Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
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Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, His Knees Ache, captures the endurance needed to push the body past what you think it can do to the race's end proving what you now know you can do. Congrats!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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This senryu, His Knees Ache, captures the endurance needed to push the body past what you think it can do to the race's end proving what you now know you can do. Congrats!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Yes, Bill, the race this year was harder for me because my knees and feet were not in the best of condition. Unbeknownst to me at the time, my feet suffered from neuroma--ball of foot pain--from the repetitive stress of walking five miles a day. Despite limping for miles, I crossed the finish line near last an hour later, and got help from my doctor and physical therapist.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oooooh, that is a painful poem! I watch these marathons and wonder why the runners put themselves through such pain. When I see their faces as they finish the race so filled with pride and joy, I realise, it's the challenge and the actual doing it that spurs them on. I admire you all! Very well done and big congratulations!! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oooooh, that is a painful poem! I watch these marathons and wonder why the runners put themselves through such pain. When I see their faces as they finish the race so filled with pride and joy, I realise, it's the challenge and the actual doing it that spurs them on. I admire you all! Very well done and big congratulations!! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Sandra, for your review and congratulations. Yes, it is the challenge that spurned me on. Thanks.
Comment from Hansel1
Long distance running is such a grueling endeavor. I commend you for being involved. It takes a lot of grit to fight through that proverbial "wall." Hopefully the stress in your lower extremities gets resolved.
Your piece provides an agonizing image of 'just making it through' - Cheers!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Long distance running is such a grueling endeavor. I commend you for being involved. It takes a lot of grit to fight through that proverbial "wall." Hopefully the stress in your lower extremities gets resolved.
Your piece provides an agonizing image of 'just making it through' - Cheers!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Hansel, for your encouraging review. This week my doctor and physical therapist diagnosed me with neuroma--ball of foot pain--and prescribed calve stretches and foot massages. I am now running a light jog. Thanks.
Comment from closetpoetjester
A highly descriptive and vivid run or should I say, limp LOL to the finish...complete with a prayer to Our Father along the way.
I'm sure he was shining down on you but I'd say you had the majority of the sway on this one LOL
Well done. You are VERY fit in spite of the way you pulled up after. I'm sure that would test the finest of athletes.
Well written. I was cheering you on from the sidelines in your slow mo joint aching faith testing collapse to the end!
Cheers P
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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A highly descriptive and vivid run or should I say, limp LOL to the finish...complete with a prayer to Our Father along the way.
I'm sure he was shining down on you but I'd say you had the majority of the sway on this one LOL
Well done. You are VERY fit in spite of the way you pulled up after. I'm sure that would test the finest of athletes.
Well written. I was cheering you on from the sidelines in your slow mo joint aching faith testing collapse to the end!
Cheers P
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, P, for your encouraging review. The funniest moment for me was when I limped toward the finish line an hour later and found that the following race for kids was now in progress. I crossed the finish line outraced by kids one-tenth my age as proud parents photographed them and this limping man getting in their shots. Thanks.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Wow, what a feat. Congratulations on your achievement, but oh, I can imagine how your knees must ache! Great artistic presentation, and thank you for your contribution to the site's haiku book.
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Wow, what a feat. Congratulations on your achievement, but oh, I can imagine how your knees must ache! Great artistic presentation, and thank you for your contribution to the site's haiku book.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Yelena, for your review and encouragement. After a month of limping, this week my doctor and physical therapist diagnosed me with neuroma--ball of foot pain--and prescribed calve stretches and foot massages. I am now running a light jog. Thanks.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Wow. I use to run way back in the day but never this far. I can imagine how your knees were feeling. Ouch. Good for you. At least you made it across, even if it was limping. This is a great little senryu, SC. It brought back some old memories. Have a great day. Keep up the good work.
DS
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Wow. I use to run way back in the day but never this far. I can imagine how your knees were feeling. Ouch. Good for you. At least you made it across, even if it was limping. This is a great little senryu, SC. It brought back some old memories. Have a great day. Keep up the good work.
DS
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, DS, for your review and encouragement. I am glad my poem brought back memories. I will keep up the good work and writes.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Andre
This is a wonderful Haiku poem.
Which describes the pain and strain with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which puts you right there feeling every step of the way.
and a lovely picture to accompany
Mitchell
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Andre
This is a wonderful Haiku poem.
Which describes the pain and strain with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which puts you right there feeling every step of the way.
and a lovely picture to accompany
Mitchell
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Mitchell, for your review. I am glad my poem put you right there every step of the way. That's me in the picture!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I've been there! Did one marathon and it's not easy! Well done! And your poem is a delight, filled with pain and glory! Hope you recover soon! Love Dolly x
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I've been there! Did one marathon and it's not easy! Well done! And your poem is a delight, filled with pain and glory! Hope you recover soon! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dolly, for your encouraging review. This week my doctor and physical therapist diagnosed me with neuroma--ball of foot pain--and prescribed calve stretches and foot massages. I am now running a light jog. Thanks.
Comment from Bichon
Oh, I think we all know this pain too well. Congratulations for jogging again. Lovely little Haiku too, it gave me an insight to your feelings when coming across the finish line.
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Oh, I think we all know this pain too well. Congratulations for jogging again. Lovely little Haiku too, it gave me an insight to your feelings when coming across the finish line.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Bichon, for your review and congratulations. Yes, I felt elated when I crossed the finish line. Thanks.
Comment from robina1978
A nice photo that complements your tiny poem very well. This is a true Senryu with you in it. Limping over the finish line is not so nice. I wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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A nice photo that complements your tiny poem very well. This is a true Senryu with you in it. Limping over the finish line is not so nice. I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Robina, for your review and wishing me the best. After physical therapy, I am able to jog again. Thanks.
