Revenge
An Ode65 total reviews
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem that is very deep and Powerful as well as moving. I love the rhyming scheme in this is very soft and subtle. Nice alliteration throughout. The message is very clear. Thank you so much for sharing this. You are such a talented writer. With love, Lala
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem that is very deep and Powerful as well as moving. I love the rhyming scheme in this is very soft and subtle. Nice alliteration throughout. The message is very clear. Thank you so much for sharing this. You are such a talented writer. With love, Lala
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words, Lala! As always, I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! I debated whether to wait until evening until I got my sixes. So consider this a six of which I'm sure you'll get for this one. Something about the cadence of this poem matches the hurried hoof beats of battle stallions. I never heard of Cadmus but the heroine seems to be a female warrior determined on revenge and died in the process. I especially liked the wisdom of the one who refused to fight giving as an example of a better way to live to sing away sorrow and move on in life.
"of sorrow, spreading like a salve that flows
to soothe away her grief.."
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Wow! I debated whether to wait until evening until I got my sixes. So consider this a six of which I'm sure you'll get for this one. Something about the cadence of this poem matches the hurried hoof beats of battle stallions. I never heard of Cadmus but the heroine seems to be a female warrior determined on revenge and died in the process. I especially liked the wisdom of the one who refused to fight giving as an example of a better way to live to sing away sorrow and move on in life.
"of sorrow, spreading like a salve that flows
to soothe away her grief.."
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words and virtual six, Helen. I had hoped that the cadence would reflect the content to some extent, so appreciate your comment. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from G.B. Smith
This is the first time I have reviewed your work. This is a lovely, long, and interesting poem to read and I enjoyed the artwork. Because of it, it flowed very well with the poem thanks for sharing sharing your work with us.
Bear
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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This is the first time I have reviewed your work. This is a lovely, long, and interesting poem to read and I enjoyed the artwork. Because of it, it flowed very well with the poem thanks for sharing sharing your work with us.
Bear
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words, Bear, and for adding me to your list of fans. I have reciprocated and look forward to reading more of your work from time to time. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Tony. I'm always in awe of your amazing talent. This is a powerful poem that just doesn't quit. Each word counts. Rhyming and artwork are wonderful. All lines are well written, but the message here is particularly impressive:
"When loaded with the dross of anger, hate,
and bile, the scale weighs heavily in mind.
It takes an age to mine the counter-weight;
forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Hi Tony. I'm always in awe of your amazing talent. This is a powerful poem that just doesn't quit. Each word counts. Rhyming and artwork are wonderful. All lines are well written, but the message here is particularly impressive:
"When loaded with the dross of anger, hate,
and bile, the scale weighs heavily in mind.
It takes an age to mine the counter-weight;
forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find."
Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Once again, thank you for a most supportive review, Marilyn. Appreciated, as always. Tony
Comment from c_lucas
Revenge never solve problems.
Its path is filled with disarray
Forgiveness is the path to take
But a vengeful soul seldom follows it path.
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Revenge never solve problems.
Its path is filled with disarray
Forgiveness is the path to take
But a vengeful soul seldom follows it path.
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Good to hear from you, Charlie. Thanks very much for the review. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome, Tony. Just taking a day at a time. Charlie
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This English Ode speaks the tales of the horses (including from historic mythology) and their glow in action and fights with valour in rightly mused in exaltation; I liked.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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This English Ode speaks the tales of the horses (including from historic mythology) and their glow in action and fights with valour in rightly mused in exaltation; I liked.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Good to hear from you, ChAlcreatorrlie. Thanks very much for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from frierajac
I read twice. Wonderful depiction of a gallant peasant lass. I have just one suggestion. (please with a grain of salt). Smoldering for mouldering rooves.
Because it gives some immediacy to the picture, her finding of her home
and fields destroyed.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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I read twice. Wonderful depiction of a gallant peasant lass. I have just one suggestion. (please with a grain of salt). Smoldering for mouldering rooves.
Because it gives some immediacy to the picture, her finding of her home
and fields destroyed.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Good to hear from you, Frierajac. Thanks very much for the review. I wavered between 'smouldering' and 'mouldering'. In my mind the immediate events were perhaps a few weeks after the desolation of the heroine's home. However I take your point, and I shall have another look at it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow!
An impressive and powerful ode poem.
The urgency and recklessness of battle and the burning desire for revenge despite impending death loom paramount within the tale.
I can see much thought and research has produced this awesome ode poem.
The overall presentation and chosen image reinforce the power and recklessness of the warrior.
The tale flows with fluidity and and draws interest well.
******
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Wow!
An impressive and powerful ode poem.
The urgency and recklessness of battle and the burning desire for revenge despite impending death loom paramount within the tale.
I can see much thought and research has produced this awesome ode poem.
The overall presentation and chosen image reinforce the power and recklessness of the warrior.
The tale flows with fluidity and and draws interest well.
******
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Good to hear from you, Shirley. Thanks very much for the review. I appreciate your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Margaret Ford
Wow! This was quite an undertaking. It's very impressive, I have to say. The iambi pentameter moves along swimmingly, and I thought the rhyming pattern added interest to the story. It is, of course, very dense and has to be read carefully, but most stories about war or strife are like that.
In the sixth stance, line eight, I stumbled over "Slow, he walked away..." and couldn't get it to fit into the meter pattern. I tried six or seven times. Maybe that's what you meant when you said, in the notes, that this Ode is "mainly in iambic pentameter." I just thought I should mention it.
Best wishes -- Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Wow! This was quite an undertaking. It's very impressive, I have to say. The iambi pentameter moves along swimmingly, and I thought the rhyming pattern added interest to the story. It is, of course, very dense and has to be read carefully, but most stories about war or strife are like that.
In the sixth stance, line eight, I stumbled over "Slow, he walked away..." and couldn't get it to fit into the meter pattern. I tried six or seven times. Maybe that's what you meant when you said, in the notes, that this Ode is "mainly in iambic pentameter." I just thought I should mention it.
Best wishes -- Margaret
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Good to hear from you, Margaret. Thanks very much for the review and your kind comments. I'm glad you mentioned that particular line. I must have changed it at least half a dozen times and am still not sure of it. As it stands at present, it is a deliberate inversion of the rhythm, intended to arrest the pace of the poem as he 'slowly' walked away. I shall have another look at it in a few days, as second thoughts sometimes bring a better solution. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from dragonpoet
This ode tells of how hate and revenge take over and ruin and end a life. The obsession makes the lass not take her chance and forgiveness and redemption.
I like the allusion to Greek mythology.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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This ode tells of how hate and revenge take over and ruin and end a life. The obsession makes the lass not take her chance and forgiveness and redemption.
I like the allusion to Greek mythology.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Good to hear from you, Joan. Thanks very much for your review and six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome. Have a nice Sunday, Tony.
Joan
