MarBear Versus the Volcano Part 3
My last words before involuntary lift-off...20 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
You may have been away for a while, Mary, but you haven't lost your touch. This was quite entertaining, and very well written! You are one brave gal, but maybe you need to pay more attention to what Bruni tells you? Our inner voice is there for a reason, ya know! :)
I could very easily picture the whole event unfolding. You draw a clear picture for your reader. I love it all, but what particularly stood out for this reader was:
- peddle to the metal ... petal to the mental adventure (good play on words)
- "Like Bruni, he too was a blurter of the worst degree" ... love made-up words ...
"blurter". :)
- "I felt like a preschooler who is kept in close proximity to the teacher to keep him from weeping and upsetting the entire class" ... I love the image that this creates. It also endears your reader to you, hoping that you somehow will survive this scary adventure intact.
I look forward to reading the continuation, Mary. Good to have you back! Both you (and Bruni) have been missed. ~ ~ Connie
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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You may have been away for a while, Mary, but you haven't lost your touch. This was quite entertaining, and very well written! You are one brave gal, but maybe you need to pay more attention to what Bruni tells you? Our inner voice is there for a reason, ya know! :)
I could very easily picture the whole event unfolding. You draw a clear picture for your reader. I love it all, but what particularly stood out for this reader was:
- peddle to the metal ... petal to the mental adventure (good play on words)
- "Like Bruni, he too was a blurter of the worst degree" ... love made-up words ...
"blurter". :)
- "I felt like a preschooler who is kept in close proximity to the teacher to keep him from weeping and upsetting the entire class" ... I love the image that this creates. It also endears your reader to you, hoping that you somehow will survive this scary adventure intact.
I look forward to reading the continuation, Mary. Good to have you back! Both you (and Bruni) have been missed. ~ ~ Connie
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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What an awesome review! Thank you, Connie. You are so good about expressing the parts of the story that resonate with you, and why.
Thank you so much for stopping by. I hope to get the post the finale up soon...If the babies allow! xo
Comment from Marvin Calloway
You can make any story interesting. You're a weaver of interesting, yet real, plots.
I felt some of the fear you must have felt, staring down that dangerous path.
good to have you back.
Marv
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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You can make any story interesting. You're a weaver of interesting, yet real, plots.
I felt some of the fear you must have felt, staring down that dangerous path.
good to have you back.
Marv
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Hi Marvin, thank you for your great review. I'm afraid I'm back but on limited time as I'm caring for my two newborn grand babies as their moms returned to full time work. I steal away when I can, but it is goin be a challenge putting in reviewing and writing time.
I appreciate your continued interest in my work, and hope to get the final chapter posted by the weekend. Have a great one!
Comment from Unspoken94
I'm exhausted! This was an incredible ride for any reader!
You did a tremendous job keeping the reader spellbound
by all the action and reaction. I love your sarcasm, dual
personality, and insight into the choices you make throughout
this piece. -Bill
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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I'm exhausted! This was an incredible ride for any reader!
You did a tremendous job keeping the reader spellbound
by all the action and reaction. I love your sarcasm, dual
personality, and insight into the choices you make throughout
this piece. -Bill
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, Bill, for your terrific review and for the appointing 6 stars to boot! What a nice welcome back to the site.
I appreciate your time and talent. Have a wonderful week.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I haven't seen any writing from you in ages - good to see you back at it!
I did remember the first part of this story.
I love 'camo-colored death launcher with disc brakes' - lol
I always love your story telling.
teresa
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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I haven't seen any writing from you in ages - good to see you back at it!
I did remember the first part of this story.
I love 'camo-colored death launcher with disc brakes' - lol
I always love your story telling.
teresa
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Hi Teresa! Yes it has been a minute or two ... we moved in May, and coupled with the arrival of two new grandbabies, I suspect my muse was packed away in one of the boxes in the garage. I didn't realize how much I missed FanStory until becoming active again. Loved your review, and your kind words. I'm working on the finale now, between diaper changes and baby napping :D
Thank you and have a great week!
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Congrats on 2 new grandbabies! Wow, you are busy.
Comment from damommy
I've already told you I'm glad you're back. I've missed your funny stories. This one is no exception. I'm eager to see what happens. It's not going to be good, I'm thinking. 8-)
-Two hours Lauer, [later?]
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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I've already told you I'm glad you're back. I've missed your funny stories. This one is no exception. I'm eager to see what happens. It's not going to be good, I'm thinking. 8-)
-Two hours Lauer, [later?]
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Hi Yvonne, I know, like most things that are gone, I didn't realize how much I missed FS until coming back to you wonderful souls and your reviews. We moved in May, and coupled with the arrival of two new grandbabies, I suspect my muse was packed away in one of the boxes in the garage. Loved your review, and your kind words. I'm working on the finale now, between diaper changes and baby napping :D
Thank you and have a great week!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahaha - I'm half Irish, and I didn't know salt worked for counter-acting a curse. What were you doing carrying a salt shaker anyway? Hahaha!
If I didn't think you were completely insane before, I'm sure I will (not - lol - just adventurous) with the next part of this fun story...
As usual, highly entertaining - just one thing - I'm not sure about the last 'fooook' - maybe a different (actually real - lol), "Oh s*t!" or something? (You know I love the invented word - I stole it from you, after all, but for REAL publication...uh...LOL)
Mary, you slay me.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Hahahaha - I'm half Irish, and I didn't know salt worked for counter-acting a curse. What were you doing carrying a salt shaker anyway? Hahaha!
If I didn't think you were completely insane before, I'm sure I will (not - lol - just adventurous) with the next part of this fun story...
As usual, highly entertaining - just one thing - I'm not sure about the last 'fooook' - maybe a different (actually real - lol), "Oh s*t!" or something? (You know I love the invented word - I stole it from you, after all, but for REAL publication...uh...LOL)
Mary, you slay me.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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HAHAHaHA, I suspected my muse was packed away in one of the boxes in the garage after being off the site for so many months so reading your review did the trick. I'm working on the finale now, between baby naps and changing diapers :D Thank you for the flag of confidence . I didn't realize how much I missed FanStory until becoming active again. Loved your review, and your kind words. Okay, you win, I changed it to FUCK, then to SHIT, because I think I want to save the F-Bomb for the finale :D
Sorry we missed on the call last week. I'll try again soon!
Thank you for your hilarious review, and so glad to be back! Have a great week! XO
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You have a great week too. I'll look forward to your call. I will be out again on Thursday - the pot didn't go for the Super High Five, so I HAVE to try again. I was ONE OFF - ONLY ONE - had the right order for all the other four too! Crap. That's a life-changing amount of money! Wish me luck! (It has never been that high before and it will be a long time before it ever is again, no doubt!)
Comment from robyn corum
Mary,
First of all, thanks for the heads up on the new app. I downloaded that before I even read another word afterwards! hahaha! I already have a great meme waiting for me to play with. (Although I got this to make sure cute caricatures of my gbaby, I couldn't resist! Cool that the camera/app thinks that I'm prettier than real life.) heehee
Now, to your post. BWAHAHAHA! I can't wait to see what happens to you silly humans. I'm afraid your early confidence may give way to something different...why? Because you imply that the whole way, of course! haha!
Beautifully written and whimsical. I'm enjoying~
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Mary,
First of all, thanks for the heads up on the new app. I downloaded that before I even read another word afterwards! hahaha! I already have a great meme waiting for me to play with. (Although I got this to make sure cute caricatures of my gbaby, I couldn't resist! Cool that the camera/app thinks that I'm prettier than real life.) heehee
Now, to your post. BWAHAHAHA! I can't wait to see what happens to you silly humans. I'm afraid your early confidence may give way to something different...why? Because you imply that the whole way, of course! haha!
Beautifully written and whimsical. I'm enjoying~
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Hi Robyn, happy to help with the new app! There are sooooo many! Snapchat has some good ones too...my teeth have never been so white!
It has been a minute or two since I've been on the site ... we moved in May, and coupled with the arrival of two new grandbabies, I suspect my muse was packed away in one of the boxes in the garage. I didn't realize how much I missed FanStory until becoming active again. Loved your review, and your kind words. I'm working on the finale now, between diaper changes and baby napping :D
Thank you and have a great week!
Comment from write hand blue
Thank you for sharing the experiences encountered on your bike trip. An amusing tale of mishaps and observations. Sounds as if you get on well with you alter-ego Brunhilda, use the gift to reach greatness. I enjoyed reading this story...
~Mel~
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Thank you for sharing the experiences encountered on your bike trip. An amusing tale of mishaps and observations. Sounds as if you get on well with you alter-ego Brunhilda, use the gift to reach greatness. I enjoyed reading this story...
~Mel~
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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It has been a minute or two since I've been on the site ... we moved in May, and coupled with the arrival of two new grandbabies, I suspect my muse was packed away in one of the boxes in the garage. I didn't realize how much I missed FanStory until becoming active again. Loved your review, and your kind words. I'm working on the finale now, between diaper changes and baby napping :D
Thank you and have a great week!
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I'll try and catch it...
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! You're foooking crazy. But, on the other hand, like you, I hate wasting money. Your humor makes this so much fun to read in spite of my worry for your safety. A foolhardy move to leave the group, I'm thinking.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Wow! You're foooking crazy. But, on the other hand, like you, I hate wasting money. Your humor makes this so much fun to read in spite of my worry for your safety. A foolhardy move to leave the group, I'm thinking.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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It has been a minute or two since I've been on the site ... we moved in May, and coupled with the arrival of two new grandbabies, I suspect my muse was packed away in one of the boxes in the garage. I didn't realize how much I missed FanStory until becoming active again. Loved your review, and your kind words. I'm working on the finale now, between diaper changes and baby napping. Yep, a few consider me and mine foooooooking crazy! :D
Thank you for the bestowing of a SIX! What a confidence builder that was for me--I found writing a little rough getting back into!
Thank you and have a great week!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Mary, it's wonderful to see you back. Where have you been? Oh, of course, none of my business. This is just too hilarious for words. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Hi Mary, it's wonderful to see you back. Where have you been? Oh, of course, none of my business. This is just too hilarious for words. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Hi Ulla, it has been a minute or two since I've been on the site ... we moved in May, and coupled with the arrival of two new grandbabies whom I care for during the week from 7am to 6pm, I suspect my muse was packed away in one of the boxes in the garage.
I didn't realize how much I missed FanStory until becoming active again. Loved your review, and your kind words. I'm working on the finale now, between diaper changes and baby napping :D
Thank you and have a great week!
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Congratulations on everything, but certainly hope you'll find time to write. :)))
