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2017 JAPANESE POETRY

Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "late winter snow"
A collection of Japanese poetry

15 total reviews 
Comment from Grasshopper2
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Gypsy Lady,
Nice flow of words that match your picture. I like your satori, but in the deep south whur ize isz, the "elderly" lady's die their hair blue. We calls them the Blue Brigade. I don't want a rest home. Bury my body deep or give it to the birds to eat. I will not go gently into a home.

Whew! I'm done.

Me

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
    I'm with you, I don't want a rest home either. Thank you very much for the review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Comment from l.raven
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Hi Gypsy, I feel bad for the elderly than end up in resthome's...even though I know for some there is no other way...they do call gray hair...snow on the roof...and we all get it...very well written sweet angel... and your picture says it all...love ya Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
    Thank you, Linda, I appreciate that you read and reviewed my haiku. Have a great weekend. Luv ya.
    Gypsy hugs
reply by l.raven on 15-Jul-2017
    soooooooooooo welcome you...xxoo love
Comment from bookishfabler
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This is so sweet. I love it. I love the contrast with the weather and her hair and aging. Great job. I used to work in a retirement community as a Sous Chef. I can relate.
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
    thank you, Heidi, you are very kind
    gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark Valentine
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You truly are the queen of the haiku. Such a beautiful metaphor and such a poignant idea expressed. And, as with the one I just read (the "two for one special" haiku), the picture is perfect. I like that it's not just "winter", but "late winter" - adds to the contemplative nature of the poem.

You're taking all my sixes!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
    Thank you very much, Mark. I appreciate your six stars and the kind words.
    Gypsy hugs
Comment from DR DIP
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Interesting punchline here Gypsy. that's what I call haiku 'punchline poetry" Its that last line that is the clincher to the first two lines and brings the write into perspective. There's so much being said here in just three lines Gypsy there are several interpretations The analogy that her white roots are like the fallen snow is a good one. Thankyou for sharing

dip

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words..
Comment from Ricky1024
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"A "4-7-4 Haiku?"
Any who, based on "Old Age."
"We age constantly, differently, and inconsistently.
"Unfortunately, we can't all live forever...
"And "The Great Sleep" eventually calls each name."
"At that later point, most will welcome "The Rest."
"Seems like I could use it now!"
Ricky 1024.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
    Thank you
Comment from Heather Knight
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This is lovely.
I like the parallelism between the snow and the old lady's hair.
I can feel the melancholy in your poem. The second line makes me think that she has let herself go.
Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Rasmine
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Hello, Gypsy, :)

I found a misspelling: covers the resthome's (rest home's) front yard-- And I also have some suggestions. Instead of 'covers' how about 'smothers'? Just a suggestion.

Take care, my friend. :)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
    Thank you for the review and feedback.
Comment from Mark Schardine
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Winter and old age are common themes in poetry, and the dreary thoughts of unending cold are very painful for those who ponder how their last days are slipping away.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words
Comment from Joan E.
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I do not know if you had someone specific in mind, but most of us know or have known someone in a rest home, and the double entendre about "white roots" resonates for us. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie. I don't know anybody in a rest home they make me sad.
reply by Joan E. on 14-Jul-2017
    I'm glad this haiku was not autobiographical. Sweet dreams- Joan