Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Haiku (unrelenting heat)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
37 total reviews
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Gypsy, I like the use of Sol's name included in this haiku. I wonder how many readers would notice if you hadn't emphasized it. A great addition to your book. Stay cool! :) Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Gypsy, I like the use of Sol's name included in this haiku. I wonder how many readers would notice if you hadn't emphasized it. A great addition to your book. Stay cool! :) Nancy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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thank you, my friend, I appreciate the review and kind words, take care
gypsy
Comment from Heather Knight
Great haiku. I guess it's even more enjoyable for me than for those who don't speak Spanish.
Very intelligent use of the word isolation and the highlighting was a good idea.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Great haiku. I guess it's even more enjoyable for me than for those who don't speak Spanish.
Very intelligent use of the word isolation and the highlighting was a good idea.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes my friend you have done very well in creating this haiku the heat sometimes can get unbearable for some like me I love the sunshine but it doesn't like me well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Oh yes my friend you have done very well in creating this haiku the heat sometimes can get unbearable for some like me I love the sunshine but it doesn't like me well done regards Jill
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Comment from robina1978
You wrote a perfect Haiku that goes so well with the artwork. I love how you describe that the relentless heat keeps you indoors, iSOLation. I specially likes how you put SOL in capitals in the last line.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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You wrote a perfect Haiku that goes so well with the artwork. I love how you describe that the relentless heat keeps you indoors, iSOLation. I specially likes how you put SOL in capitals in the last line.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words and the six stars.
Comment from Mark Valentine
I like the pun in the last line - very clever, and it captures the message of the poem in one word. The metaphor of the sun as a menacing force that places us under house arrest will resonate with those of us in the northern hemisphere this time of year.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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I like the pun in the last line - very clever, and it captures the message of the poem in one word. The metaphor of the sun as a menacing force that places us under house arrest will resonate with those of us in the northern hemisphere this time of year.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend
Comment from l.raven
HI Gypsy, sounds like my family in Florida as well...heat index's well into the 100's...I take it you are hot in California...drink a lot sweet angel...very well written...and I love this picture....off to take the car in...love ya girl...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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HI Gypsy, sounds like my family in Florida as well...heat index's well into the 100's...I take it you are hot in California...drink a lot sweet angel...very well written...and I love this picture....off to take the car in...love ya girl...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie. I love you too.
Gypsy hugs
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you are soooo welcome sweet angel...big love....xxoo Linda
Comment from apky
Great work.
The artwork alone depicted the heat perfectly.
Over the weekend it got so hot here in Europe
(with Spain topping 45 degrees Celcius) that we had to remain in the water or seek shade in the pool house.
I like the way you played the SOL card!
Best,
Aki xx
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Great work.
The artwork alone depicted the heat perfectly.
Over the weekend it got so hot here in Europe
(with Spain topping 45 degrees Celcius) that we had to remain in the water or seek shade in the pool house.
I like the way you played the SOL card!
Best,
Aki xx
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
Gypsy, this is a fine haiku on a day where it reached ninety-seven degrees in the East Bay. I had to do my walk after the sun set, because the "unrelenting heat kept me inside the house." Your playful satori with its play on words "iSOLation" is effective and clever.
I do have a couple of questions about the challenges. I noticed that several have sparse postings, barely enough for two pages on the theme for the book. Am I permitted to post to those earlier challenges? Is there a cutoff? It appears that fewer people are posting to the second series of Haiku Club challenges perhaps because they are on summer vacations. I am concerned that the new book will be thinner from lack of submissions.
Thank you for sharing your well-timed haiku and for championing the genre. I have followed up Haiku Anthology by submitting to the Haiku Journal and a contest in Japan.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Gypsy, this is a fine haiku on a day where it reached ninety-seven degrees in the East Bay. I had to do my walk after the sun set, because the "unrelenting heat kept me inside the house." Your playful satori with its play on words "iSOLation" is effective and clever.
I do have a couple of questions about the challenges. I noticed that several have sparse postings, barely enough for two pages on the theme for the book. Am I permitted to post to those earlier challenges? Is there a cutoff? It appears that fewer people are posting to the second series of Haiku Club challenges perhaps because they are on summer vacations. I am concerned that the new book will be thinner from lack of submissions.
Thank you for sharing your well-timed haiku and for championing the genre. I have followed up Haiku Anthology by submitting to the Haiku Journal and a contest in Japan.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
This multiauthor fanstory book is not for a book. I will create a new one for the anthology 2 in September.
You are welcomed to post to previous chapters now. We have five so far. It's not as popular but I think it's helpful to keep it going.
Take care my friend.
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you were inspired by the prompt and entertained us with your wordplay in this 5-6-4 haiku and the striking artwork. Try to keep cool and have a productive new week- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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I am glad you were inspired by the prompt and entertained us with your wordplay in this 5-6-4 haiku and the striking artwork. Try to keep cool and have a productive new week- Joan
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Hitcher
Too much can be a problem if it is a searing unrelenting heat otherwise I do love the sun and all it brings to the table friend. Nice haiku for your challenge, I should really do one it has been a while : )
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Too much can be a problem if it is a searing unrelenting heat otherwise I do love the sun and all it brings to the table friend. Nice haiku for your challenge, I should really do one it has been a while : )
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
