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Animal poetry and short stories

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Comment from nomi338
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Bill I just have to say that the mind that conceived this piece might be just a bit disturbed. Maybe you should seek some kind of help. The last time I encountered this type of extreme psychosis, I was doing some self analysis and was shocked at what I found. And now this. Actually, I think that we might both be just a little bit off. Welcome my brother.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    Thanks, nomi, for sticking with it despite the indications of mental instability.
    Bill, Destroyer of Flies.
reply by nomi338 on 07-Aug-2017
    Hey I'm in too far to back out now.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hello Bill. A very "sweet" sentiment lol. I like that they are actual poetry and you make each one an original work of art! Nice work on this one too. regards Kiwi

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
    Thanks, kiwi.
Comment from BeasPeas
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You are getting more creative with each one you write. Great job.
Favorite lines here are:
"It will all soon end
in our dramatic epic
of the kitchen chase"
So true, LOL.
Marilyn

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
    Thanks, Marilyn
Comment from damommy
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I hate to seem grumpy, but I couldn't read the green font. Old eyes, you know. However, I don't want you to not have a review for it. If you could send it to me, I'll review it better. 8 -)

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
    Fixed it.
Comment from Poetic Friend
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Okay, Bill, I am little lost with this poem. I am confused as to why certain letters are highlighted in brown. Also, the green text you used with the beige background makes the poem difficult to read.

The little I able to read captured the essence of the fly.


 Comment Written 04-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
    I am sorry for the light green text. The brown letters were on double letters and, somehow made me think I was projecting flies and excrement. This Fly World is driving me make poor color choices.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
    Fixed it
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks about the hurdles, struggles for life; how after many kicks and sweeps from homes we fly up to rest and again we come back on earth for foods; I liked.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
    Thanks, ALD