Revenge
An Ode65 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find
In some cases, impossible. If a gang/crowd had killed all of my family, I would not kill them. THat's being too kind to the murderers. I would destroy what THEY loved, their homes and land and crops... and when they were miserable, I would kill their wives in front of them. Or maybe a favorite son. An eye for an eye. Then I could die knowing justice was done.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find
In some cases, impossible. If a gang/crowd had killed all of my family, I would not kill them. THat's being too kind to the murderers. I would destroy what THEY loved, their homes and land and crops... and when they were miserable, I would kill their wives in front of them. Or maybe a favorite son. An eye for an eye. Then I could die knowing justice was done.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Me, too, I expect!
Comment from thonnigford09
Amazing work here! A lengthy piece. I wish the background and font would have been a bit more contrasting as this was somewhat difficult to read. I love the tale here and understand the point of view of the warrior woman. Thanks, and I would recommend this. Theresa.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Amazing work here! A lengthy piece. I wish the background and font would have been a bit more contrasting as this was somewhat difficult to read. I love the tale here and understand the point of view of the warrior woman. Thanks, and I would recommend this. Theresa.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind comments and six-star award. Thanks, too, for drawing to my attention the difficulty in reading the poem. I altered the font colour while making a couple of minor changes and forgot to change it back again. One of the disadvantages of presentation using white font and black background is that you can't see the white font in the editor. I darkened it while making the changes, making the poem almost invisible. Sorry!
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Tony. I love George Stubb's paintings. This particular one conjures up old world charm in an instant.
I am glad you included the author notes, they were helpful with deciphering this complex poem.
For the first reading, before seeing author notes, it was challenging. Initially, the thread is difficult to identify and follow. It is camouflaged in complex sequences of strongly described events that are jam-packed with adjectives. However, it's all terribly impressive and masterfully intellectual.
Alas, the poor bunny...
that ripped a rabbit's heart, its entrails strewed,
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Hi, Tony. I love George Stubb's paintings. This particular one conjures up old world charm in an instant.
I am glad you included the author notes, they were helpful with deciphering this complex poem.
For the first reading, before seeing author notes, it was challenging. Initially, the thread is difficult to identify and follow. It is camouflaged in complex sequences of strongly described events that are jam-packed with adjectives. However, it's all terribly impressive and masterfully intellectual.
Alas, the poor bunny...
that ripped a rabbit's heart, its entrails strewed,
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Nicole. I wish the world could sometimes be a kinder place for the bunnies. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS to you, dear poet. You dramatized the hate and dangers of revenge, because, oftentimes people can get hurt when anger builds up in one. People can take others with them on their hunt for revenge which can be very detrimental. Best to find peace of mind like in my book. lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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SIX STARS to you, dear poet. You dramatized the hate and dangers of revenge, because, oftentimes people can get hurt when anger builds up in one. People can take others with them on their hunt for revenge which can be very detrimental. Best to find peace of mind like in my book. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words and six stars. I shall certainly take a look at your "Soothing Words Spoken from the Heart". All the best, Tony
Comment from marybell1
Dear Tony
After reading your beautiful ode "Revenge" I realised in the rules it said 'an ode not to an animal'. I do hope you will be able to re enter in time as your work is always a pleasure to read.
Sincerely
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Dear Tony
After reading your beautiful ode "Revenge" I realised in the rules it said 'an ode not to an animal'. I do hope you will be able to re enter in time as your work is always a pleasure to read.
Sincerely
Marybell1.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your encouraging review and four stars. Much appreciated. This poem wasn't actually entered in any contest. I wasn't aware of the one you mention and can't see it listed. All the best, Tony
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Dear Tony
Sorry for the mistake I should have realise when i saw your name as the contest I thought you enter was a blind entry. I did enjoy reading your ode so have changed the number of stars I think it is worth.
Sincerely Marybell1.
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No problem. Thanks for that. Best wishes, Tony
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Dear Tony
I realised later when I saw your name I realised the contest was a blind entry so have given the five stars your poem deserves.
Sincerely.
Marybell1.
Comment from Spitfire
This a wonderful poem to read aloud with its heavy sounds, alliterative lines, and ghastly images.
Great lines that speak the truth, unfortunately:
Revenge was in her heart, a worm that grows
in scale when fanned from embers of dull hate
forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find.
The nobleman tries to sway her with the bird's plight:
"Although forlorn, she'll build another soon.
"Her life goes on
Theme:
the ghost of choice;
redemption offered, but the chance denied.
This would be a poem for a high school anthology as it offers many lessons.
So glad I saved a six for this, Tony.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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This a wonderful poem to read aloud with its heavy sounds, alliterative lines, and ghastly images.
Great lines that speak the truth, unfortunately:
Revenge was in her heart, a worm that grows
in scale when fanned from embers of dull hate
forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find.
The nobleman tries to sway her with the bird's plight:
"Although forlorn, she'll build another soon.
"Her life goes on
Theme:
the ghost of choice;
redemption offered, but the chance denied.
This would be a poem for a high school anthology as it offers many lessons.
So glad I saved a six for this, Tony.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words and six stars, Shari. A high school anthology? Now there's a thought! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
Hi tfawcus,
This is a very well written piece of poem. I am blown away with the vocabulary as I learnt a couple of new words here. The flow is good and nice artwork to complement the poem. I am certainly looking forward for your next post.
Have a good day
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Hi tfawcus,
This is a very well written piece of poem. I am blown away with the vocabulary as I learnt a couple of new words here. The flow is good and nice artwork to complement the poem. I am certainly looking forward for your next post.
Have a good day
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words and six stars. I'm honoured! All the best, Tony
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Tony,
You did an amazing job with this epic poem on revenge. The lines flow well with great imagery for readers. The rhyme scheme is adhered too & seems complicated but you handled it well.
The picture you chose made me instantly think of ancient Greece.
I enjoyed reading this & thought what a great message you gave readers, too. Revenge does feed on hate & can cause unheard of 'things.'
Thanks for sharing your great talent in writing with FS. Jan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Tony,
You did an amazing job with this epic poem on revenge. The lines flow well with great imagery for readers. The rhyme scheme is adhered too & seems complicated but you handled it well.
The picture you chose made me instantly think of ancient Greece.
I enjoyed reading this & thought what a great message you gave readers, too. Revenge does feed on hate & can cause unheard of 'things.'
Thanks for sharing your great talent in writing with FS. Jan
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words Jan! I always appreciate your reviews. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from DR DIP
What a wonderful write T i really like this rhyme scheme not your stand ABAB rhyme scheme throughout each verse great authors notes and great poem to boot
thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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What a wonderful write T i really like this rhyme scheme not your stand ABAB rhyme scheme throughout each verse great authors notes and great poem to boot
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words, Dip. Glad you liked the rhyme scheme - it is the one that Keats used, with some variations, in all of his major Odes. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from country ranch writer
Losing sight of what was once a sight to behold she deemed war on those who took it all away from her life and love all gone now she wrecked havoc to get even
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Losing sight of what was once a sight to behold she deemed war on those who took it all away from her life and love all gone now she wrecked havoc to get even
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for dropping by to review and summarise the gist of my poem. Best wishes, Tony
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