Comment from estory

Excellent

I think you are asking the right questions as you set us off on this ride, it sounds interesting, I particularly like the idea of a child not biological hanging between these two. It kind of opens this up to all kinds of questions of what is the purpose of love? What is the meaning of happiness? How do relationships form and what makes them satisfactory, meaningful? Its hard to say where this will go without knowing more about the characters, but I think you have piqued the interest. estory

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017

thank you for your thoughtful review. This story has a lot of twists and turns and I hope you will enjoy it,

~patty~

Comment from JW

Excellent

You asked a good question when you ask for the definition of a love story. While there is a set definition, I tend to think that the real meaning is defined by the author of a story.

If it isn't, then I guess I'm in trouble since the romance stories I've been involved with does not meet the regular storylines.

Thanks for sharing this, Patty. JW

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I liked your answer to the posed question. I think relationships are hard to define, and too many people simply see a love story as living happily ever after,

~patty~

Comment from Marvin Calloway

Excellent

I would think a Love Story would have to be of a popular length in order to please the most readers. If it could be determined that 90% of Love Story readers prefer 220 to 280 pages than that is what the writer should strive for, assuming they're trying to make a living out of it.
If you've written a story with a good beginning, a pleasing middle and a satisfying conclusion, it matters little how long it is.
When last I read your story, I was very happy with it.
Marv

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Hi Marv; thank you so much for the thoughtful review of this piece. I do agree with you; if the story is well written, it doesn't matter how long it is,

~patty~

reply by Marvin Calloway on 13-Jul-2017

You're welcome!

Comment from XGoneX

Excellent

Hi Patty,
People are not simply black or white, good or bad.
I look forward to read the story.
It has an interesting theme, and it will certainly intrigue readers to now more about it.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

thank you so much for the thoughtful review. I think you will enjoy this story,

~patty~

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

Ron was probably young and full of hormones. It sounds like he was very selfish, but should he have stuck around and married a girl he didn't love? That could have ended up a much bigger disaster for both Jenny and the baby. Perhaps things worked out for the best.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for reading the prologue of the story. I do agree maybe things worked out for the best, but since I knew both of these people, I'm able to see more of the pain and anguish.

I hope you will follow the rest of the story - there's plenty of twists and turns,

~patty~

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Patty, This is very good and helpful when trying to write a love story. I am not able to give any advice either way on this right now. I think you are doing a great job. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Hi again, Teri; I'm so glad you are enjoying this current project of mine. There are many more twists and turns to come, so I hope you will continue to read along,

~patty~

Comment from apky

Excellent

In this day and age, it's a little tricky to define what can be termed a love story. In the classical sense, it's the old boy-meets-girl, they fall in love, have a baby or four and live happily ever after. Of course there would be conflicts before HEA.

Another point is that sometimes when a baby comes in, the two lovers are likely to get married "for the sake of the child". But I always feel this can't be termed a love story. It's also more likely to fail and hurt the innocent child who has to live with parents who resent each other.

Then, in my opinion there's always that other one-sided love story and I think yours could fit in here. This is when one partner loves the other but the love is not requited.

Hope I give you something to go on.

Cheers
Aki xx

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Hi Aki; you are so right - it is hard to come up with any kind of definition of what constitutes a love story. Many people aren't even able to distinguish between love and lust.

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your input,

~patty~

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good morning, Patty
Interesting post. I would have to agree being in love and having this reciprocated in kind is a essential component to every story. Whether it lasts a life time or dies quickly on the vine; is one of the unique things that make a love story. Enjoyed.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Hi Ray; thank you so much for reading and commenting on this prologue to my latest love story. I appreciate your input,

~patty~

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

The majority of kids are born out of marriage, and most marriages fail is the USA.
As a casehardened geezer, I wonder if the arranged marriages didn't produce a
more functional society. You have written a good essay on the structure of a love story.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Hi there; I can appreciate your point of view. I love watching and reading about the 'love' stories of the queens and kings of Europe back in the 1500 and 1600s. Maybe the arranged marriages did work out for the best

~patty~

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Hello Patty;

I like the way you introduced your love story and I am looking forward to following it as it unfolds.

To answer one of your questions above, No I don't believe that all love stories include a love that lasts forever. We know that sometimes in life we can be head over heels in love but over a time period that same love just dies. It really takes a lot of effort to keep these forever love and loyal relationships.

Have a beautiful day Patty. I will be looking for the story.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Hi Tier; thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and giving me your ideas about love. I appreciate your willingness to follow the story,

~patty~