful to read. You sure are good at writing stories.
I really love to read them. I will always look forward to reading more.
Kat
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter talked about the character of Cody, his, bike, dog, and Adventures.
It talked about several characters that are important to the book.
Theme and Imagery, Adjective Content, Objective Content, all were was presented and all wonderful.
Dr. Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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This chapter talked about the character of Cody, his, bike, dog, and Adventures.
It talked about several characters that are important to the book.
Theme and Imagery, Adjective Content, Objective Content, all were was presented and all wonderful.
Dr. Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Brett; while your writing has improved so much since I've started reading your posts, you still struggle with the use of the comma.
May I suggest you look online to find some articles and teachings about the comma and its proper use? I have several style guides that have helped me tremendously.
Some things to ponder; '"Nine o'clock on the am side of the dial and the sun is already blazing down!"' (the use of 'am' looks weird in its written form. I suggest either delineating with periods, a.m., or find another way to say its morning.)
'Cody had killed four large cottonmouths in the last two weeks he'd found slithering across their property. (Perhaps change the order; Cody had killed four large cottonmouths, he'd found slithering across their property, in the last two weeks.)
'He raced off(+,) headed for Sullivan Lake(+,) to meet up with Matt Cochran and several other playmates for the morning.'
'One of Cody's favorite delicacies, rattlesnakes(+,) were another story.'
~patty~
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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Brett; while your writing has improved so much since I've started reading your posts, you still struggle with the use of the comma.
May I suggest you look online to find some articles and teachings about the comma and its proper use? I have several style guides that have helped me tremendously.
Some things to ponder; '"Nine o'clock on the am side of the dial and the sun is already blazing down!"' (the use of 'am' looks weird in its written form. I suggest either delineating with periods, a.m., or find another way to say its morning.)
'Cody had killed four large cottonmouths in the last two weeks he'd found slithering across their property. (Perhaps change the order; Cody had killed four large cottonmouths, he'd found slithering across their property, in the last two weeks.)
'He raced off(+,) headed for Sullivan Lake(+,) to meet up with Matt Cochran and several other playmates for the morning.'
'One of Cody's favorite delicacies, rattlesnakes(+,) were another story.'
~patty~
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Appreciate the comments, support, and reviews.
Keep those nits coming!
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Possummagic
Great story and yes, I'm champing at the bit for the next instalment. I like little Cody and hope that you don't let anything bad happen to him. I'm glad he has blazer for company.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Great story and yes, I'm champing at the bit for the next instalment. I like little Cody and hope that you don't let anything bad happen to him. I'm glad he has blazer for company.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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You're welcome
Comment from Rasmine
Brett,
Hello. One thing stands out. You use the name 'Cody' way too much. If there isn't another character mentioned last, then you could use a pronoun such as 'he', 'him', or 'his'. I learned that so I'm sharing with you!
Take care.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Brett,
Hello. One thing stands out. You use the name 'Cody' way too much. If there isn't another character mentioned last, then you could use a pronoun such as 'he', 'him', or 'his'. I learned that so I'm sharing with you!
Take care.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Appreciate your review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how Sheriff Daniels has been attached to and is proud of Cody's thoughtfulness as he has presented Cody with a new bike of his own on New Year's Day, once he was shot, a scandal shocked the town; now Cody is living safe; I liked.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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This speaks how Sheriff Daniels has been attached to and is proud of Cody's thoughtfulness as he has presented Cody with a new bike of his own on New Year's Day, once he was shot, a scandal shocked the town; now Cody is living safe; I liked.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
