My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Member Dollars for You"a collection of my poetry
76 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
This is a fine 5/7/5, but I don't think it makes the cut as a true 'senryu', which often have irony or sarcasm in their creation. This is simply a statement of facts... it lacks SOMEthing. Do you understand what I mean...? Unfortunately, I don't have any suggestions for you. Sorry if I offend. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
Dear Mystery Poet,
This is a fine 5/7/5, but I don't think it makes the cut as a true 'senryu', which often have irony or sarcasm in their creation. This is simply a statement of facts... it lacks SOMEthing. Do you understand what I mean...? Unfortunately, I don't have any suggestions for you. Sorry if I offend. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm not so good at reviewing senryu, but I'll do my best. I like that lines one and two describe the situation well. This follows the theme of human nature well. I always look to line three for the aha moment. It should make me laugh or really think. I prefer the laughing kind, but you have made me nod my head in agreement. So, point taken. I counted 5-7-5 syllables. I hope you do well in the contest, mystery poet.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
I'm not so good at reviewing senryu, but I'll do my best. I like that lines one and two describe the situation well. This follows the theme of human nature well. I always look to line three for the aha moment. It should make me laugh or really think. I prefer the laughing kind, but you have made me nod my head in agreement. So, point taken. I counted 5-7-5 syllables. I hope you do well in the contest, mystery poet.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Most folks would wonder what's wrong you see
with honest feedback and score of three
They really don't want the truth from from me
All the best...
Bill~
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
Most folks would wonder what's wrong you see
with honest feedback and score of three
They really don't want the truth from from me
All the best...
Bill~
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you for your cute poem
Comment from Hansel1
I appreciate the opinion, tied of course to honesty. I agree, there are some reviews that are simply made to earn the member dollars listed. However, I wouldn't necessarily call it 'cheating.' There could be (theoretically of course) pieces that other writers truly enjoy, and thus only make a quick, complimentary remark. I think that this forum is similar to anything in life: there will be some who choose to go the extra mile to reach their ends, and those who skate by. Neither is right or wrong, but rather that individuals' choice. Everyone here pays the same membership fee in order to join FanStory, and therefor it is not yours, mine, or anyone else's right to scrutinize other members.
Likewise, just as there are people who leave short reviews, there are those who leave less than courteous replies for the critical reviews they receive. This inherently scares people off from giving honest feedback. Obviously not everyone (you clearly appreciate critical analysis), but artists of all kinds can be a pretentious bunch, wanting praise without the scrutiny (unfortunately).
Again, I do appreciate your passion on the matter, and I do agree with your points made, I would simply consider looking at things from all perspectives and not letting it bother you :) - Cheers!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
I appreciate the opinion, tied of course to honesty. I agree, there are some reviews that are simply made to earn the member dollars listed. However, I wouldn't necessarily call it 'cheating.' There could be (theoretically of course) pieces that other writers truly enjoy, and thus only make a quick, complimentary remark. I think that this forum is similar to anything in life: there will be some who choose to go the extra mile to reach their ends, and those who skate by. Neither is right or wrong, but rather that individuals' choice. Everyone here pays the same membership fee in order to join FanStory, and therefor it is not yours, mine, or anyone else's right to scrutinize other members.
Likewise, just as there are people who leave short reviews, there are those who leave less than courteous replies for the critical reviews they receive. This inherently scares people off from giving honest feedback. Obviously not everyone (you clearly appreciate critical analysis), but artists of all kinds can be a pretentious bunch, wanting praise without the scrutiny (unfortunately).
Again, I do appreciate your passion on the matter, and I do agree with your points made, I would simply consider looking at things from all perspectives and not letting it bother you :) - Cheers!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you - just entering a contest
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi, OK LOL! You have written a good senryu in true form with correct 5/7/5 syllables. My only criticism is that you have appealed to the reviewer for an honest review rather than telling us more about review cheats. However, you may be in the right and I wish you luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
Hi, OK LOL! You have written a good senryu in true form with correct 5/7/5 syllables. My only criticism is that you have appealed to the reviewer for an honest review rather than telling us more about review cheats. However, you may be in the right and I wish you luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
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thank you
Comment from patcelaw
Many times I will review a post that carries only two cents and for reasons of a piece being not in good taste or totally obscure, even if it has a payout of 1.02 I will not review it. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
Many times I will review a post that carries only two cents and for reasons of a piece being not in good taste or totally obscure, even if it has a payout of 1.02 I will not review it. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
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thank you
Comment from robina1978
Extremely nice artwork that complements your poem perfectly. You don't want just nice reviews, but ones that tell the truth. Dot on syllable count, and satirical. Best wishes for the prompt
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
Extremely nice artwork that complements your poem perfectly. You don't want just nice reviews, but ones that tell the truth. Dot on syllable count, and satirical. Best wishes for the prompt
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thank you
Comment from hari anand
This is where your true worth lies not just the pretty words I'll tell you the truth that you are able to nail the point in just few words. You are absolutely right when you say we shower praise to earn member dollars but it should be genuine.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
This is where your true worth lies not just the pretty words I'll tell you the truth that you are able to nail the point in just few words. You are absolutely right when you say we shower praise to earn member dollars but it should be genuine.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I read all the entries to date and so far this one has my vote. It is perfectly done using the two lines and finishing up with the clincher of wanting to know the true worth by telling it like it is, mistakes and all.
Syllable count is spot on and that is all I have to say
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
I read all the entries to date and so far this one has my vote. It is perfectly done using the two lines and finishing up with the clincher of wanting to know the true worth by telling it like it is, mistakes and all.
Syllable count is spot on and that is all I have to say
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you very much
Comment from dragonpoet
It is true that hardly any one gives out member dollars. I think I've got it once during my eight years here. But, it just makes me happy that my poetry is enjoyed and touches others. If you want to know your worth, get published and see what publishers think your writing is worth.
That being said this is a well written senryu. It shows strong feeling in a few words. It should do well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
It is true that hardly any one gives out member dollars. I think I've got it once during my eight years here. But, it just makes me happy that my poetry is enjoyed and touches others. If you want to know your worth, get published and see what publishers think your writing is worth.
That being said this is a well written senryu. It shows strong feeling in a few words. It should do well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
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You're welcome.
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