My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "She loves her Pearls"a collection of my poetry
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Rondelet for the 'picture this' challenge. An excellent interpretation of the picture. Unfortunately, your fourth line should rhyme with pearls.
Each strand is a different length
(Each lengthy strand, uniquely twirls) NS suggested change)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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A very well-written Rondelet for the 'picture this' challenge. An excellent interpretation of the picture. Unfortunately, your fourth line should rhyme with pearls.
Each strand is a different length
(Each lengthy strand, uniquely twirls) NS suggested change)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Hi Sandra; thank you for catching the total miss of the pattern. I like your suggestion,
~patty~
Comment from Bill Schott
This rondelet, She Loves Her Pearls, has the correct structure, I think, and definitely drives home the point that this woman has an engrossing affection for these extravagant pearls. Nice.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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This rondelet, She Loves Her Pearls, has the correct structure, I think, and definitely drives home the point that this woman has an engrossing affection for these extravagant pearls. Nice.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Hi Bill;
this was a fun challenge. This picture conjured up many memories for me - pearls are a favorite of mine. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece, and it conjured up some thoughts for you,
~patty~
Comment from MJ McIntire
The vision I got when reading this, is of a little girl playing dress up. Some pearls are to her knee's is what made me picture a little girl.
When I read what you write it is so easy to picture it. You make writing seem so effortless.
MJ
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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The vision I got when reading this, is of a little girl playing dress up. Some pearls are to her knee's is what made me picture a little girl.
When I read what you write it is so easy to picture it. You make writing seem so effortless.
MJ
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Hi MJ; thank you so much for the wonderful compliment
this was a fun challenge. This picture conjured up many memories for me - pearls are a favorite of mine. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece, and it conjured up some thoughts for you,
~patty~
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I admit I have no idea about how to write a Rondelet but this is a beautiful poem so what does it matter. I think it could be just as beautiful in free verse to be honest. I hope you do well in the competition kindest regards and well done Meia xx
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I admit I have no idea about how to write a Rondelet but this is a beautiful poem so what does it matter. I think it could be just as beautiful in free verse to be honest. I hope you do well in the competition kindest regards and well done Meia xx
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Hi Meia;
this was a fun challenge. This picture conjured up many memories for me - pearls are a favorite of mine. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece, and it conjured up some thoughts for you,
~patty~
