My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Member Dollars for You"a collection of my poetry
76 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
I'd like to think that we all want that out of a review, Anonymous Poet.
After all, that's why we're all here in the first place, isn't it, to try and improve in the areas we're weakest in?
There are many talented poets and authors of prose here at FanStory. Many of those I follow, read and review don't need or require any help or editing from me the majority of the time, so I have nothing constructive to add or suggest.
But when I do have a suggestion I feel might help, or I do catch some SPAG, I have no trouble letting the author know about it.
I'd hope others would do the same for me.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I'd like to think that we all want that out of a review, Anonymous Poet.
After all, that's why we're all here in the first place, isn't it, to try and improve in the areas we're weakest in?
There are many talented poets and authors of prose here at FanStory. Many of those I follow, read and review don't need or require any help or editing from me the majority of the time, so I have nothing constructive to add or suggest.
But when I do have a suggestion I feel might help, or I do catch some SPAG, I have no trouble letting the author know about it.
I'd hope others would do the same for me.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
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You're welcome.
Comment from honeytree
The art work is really
special in every way
for this poem written
in everyway.
I loved how the art work
glittered in everyway.
Honey tree
I have no six left.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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The art work is really
special in every way
for this poem written
in everyway.
I loved how the art work
glittered in everyway.
Honey tree
I have no six left.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
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That's fine.
Honeytree
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That's fine.
Honeytree
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Senryu. There is nothing I can suggest to improof your work. Your syllable count is spot on, and the subject was presented and understandable. I am not an expert on punctuation, so I will not be able yo give solid advice.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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A very well-written Senryu. There is nothing I can suggest to improof your work. Your syllable count is spot on, and the subject was presented and understandable. I am not an expert on punctuation, so I will not be able yo give solid advice.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Heather Knight
My reviews are often just pretty words, exactly what you don't want. The problem is I don't like to hurt people's feelings.
If I find a typo or a mistake I do say it, otherwise I write about the things I like.
Anyway, I find it difficult to review a haiku or a senryu. In my opinion they are too short and I think I don't fully understand them.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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My reviews are often just pretty words, exactly what you don't want. The problem is I don't like to hurt people's feelings.
If I find a typo or a mistake I do say it, otherwise I write about the things I like.
Anyway, I find it difficult to review a haiku or a senryu. In my opinion they are too short and I think I don't fully understand them.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi Anon
Here I am now laying myself bare to your criticism although I am the one meant to be criticising your work. Nice succinct about the art of true reviewing which alas on here I would say is about 1 in every 5, would you say? Good luck in the contest and let me know if I have failed! :) R
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hi Anon
Here I am now laying myself bare to your criticism although I am the one meant to be criticising your work. Nice succinct about the art of true reviewing which alas on here I would say is about 1 in every 5, would you say? Good luck in the contest and let me know if I have failed! :) R
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you - too true; only one in five are true reviews and the rest simply want the offered member dollars
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I agree with this for the most part, but we are all here for different reasons. Some, like us want a thoughtful, detailed review and to improve as writers and poets. Others are here more for fun and socialization. I try and keep that in mind both when writing reviews and reading those I receive. In all cases, I think we need to be respectful. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I agree with this for the most part, but we are all here for different reasons. Some, like us want a thoughtful, detailed review and to improve as writers and poets. Others are here more for fun and socialization. I try and keep that in mind both when writing reviews and reading those I receive. In all cases, I think we need to be respectful. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you for your honest thoughts
Comment from NadineM
I liked your well-written Senryu. The 5-7-5 syllable count is noted. I think the words you chose to share here speak volumes on the issue the writing prompt wishes to raise awareness to! Well done! This really packs a punch in only 17 syllables! Best wishes in the contest and thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I liked your well-written Senryu. The 5-7-5 syllable count is noted. I think the words you chose to share here speak volumes on the issue the writing prompt wishes to raise awareness to! Well done! This really packs a punch in only 17 syllables! Best wishes in the contest and thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you very much
Comment from closetpoetjester
Some people don't want words. They WANT the pretty review. So they pay pretty dollars. Unfortunately most review for the pretty penny so are happy to say "pretty good!"
I find if it doesn't warrant basic honesty in a review and it isn't your cup of tea its better to decline, than pick fault through no interest in that genre.
Writers are here for many reasons, but plenty can't take critique on the chin. I say, suck it up and move on. Other wise give the author SOMETHING other than
I liked the flow
Great picture
I really enjoyed the read
So...to your poem.
I liked your honesty and no fluff factor, inspite of the glitter pic LOL...or was that a clever bit of irony?
Me thinks yes LOL
So, it sounds like you just want honest critique like most here. I believe if the star system wasn't so flawed, it would be better but of course Tom doesn't rely on peace and harmony on this site.
Surely you know civil unrest causes we writers to get those nibs into action?! LOL
A choice message about the froth and bubble that gets around FS. I've been guilty of it from time to time but I am finding less and less I enjoy reading here lately.
I tend to skip anything where the message is lost.
Your poem engaged me from start to finish and managed to garner quite a lengthy response.
I'm thinking, I passed the fluff litmus test haha
Fingers crossed LOL
Great stuff! You tell 'em!
Cheers P
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Some people don't want words. They WANT the pretty review. So they pay pretty dollars. Unfortunately most review for the pretty penny so are happy to say "pretty good!"
I find if it doesn't warrant basic honesty in a review and it isn't your cup of tea its better to decline, than pick fault through no interest in that genre.
Writers are here for many reasons, but plenty can't take critique on the chin. I say, suck it up and move on. Other wise give the author SOMETHING other than
I liked the flow
Great picture
I really enjoyed the read
So...to your poem.
I liked your honesty and no fluff factor, inspite of the glitter pic LOL...or was that a clever bit of irony?
Me thinks yes LOL
So, it sounds like you just want honest critique like most here. I believe if the star system wasn't so flawed, it would be better but of course Tom doesn't rely on peace and harmony on this site.
Surely you know civil unrest causes we writers to get those nibs into action?! LOL
A choice message about the froth and bubble that gets around FS. I've been guilty of it from time to time but I am finding less and less I enjoy reading here lately.
I tend to skip anything where the message is lost.
Your poem engaged me from start to finish and managed to garner quite a lengthy response.
I'm thinking, I passed the fluff litmus test haha
Fingers crossed LOL
Great stuff! You tell 'em!
Cheers P
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you for your thoughts and review -- telling them isn't as easy as one would think
Comment from Margaret Ford
You've expressed my sentiments exactly, mystery writer. I want honesty. About your choice of art: generally speaking, I don't like glittery pictures with poems and stories, but in this case, I think it supports what you're saying: that you don't just want something "pretty." This is very good work.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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You've expressed my sentiments exactly, mystery writer. I want honesty. About your choice of art: generally speaking, I don't like glittery pictures with poems and stories, but in this case, I think it supports what you're saying: that you don't just want something "pretty." This is very good work.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for your thoughtful review
Comment from rama devi
Excellent and highly relevant. I utterly agree! This makes a strong entry for this particular contest. Well voiced.
I like the phonetic resonance between words and worth. Well done! No nits in the poem, as mentioned, but one idea strikes me that a dash for dramatic pause effect might be a good ploy in line two.
Good luck! Strong contender...and well presented.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Excellent and highly relevant. I utterly agree! This makes a strong entry for this particular contest. Well voiced.
I like the phonetic resonance between words and worth. Well done! No nits in the poem, as mentioned, but one idea strikes me that a dash for dramatic pause effect might be a good ploy in line two.
Good luck! Strong contender...and well presented.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you very much
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:-))))
