Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "haibun (dead flowers)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
26 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Gypsy Blue Rose, Well done and an excellent look into depression. Of special note:
When I wake up my first thought is, oh God another day of emptiness.
(real writing.)
Your haiku ending speaks volumes and is filled with vivid imagery. Today you wrote something brave.
Best wishes in the voting booth. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Hello Gypsy Blue Rose, Well done and an excellent look into depression. Of special note:
When I wake up my first thought is, oh God another day of emptiness.
(real writing.)
Your haiku ending speaks volumes and is filled with vivid imagery. Today you wrote something brave.
Best wishes in the voting booth. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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thank you for the six stars, my friend, I appreciate your review and kind words.
gypsy hugs
Comment from Just2Write
Haibun is one of my favourite Japanese forms and you have done well with the composition of this one. It is full of insight into the troubled thoughts of a person living with depression. The prose portion of the Haibun is precise and tells about the way time distorts, disappears and rematerializes.
The Haiku sums the prose portion up beautifully. Even in death, there is life.
Perhaps that also translates to even in despair, there is hope.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Haibun is one of my favourite Japanese forms and you have done well with the composition of this one. It is full of insight into the troubled thoughts of a person living with depression. The prose portion of the Haibun is precise and tells about the way time distorts, disappears and rematerializes.
The Haiku sums the prose portion up beautifully. Even in death, there is life.
Perhaps that also translates to even in despair, there is hope.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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thank you very much, my friend
Comment from Ulla
Hola Guapa. Como estas? This is and outstanding haibun about dead flowers, an I also know you express your self from past experience. It's beautiful, and I wish I had a six for you. Un abrazo de tu Amiga Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Hola Guapa. Como estas? This is and outstanding haibun about dead flowers, an I also know you express your self from past experience. It's beautiful, and I wish I had a six for you. Un abrazo de tu Amiga Ulla:)))
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Hola, guapa, thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.... I always appreciate it.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
One rarely thinks of flowers in the sense of the dead ones, Gypsy, but you always find an alternative to the usual road we all follow. I don't see inertia in your life thank goodness, but it seems an appropriate Satori for this one, Giddy
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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One rarely thinks of flowers in the sense of the dead ones, Gypsy, but you always find an alternative to the usual road we all follow. I don't see inertia in your life thank goodness, but it seems an appropriate Satori for this one, Giddy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.... I always appreciate it.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from BOO ghost
Something must die for something to live. The dead flower is reincarnated into beautiful blossoms. If we plant our seeds into the ground with expectation with reap a harvest. Good things come in due time. Not overnight. There is the doldrums in the eye of a hurricane. The storm will pass and the sun will shine again some day. Takes rain to make things grow. Without darkness there would be no conception of light. BOO-terrific!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Something must die for something to live. The dead flower is reincarnated into beautiful blossoms. If we plant our seeds into the ground with expectation with reap a harvest. Good things come in due time. Not overnight. There is the doldrums in the eye of a hurricane. The storm will pass and the sun will shine again some day. Takes rain to make things grow. Without darkness there would be no conception of light. BOO-terrific!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie and thank you for the six stars.
Gypsy hugs
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BOO invisible hugs back. Review day!
Comment from Grasshopper2
MariVal,
Congratulations on winning!
Six stars for the courage it takes to post a piece of your soul for any one to read. Many may think this is merely an exercise, but I recognize the truth in the words you have birthed and am sorry for your pain. If I can help, let me know.
Michael
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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MariVal,
Congratulations on winning!
Six stars for the courage it takes to post a piece of your soul for any one to read. Many may think this is merely an exercise, but I recognize the truth in the words you have birthed and am sorry for your pain. If I can help, let me know.
Michael
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie and thank you for the six stars.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is really good, my friend. You really capture the struggle with depression. I hope the new meds kick in soon. You are always in my prayers. Hang in there
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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This is really good, my friend. You really capture the struggle with depression. I hope the new meds kick in soon. You are always in my prayers. Hang in there
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie and thank you for the six stars.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend depression is a terrible illness when it takes hold it can destroy a person's life this is well written the closing line gives hope for the future well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend depression is a terrible illness when it takes hold it can destroy a person's life this is well written the closing line gives hope for the future well done regards Jill
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. Have a nice day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Gypsy, :)
I'm sorry for your depression unless this is just writing. I have made that mistake before thinking it was real when it was just made up. I think it's real, though, because I have felt that way, probably not as bad as that. What I did, and it worked, is a meditation I made up. I sat in front of a candle and sent my sadness and depression in it to the universe. It took many months but it got better.
Take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Hello, Gypsy, :)
I'm sorry for your depression unless this is just writing. I have made that mistake before thinking it was real when it was just made up. I think it's real, though, because I have felt that way, probably not as bad as that. What I did, and it worked, is a meditation I made up. I sat in front of a candle and sent my sadness and depression in it to the universe. It took many months but it got better.
Take care,
Nome
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. Have a nice day. It's true
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Gypsy; I am so sorry you are dealing with the depression. It makes for a difficult time, and the feeling of 'wasting time' as the emptiness washes over you day after day is horrible.
I do hope you will start to find your way towards the light soon. I know when I'm down in the depths of despair, waiting for the lift I know will come is the only way to get through each day,
(((HUGS)))
~patty~
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Hi Gypsy; I am so sorry you are dealing with the depression. It makes for a difficult time, and the feeling of 'wasting time' as the emptiness washes over you day after day is horrible.
I do hope you will start to find your way towards the light soon. I know when I'm down in the depths of despair, waiting for the lift I know will come is the only way to get through each day,
(((HUGS)))
~patty~
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. Have a nice day.
Gypsy hugs
