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Paris Dreaming

Brings back memories of my mom. :)

13 total reviews 
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem and an excellent solution for poor people who cannot afford to travel to Paris. Bring Paris to you by wearing your favorite perfume from Paris.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
    Hahahaha...I enjoyed writing this and I'm glad you liked it as well. It really does make me think of my mom, she wore it all the time. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
Comment from BeasPeas
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You remember Paris for a different reason from all the other entries--your mom. What a nice gesture for this contest. I remember the scent, too. Your 5-7-5 is a from the heart memory which is very nice. Marilyn

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
    Thank you for your nice review, I love to hear what other writers think.
Comment from Irish Rain
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There it is!! This is what this contest reminded me of! I've never smelled it, but I always wanted to. I love this nostalgic entry! Blessings...

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem, I really appreciate it.
Comment from RebelRose
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This deserves 5 stars for originality alone. You took an entirely different course from the others. Well done. I remember this fragrance from years past. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
    Thank you, it's means a lot to me to hear what other writers think.
Comment from frogbook
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Ha-I remember this scent-Whoo-whee, a bit strong as I recall from my grandma-haha. A great nostalgic memory and a very original idea.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much. My mom wore it and I also received it for Christmas. It made me feel very grown up😊.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This 5-7-5, Paris Dreaming, has the right set up and follows the Paris theme by using our noses to sniff out what most of us have as Parisian memory; some great essence that sticks with you through your whole life. Nice.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
    Thanks for your review, I love hearing feedback from other writers.
Comment from pipersfancy
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An interesting take on the writing prompt - I appreciate your creativity!

Never went there though.
- this line is a bit ambiguous. Upon first reading, I thought it referred to the poet having never used that scent (i.e. gone there), until I thought about it and realized it refers to a mother who never got to see Paris.

A suggestion to consider:

"Evening in Paris"
My mother's favorite scent!
Never went there though.

vs

"Evening in Paris"
My mother's favorite scent!
She longed to go there.

Best wishes for the contest,
pf

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017
    Thank you for your suggestions. I think you're right, it needs to be changed. I was trying to go for humor., but that doesn't always work. I really appreciate the feedback, it really helps.
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Unfortunately I have never had the pleasure of visiting Paris either, or any part of Europe for that matter.
Perhaps one of these days...
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    Thank you. My mother was from England and not too far from Paris . WWII was happening then though, so she was never able to go. I myself would love to go to England , as I feel I have a connection there.Maybe someday.
reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Jul-2017
    I feel that same "draw" to England myself. perhaps it is due to our heritage?
    Best of luck!
    ~Dean :)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Sis Cat
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Yes, yes, this is a fine Paris 5-7-5 that reminded me of my mother, not her favorite perfume, but her desire to go to Paris to become a fashion designer. She never did, but she gave me a French name and I went to Paris twice. Your poem captures the dreams of mothers who long to go to the City of Lights.

Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much for your nice review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
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A beautiful 5-7-5 about 'Evening in Paris.' I remember that scent. I'm sorry your mother didn't get to go to Paris. I've visited twice and I don't think I'll ever get over the feeling that comes over you as you tour the city. When you are within sight of the tower, it is the grace of the sky,

~patty~

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    I would love to go there as well. Seeing it in pictures or on t.v. Is not the same. Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, I really appreciate it.
reply by Mustang Patty on 25-Jul-2017
    No, seeing it on TV doesn't convey the magic. I do hope you have the opportunity to go some time,

    ~p~