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Unknowns

A possible solution to a universal mystery

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Comment from Bucketlist
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My take is the "attempt to put reason into faith" because faith is spiritual and somewhat mysterious. Current worldly events divide Faith when it should be unified. Love and hate are
antonyms under the same faith 'umbrella' . I loved your intellectual poem. Good luck with this great entry in the contest.
Virtual hugs Trisha

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
    Thanks, Trisha. You have hit on the root cause of many of our problems in this world - the divisive nature of Faith with a capital letter - a tragedy when one considers that the core ethics of all the world's major religions are so similar.
reply by Bucketlist on 05-Aug-2017
    I never understood why religion is supposed to unite us, but is the cause of "holy wars" You are
    Always welcome
Comment from Asem.inspirations
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Hello Fawcus,

This is another genius poem from you. I love your play on words, especially "Y and Why" - very smart . I also agree with what you are saying in both the poem and the Arthur notes. Below are my favorite lines.

but we can solve our lives for x
if logic is displaced,
by taking why right out of it,
and substituting faith.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
    Thank you, Tier. A genius poem! High praise indeed. I'm flattered!
Comment from country ranch writer
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Math can't solve the love of God ,you first must have faith. Faith in your self and others before on can begin to solve what's wrong with this world of ours

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
    An interesting comment. Simple faith, with a small 'f' is, perhaps, the solution. Sadly man's varying interpretations of Faith with a capital 'F' is a major part of the problem. Would that we were not so divided by our certainties.
reply by country ranch writer on 05-Aug-2017
    Smiles
Comment from Curly Girly
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Hi, Tony-polony.

I liked this brilliant poem. Great last stanza:
but we can solve our lives for x
if logic is displaced,
by taking why right out of it, / Suggest: put 'why' in italics.
and substituting faith.

Bright spark!

Nicole

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
    Thanks for your shiny sparks and bright suggestion, Curly Girly. Perhaps I should change my nom de plume!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Faith or science or mathematics I don't think you'll ever get a definite answer on this one but you've certainly taken a different path for your Faith Poetry contest entry. Well written and good luck in the contest.
cheers.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
    You are right - no definite answers - which is why I don't spend too much time contemplating 'why'. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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I wish I had thought of X like that at school, Tony. Maybe I could have done better and algebra! LOL But yes, a little more faith and a little less why could do wonders for society. It is so interesting to read about early days when church was a habit every Sunday and we all took God for granted as being part of our lives. Perhaps that was the problem, taking Him for granted.. Giddy :))

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
    Algebra wasn't one of my strong points either. I had a tendency to substitute faith for study! LOL
Comment from lyenochka
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Lol. I like it! Although, I can't imagine that the secret of the universe is 2.5. I think Hitchhiker's Guide said it was 42. Perhaps Pascal believed that faith was presentable in math. My first college math prof, wrote: "1 + 1 = 0" and I was lost all semester as we had to keep solving things like that. But I like your conclusion to take "y" or "why" right out of it and surrender to faith in God. But I believe He doesn't mind questions and doubts at all.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
    I hope He doesn't mind - for I have plenty of them! I gather that the ancients had 7 marked down as God's number, so I'm a bit off the mark!
Comment from estory
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I think the rigid construction suits the mathematical subject matter, its an interesting take on the relationship between God and man by looking at it as a mathematical equation. It reads a bit tongue in cheek, it has a nice upbeat meter, and the rhyme scheme aids in that. Kind of a humorous look at solving the problem of the relationship between man and God. estory

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    Somewhat tongue-in-cheek. True!
Comment from catch22
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Hi T, what a cool poem about faith or doubt of godheads! I think the language of the universe is math and if one wishes to speak with God, one needs to speak the right language. Great rhyming and clever metaphor throughout.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    If the mathematical approach could unite the world religions, I imagine that whatever God or gods there might be, would perhaps be more inclined to listen. Kind regards, Tony
Comment from His Grayness
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So sorry to not have the sixth star this work really deserves! The very unique presentation method using a mathematic analogy, is brilliant and very well done. The message intention of this work is a spiritual gift and delivered with awesome power and value. I loved it in all ways! HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    Thank you, Vance. I always appreciate your encouraging words. Best wishes, Tony
reply by His Grayness on 07-Aug-2017
    always my joy Tony ! Vance