2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "late winter snow"A collection of Japanese poetry
15 total reviews
Comment from Grasshopper2
Gypsy Lady,
Nice flow of words that match your picture. I like your satori, but in the deep south whur ize isz, the "elderly" lady's die their hair blue. We calls them the Blue Brigade. I don't want a rest home. Bury my body deep or give it to the birds to eat. I will not go gently into a home.
Whew! I'm done.
Me
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Gypsy Lady,
Nice flow of words that match your picture. I like your satori, but in the deep south whur ize isz, the "elderly" lady's die their hair blue. We calls them the Blue Brigade. I don't want a rest home. Bury my body deep or give it to the birds to eat. I will not go gently into a home.
Whew! I'm done.
Me
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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I'm with you, I don't want a rest home either. Thank you very much for the review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Gypsy, I feel bad for the elderly than end up in resthome's...even though I know for some there is no other way...they do call gray hair...snow on the roof...and we all get it...very well written sweet angel... and your picture says it all...love ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hi Gypsy, I feel bad for the elderly than end up in resthome's...even though I know for some there is no other way...they do call gray hair...snow on the roof...and we all get it...very well written sweet angel... and your picture says it all...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Linda, I appreciate that you read and reviewed my haiku. Have a great weekend. Luv ya.
Gypsy hugs
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soooooooooooo welcome you...xxoo love
Comment from bookishfabler
This is so sweet. I love it. I love the contrast with the weather and her hair and aging. Great job. I used to work in a retirement community as a Sous Chef. I can relate.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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This is so sweet. I love it. I love the contrast with the weather and her hair and aging. Great job. I used to work in a retirement community as a Sous Chef. I can relate.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you, Heidi, you are very kind
gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark Valentine
You truly are the queen of the haiku. Such a beautiful metaphor and such a poignant idea expressed. And, as with the one I just read (the "two for one special" haiku), the picture is perfect. I like that it's not just "winter", but "late winter" - adds to the contemplative nature of the poem.
You're taking all my sixes!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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You truly are the queen of the haiku. Such a beautiful metaphor and such a poignant idea expressed. And, as with the one I just read (the "two for one special" haiku), the picture is perfect. I like that it's not just "winter", but "late winter" - adds to the contemplative nature of the poem.
You're taking all my sixes!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much, Mark. I appreciate your six stars and the kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from DR DIP
Interesting punchline here Gypsy. that's what I call haiku 'punchline poetry" Its that last line that is the clincher to the first two lines and brings the write into perspective. There's so much being said here in just three lines Gypsy there are several interpretations The analogy that her white roots are like the fallen snow is a good one. Thankyou for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Interesting punchline here Gypsy. that's what I call haiku 'punchline poetry" Its that last line that is the clincher to the first two lines and brings the write into perspective. There's so much being said here in just three lines Gypsy there are several interpretations The analogy that her white roots are like the fallen snow is a good one. Thankyou for sharing
dip
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words..
Comment from Ricky1024
"A "4-7-4 Haiku?"
Any who, based on "Old Age."
"We age constantly, differently, and inconsistently.
"Unfortunately, we can't all live forever...
"And "The Great Sleep" eventually calls each name."
"At that later point, most will welcome "The Rest."
"Seems like I could use it now!"
Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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"A "4-7-4 Haiku?"
Any who, based on "Old Age."
"We age constantly, differently, and inconsistently.
"Unfortunately, we can't all live forever...
"And "The Great Sleep" eventually calls each name."
"At that later point, most will welcome "The Rest."
"Seems like I could use it now!"
Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you
Comment from Heather Knight
This is lovely.
I like the parallelism between the snow and the old lady's hair.
I can feel the melancholy in your poem. The second line makes me think that she has let herself go.
Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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This is lovely.
I like the parallelism between the snow and the old lady's hair.
I can feel the melancholy in your poem. The second line makes me think that she has let herself go.
Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Gypsy, :)
I found a misspelling: covers the resthome's (rest home's) front yard-- And I also have some suggestions. Instead of 'covers' how about 'smothers'? Just a suggestion.
Take care, my friend. :)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hello, Gypsy, :)
I found a misspelling: covers the resthome's (rest home's) front yard-- And I also have some suggestions. Instead of 'covers' how about 'smothers'? Just a suggestion.
Take care, my friend. :)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and feedback.
Comment from Mark Schardine
Winter and old age are common themes in poetry, and the dreary thoughts of unending cold are very painful for those who ponder how their last days are slipping away.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Winter and old age are common themes in poetry, and the dreary thoughts of unending cold are very painful for those who ponder how their last days are slipping away.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words
Comment from Joan E.
I do not know if you had someone specific in mind, but most of us know or have known someone in a rest home, and the double entendre about "white roots" resonates for us. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I do not know if you had someone specific in mind, but most of us know or have known someone in a rest home, and the double entendre about "white roots" resonates for us. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie. I don't know anybody in a rest home they make me sad.
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I'm glad this haiku was not autobiographical. Sweet dreams- Joan
