Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

= So sad, but so true. Too many soldiers coming home in a box.
= Excellent story you read into this picture.
= Nicely penned.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers <> Jax / Jackie

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

This is such a sad poem. I can't imagine how hard it is for a son to lose his father. Your poem pays fair tribute to these kids.
Understanding death is a difficult thing for young kids, but eventually, they get it.
Daddy's not coming home.
Nicole

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

Hi Nicole; it is awful how many children grow up without a parent due to war,

Sorry for this being a bit late - I haven't been feeling well,

~patty~

reply by Curly Girly on 19-Jul-2017

I hope you feel well soon.

reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

me, too

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

Wow, I read the other sweet poem with the young girl and the fishing pole, but this one is so so sad. But well done.
Thanks for sharing
Hugs HEidi

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

Hi Heidi; thank you so much for the lovely review. I like participating in the 'Picture This' prompts. It is always interesting to see how many different thoughts come from the same picture,

Sorry for this being a bit late - I haven't been feeling well,

~patty~

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Good

Hello, my friend,

A very sad poem about a little girl and her military dad who died in the war. The rhyme scheme is done effectively and the presentation is appropriate for the poem. Good job

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 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017

Hi Gypsy; thank you for the review,

~patty~

Comment from sharonlshelley

Excellent

this a lovely piece of work i really enjoyed reading the words they were quite emotional in places and loved the picture you chose. thanks for sharing your work

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017

thank you for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Excellent ABAB though very sad but that is the norm any more, isn't it?
Nicely done for the contest, the last line was a little blurred for me because of the color combination

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017

Hi Barb; thank you for the lovely review; thanks for alerting me that the last line was the wrong color,

~patty~

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Nice tribute to the untold brave numbers of men and women who have sacrificed so much--everything, in fact--for the good of all.
If anyone thinks the military life is easy, I would encourage them to try it sometime.
Nicely done, Patty.
Kudos...
~Dean

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017

Hi Dean; thank you for reading and reviewing. The picture of the lone little girl on the dock just brought up the dozens of kids I've met who never got to see Dad again,

~patty~

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

How bittersweet. It makes me want to cry. Your tale is moving. A sad reminder of the tragedy of war. And it's all so senseless. We would bring all of our soldiers home.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017

Hi Thomas; this story in a poem is for all the little kids that will never see their Dads again,

~patty~

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello ~patty~
you wanted to put mein tears--well you did iy with your pathos poem about you missing your dad especially when you said

No more hugs, no more fishin'
On his grave sits a pile of rocks
No more time wasted wishin'

Gert

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017

Hi Gert; thank you so much for reading and reviewing - I'm sorry it made you cry,

~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem and interpretation of the 'picture this' challenge. The little girl fishing all alone, like she does many times before with her Daddy, now he's gone and she will always remember him when she goes fishing.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017

Hi Sandra; thank you so much for your thoughtful review of this poem,

~patty~