Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Patty, This is a very well written poem dedicated to all the little ones that their daddy never came home. You used great wording that goes so well with the picture. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017

thank you so much, Teri - I loved paying tribute to those kids,

~patty~

reply by Teri7 on 22-Jul-2017

It was a very nice thing to do my friend!

Comment from Nikki-Nicole

Excellent

This poem tell the reader that the dad must have died in the war. That has to be hard on a child. I can only imagine.
Nice artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the picture and color of font chosen.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Hi Nicole; thank you so much for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,

~patty~

Comment from Marvin Calloway

Good

This poem has a particularly nice sentiment to it. Would that more of us had such a memory to cling to.
It's a shame that the nickname he gave you is one you don't care for. Like any good story, this one has a beginning, middle and end.
Well done.
Bill c oook

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Hi; I'm a little confused - there was no nickname in this story - nor was it a story - this is a poem.

Who is Bill?

~patty~

reply by Marvin Calloway on 20-Jul-2017

Hi Patty! Sorry about the confusion.
I thought when your Dad said, ?. . . about being a good little bug . . . ,? I thought it was a nickname for you.
I looked at your poem as the vehicle for a story.
Bill Cook is me, my real name. It sounds so plain. I thought a pen name would be better.
Marv

reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

oh -- did you mean to give it a four star? Your review sounded as if you liked it,

~p~

reply by Marvin Calloway on 20-Jul-2017

Patty
I skip over many poems. I liked this one. I think I was having trouble staying awake that night. A review should be done under better conditions. I'm sorry.
I hope to avoid having that happen again.
This poem should have been given 5 stars.
Marv

reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Hi Marv; thanks for letting me know. I now feel much better about the whole thing. It happens to all of us when we try to read longer than we should

Comment from Bichon

Excellent

A very well written poem. It flows very smoothly and was a delight to read, apart from the end verse. It's extremely sad that this happens to children now, and some don't even get to say goodbye.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Hi Chloe; thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Exceptional

Oh my goodness Patty. What a way to describe that photo. You took it to a whole new level. What an amazing dedication to the children who have lost their dads to the wars and military.

This poem is so realistic and full of soul. It is also full of the emotion that a child or anyone feels sittin at that lake wishing for the special times they will not have again until the finally giving up to the loss. Bravo...applause...applause...applause.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

Hi Tier; thank you so much for the high accolades on this piece. I was inspired by the scene of a child sitting all alone on the dock fishing and it went from there.

I greatly appreciate your kind words of encouragement and the shining sixth star - this piece came straight from the heart,

~patty~

Comment from lalajovanoski

Excellent

Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. I think that this is an amazing poem that accompanies the picture this contest very well. I love the way that this has a nice and settle of rhyming scheme. Such a sweet and profound message is sent in this. Thank you very much for sharing this. You are so talented. God bless you. With love, Lola

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

Hi Lola; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Sad, poignant, and all too common experience. We too often forget the families destroyed by these senseless wars. Not "we" but "they" ... including all who would vote to send troops into a country far away for a fight that is none of our business. I think every Congressperson who supports such bloody battles should be required to send one of his/her own children. That might make them think twice.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~

Comment from pbomar1115

Excellent

The connection to fishing from you dad is one of those memories passed down by a loved one. This one happened to be your dad teaching you how to fish. Cheerfully, I'm happy to hear a positive memory of a dad. I hear and see these days much about ways to belittle the man as if that is the way to solve many of the ills today. I like this poem, Patty.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~

reply by pbomar1115 on 19-Jul-2017

You're welcome, Patty.

Phillip

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

I like poems that make me feel emotional. This is beautifully written, with the voice of a child, and this makes the words ring true. Thank you for sharing such lovely and heartfelt poem.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~

Comment from rtobaygo

Exceptional

Good morning, Patty

Moving, poignant tribute to fathers and their children who shared special moments together. Well done. Enjoyed.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~
ps; thank you so much for the shining sixth star