My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Member Dollars for You"a collection of my poetry
76 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
You summed it up in a nutshell. Very pertinent sentiment expressed in this 3 short lines. To the point. Needed to be said. Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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You summed it up in a nutshell. Very pertinent sentiment expressed in this 3 short lines. To the point. Needed to be said. Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I want a review
to say more than pretty words
tell me my true worth
Well, I would love to give an in-depth and thorough review, but on what? You want a review thst's longer than the tiny thing you wrote. Okay, here goes...
The syllable pattern is correct for haiku, senryu, or the general 5-7-5 category.
The message is clear.
I can't tell you what you "true worth" is from this... it's more a command than a poem anyway. I suppose you want a tiny "poem" to earn as much thought as one of my novels. Or even a piece of flash fiction. Or even some real poem here... the kind with stanzas and more than three lines. Write more than fourteen words, and then ask me if worthy of my time.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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I want a review
to say more than pretty words
tell me my true worth
Well, I would love to give an in-depth and thorough review, but on what? You want a review thst's longer than the tiny thing you wrote. Okay, here goes...
The syllable pattern is correct for haiku, senryu, or the general 5-7-5 category.
The message is clear.
I can't tell you what you "true worth" is from this... it's more a command than a poem anyway. I suppose you want a tiny "poem" to earn as much thought as one of my novels. Or even a piece of flash fiction. Or even some real poem here... the kind with stanzas and more than three lines. Write more than fourteen words, and then ask me if worthy of my time.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you - just following the contest prompt
Comment from DragonSkulls
That will be a rare commodity on this site. You want an actual real review? That's preposterous, lol. Few on this site even read all the way through a piece before reviewing it, let alone give you some constructive criticism. But I can't really blame them. My crap's so perfect there are no flaws corrections or suggestions that could make it any better. Haha. That's a joke. This is a great entry into your Review Cheats contest. Good luck at your quest for getting more than just pretty words reviews. Plus best of luck in the contest.
DS
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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That will be a rare commodity on this site. You want an actual real review? That's preposterous, lol. Few on this site even read all the way through a piece before reviewing it, let alone give you some constructive criticism. But I can't really blame them. My crap's so perfect there are no flaws corrections or suggestions that could make it any better. Haha. That's a joke. This is a great entry into your Review Cheats contest. Good luck at your quest for getting more than just pretty words reviews. Plus best of luck in the contest.
DS
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you - you are right
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Well writing a seryu like that one, shows you do have true worth as a poet, but I suspect you know that already. I think there will always be some cheating on this site for this is the kind of community we have. Writers have to write and to promote their work they need money. It's not a perfect world. :))
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Well writing a seryu like that one, shows you do have true worth as a poet, but I suspect you know that already. I think there will always be some cheating on this site for this is the kind of community we have. Writers have to write and to promote their work they need money. It's not a perfect world. :))
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you - you are right
Comment from --Turtle.
The reviewing topic has strong appeal to the reviewing community; topic interest is why I opened this piece to read. The title caught my eye, does well to support what I thought it would be about... reviewing and fanstory, and the troubles that come with reviewing for virtual money. It's a hamster wheel... everyone is so concerned with making enough money to promote that they take short cuts on the reviews... thus making enough virtual money to buy a lot of generic, short-cutted reviews.
I'm not a poet, so the senyru form isn't something I can critique directly with any confidence, other than to say what I noticed... two direct lines, the third gives additional thought on the human condition.
The direct 'I want' and tell me my worth convey a desire for honesty. I empathized with the disdain of 'pretty words'.
Can't tell you how many reviews I have gotten that generally say... Wow, you have well written words. I think it's amazing to share words. Keep sharing words.
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I disagreed with the notion that a review tells you the true worth of a piece, but I get the general idea that it means: tell me what you really think, and not what you think I want to hear.
Nice job with this.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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The reviewing topic has strong appeal to the reviewing community; topic interest is why I opened this piece to read. The title caught my eye, does well to support what I thought it would be about... reviewing and fanstory, and the troubles that come with reviewing for virtual money. It's a hamster wheel... everyone is so concerned with making enough money to promote that they take short cuts on the reviews... thus making enough virtual money to buy a lot of generic, short-cutted reviews.
I'm not a poet, so the senyru form isn't something I can critique directly with any confidence, other than to say what I noticed... two direct lines, the third gives additional thought on the human condition.
The direct 'I want' and tell me my worth convey a desire for honesty. I empathized with the disdain of 'pretty words'.
Can't tell you how many reviews I have gotten that generally say... Wow, you have well written words. I think it's amazing to share words. Keep sharing words.
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I disagreed with the notion that a review tells you the true worth of a piece, but I get the general idea that it means: tell me what you really think, and not what you think I want to hear.
Nice job with this.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for a thoughtful review
Comment from Pullmanspb
I gave it 5 stars because the writer of the poem has guts. I tend to not review entries unless I can say something positive. There is a wide range of postings, and some bore me or seem way too amateurish; however, I try to remain compassionate and don't want to tear into something when I don't even know the writer.
Steven
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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I gave it 5 stars because the writer of the poem has guts. I tend to not review entries unless I can say something positive. There is a wide range of postings, and some bore me or seem way too amateurish; however, I try to remain compassionate and don't want to tear into something when I don't even know the writer.
Steven
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Bill Schott
Reviewing a 5-7-5 with the intension of helping someone is pretty much limited to counting syllables and checking the theme alignment. A chance that THE word choice will occur in this format is infrequent, but definitely the Grail-like item sought. This piece makes two related statements that go along with the intended topic. Most people don't want the truth beyond spelling errors or punctuation. When reviewing stories, however, the author can learn some important things from folks who have walked that path and know things. I do truly hate the reviews that have a generic pleasantly that is so ambiguous it could be about a poem, short, story, or a garage sale flyer. I give out 5's only, unless, of course, something is so wrong it needs immediate repair. A 4 is usually good for that, with an explanation.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Reviewing a 5-7-5 with the intension of helping someone is pretty much limited to counting syllables and checking the theme alignment. A chance that THE word choice will occur in this format is infrequent, but definitely the Grail-like item sought. This piece makes two related statements that go along with the intended topic. Most people don't want the truth beyond spelling errors or punctuation. When reviewing stories, however, the author can learn some important things from folks who have walked that path and know things. I do truly hate the reviews that have a generic pleasantly that is so ambiguous it could be about a poem, short, story, or a garage sale flyer. I give out 5's only, unless, of course, something is so wrong it needs immediate repair. A 4 is usually good for that, with an explanation.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful and true review
Comment from pome lover
okay - to be honest I am not that interested in Haikus and Senyus, BUT yours adheres to the rules and gets your point - which I totally agree with - across.
Some reviewers seem to have a "form letter" that has little or nothing to do with the posts they "review."
So, considering what yours addresses, it's good. a 5. But I can't really review it for literary merit. Write another one, and I will - except I don't know your name or pen name.
pome lover
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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okay - to be honest I am not that interested in Haikus and Senyus, BUT yours adheres to the rules and gets your point - which I totally agree with - across.
Some reviewers seem to have a "form letter" that has little or nothing to do with the posts they "review."
So, considering what yours addresses, it's good. a 5. But I can't really review it for literary merit. Write another one, and I will - except I don't know your name or pen name.
pome lover
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
In just three short lines with a 5-7-5 syllable count, you managed to write a great poem.
'Member Dollars for You'- Good title.
When someone reviews my work, I want their honest opinion. If mistakes are made, I want them pointed out if they spot them. I don't want people to overlook my work just because it only pays one point, two member cents.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your version of Review Cheats.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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In just three short lines with a 5-7-5 syllable count, you managed to write a great poem.
'Member Dollars for You'- Good title.
When someone reviews my work, I want their honest opinion. If mistakes are made, I want them pointed out if they spot them. I don't want people to overlook my work just because it only pays one point, two member cents.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your version of Review Cheats.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from HAREEDS
I do get where you're coming from here. When someone reviews your work you want them to give a good honest opinion of the piece and not to suck up to you just to get member dollars. Me giving you six stars is not sucking up, I genuinely think you've expressed what most writers feel in your poem. Your short to the point phrases cut through the crap and get straight to the heart of the matter. Most people learn more from a critical honest review than they do from sycophantic praise. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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I do get where you're coming from here. When someone reviews your work you want them to give a good honest opinion of the piece and not to suck up to you just to get member dollars. Me giving you six stars is not sucking up, I genuinely think you've expressed what most writers feel in your poem. Your short to the point phrases cut through the crap and get straight to the heart of the matter. Most people learn more from a critical honest review than they do from sycophantic praise. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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thank you so much
