Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "haiku (red rose of love)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
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Comment from robina1978
A beautiful photo of a red rose with some white, symbol of love, wilts and fades to white. Thorn pricks too deep. A faultless Haiku for this book.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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A beautiful photo of a red rose with some white, symbol of love, wilts and fades to white. Thorn pricks too deep. A faultless Haiku for this book.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you Ine:)
Comment from Janet Foor
Very nice haiku Teresa.
I'm exploring the haiku and haibun form and find it quite a challenge.
You have created a thought provoking message in this one.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Very nice haiku Teresa.
I'm exploring the haiku and haibun form and find it quite a challenge.
You have created a thought provoking message in this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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There is so much to writing haiku and haibun. I hope you give it a try! Thanks for the review:)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a true feeling of love status as the red rose of love is seen evidently now fading to white and thorn pricks too deep and fate of love is so correctly depicted; I liked.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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This speaks a true feeling of love status as the red rose of love is seen evidently now fading to white and thorn pricks too deep and fate of love is so correctly depicted; I liked.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from c_lucas
Roses have a cruel for of protection
Thorny branches keep irresponsible admirers at by
The symbol of Love
Makes a beautify bouquet
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Roses have a cruel for of protection
Thorny branches keep irresponsible admirers at by
The symbol of Love
Makes a beautify bouquet
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks:)
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You're welcome
Comment from Eternal Muse
A beautiful haiku about a rose. A perfectly composed in form, gorgeous in imagery and visuals.
I had a little trouble understanding "wilts and fade to white" - it's "to white' part didn't get. Sorry for being dense (lol).
A lovely addition to the book.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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A beautiful haiku about a rose. A perfectly composed in form, gorgeous in imagery and visuals.
I had a little trouble understanding "wilts and fade to white" - it's "to white' part didn't get. Sorry for being dense (lol).
A lovely addition to the book.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you :)
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I had a generic "Thank you". But I asked a question in the review which you didn't answer.
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Sorry. You didn't exactly ask a question. A metaphor - the rose (of love) bled out being pricked too deeply by the thorn.
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No, I asked what the second line meant:
"wilts and fades to white" - it's "on white" part I didn't get
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You said I didn't exactly ask a question.
This is a quote from my review:
I had a little trouble understanding "wilts and fade to white" - it's "to white' part didn't get.
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I guess I read it as a statement not question, sorry. Have a nice day:)
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I still didn't get the answer. What is the "white" referred to in the second line?
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white and in pales - fades to white.
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Thank you. Sorry for all this commotion. You probably got a lot of reviews because of your poem's position - it's hard to reply to everyone.
Comment from SarahPenn1
Excellent alliteration in the first line
Beautiful artwork
I love the honesty with this as indeed love does wilt and fade, and it is painful- indicated by the third line
Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Excellent alliteration in the first line
Beautiful artwork
I love the honesty with this as indeed love does wilt and fade, and it is painful- indicated by the third line
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much;)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ohhhh, I really enjoyed this haiku, Teresa.
It bled out, did it?
While the first cut is always the deepest, it's all the tiny cuts that follow which add up and bleed us dry.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, could refer to a couple of different things in this.
Nicely done!
~Dean ;)
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Ohhhh, I really enjoyed this haiku, Teresa.
It bled out, did it?
While the first cut is always the deepest, it's all the tiny cuts that follow which add up and bleed us dry.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, could refer to a couple of different things in this.
Nicely done!
~Dean ;)
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you Dean. Yes, you understood it completely.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Teresa; isn't it true that the thorns of love hurt so much when the first blush has burned away. The lust may burn out, but true love will exist on embers.
A well structured haiku,
~patty~
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Hi Teresa; isn't it true that the thorns of love hurt so much when the first blush has burned away. The lust may burn out, but true love will exist on embers.
A well structured haiku,
~patty~
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you Patty:)
