Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks the diurnal process, the rule of Nature, planetary system, father sun kisses daughter moon at the end of the day as she goes to her rest; I liked.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017

Hello friend, Thanks for dropping by and glad you liked the one-liner! Cheers from Australia. Kay.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

You did well creating a one line that is poetic and full of vivid images. You have a smooth flow of words and the moon and sun are like live characters. I wish you well in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Hullo my friend, thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings, Kay XX

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

This is a virtual 6 for a brilliant one liner! Kay, that is beautiful!
Good luck in the contest, my friend, it's a very, very strong contender!
Lots of love my friend, Sandra xxxx

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

G'day mate! Thanks for reading and I did try hard to win a contest! Lots of Love, Kay XXXXXXXXXXXXX

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

Lovely work with this monostich and a great entry for this fun contest. I always see the sun as the mother but like that you chose to make him the father. Excellent work with this and I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Hello my friend, Thanks so much for reading, so glad you liked. Love, Kay.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hello Aussie. Well now you can say so much in so few words. This is dreamy and beautiful and the presentation is absolutely gorgeous. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

G'day mate, Glad you liked, thank you for reading. Cheers, Kay.

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Wow! One line that says volumes. A breathtaking picture. I don't think I ever tried a one line poem, maybe I should.

I liked your father son/daughter moon relationship.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Hello my friend, Thanks so much for your kind review. Glad you liked the poem?

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A clever and thoughtful poem as an entry in this one line poetry contest Kay. I like the idea of a very affectionate father sun, kissing his solar system companion, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Hello Roy, Thanks so much for your kind review. Hope you are keeping warm and well over there? Blessings, Kay.

reply by royowen on 26-Jul-2017

I am thanks Kay, you are warm I know, a bit cold here. Roy

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

These one-line poems are difficult to make much of, but this is a lovely image of domestic bliss. I like the idea of the sun tucking the moon up in bed and giving her a kiss!

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 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Thank you my friend. I don't see much point in a one-line poem. I guess we have to tell a story in a line. Blessings, Kay. XX