Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "summer love on beach (haiku)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
85 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Very interesting words
that tell us so much
of the gifts life can bring to us
to enjoy while we can everyday.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Very interesting words
that tell us so much
of the gifts life can bring to us
to enjoy while we can everyday.
Honey tree
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Honeytree, for your generous, six star review of my haiku about the gifts life can bring. Thanks.
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That's fine
Honeytree
Comment from TPAC
Humorous in construction, this work captures the swim suit flaw capturing unwanted sand, deposits storing in unmentionable places. A good creative conceptions.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Humorous in construction, this work captures the swim suit flaw capturing unwanted sand, deposits storing in unmentionable places. A good creative conceptions.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, TPAC, for your review of my humorous haiku about unmentionable places.
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day again, mate.
Sorry I don't have a six left. This is a crack up of a tiny poem.
As you are most likely aware... all of my poetry is 400-550 words... so to say as much as you have here is brilliant. It would have taken me 400-550 words to say the same thing.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Hahahaha! G'day again, mate.
Sorry I don't have a six left. This is a crack up of a tiny poem.
As you are most likely aware... all of my poetry is 400-550 words... so to say as much as you have here is brilliant. It would have taken me 400-550 words to say the same thing.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Fez, for your virtual six star review of my little haiku which says so much. Cheers to you, too. I am glad this made you laugh.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Ahhhh SisCat: Here is another great piece from you that I truly appreciate and agree with. Yet this great poem is serenaded by this great song. I do know this great performer and song as they are both very prominent. (the song and the Singer. He was one of the Greats though. It escapes me though because I am still shaking off my wake up from an extremely long, long Sunday.
I do know about the love on the beach, leaving sand in the wrong places and yes, OUCH! You are awesome and this post is wonderfully awesome. It gave me a big smile. Thank you as usual for this great piece and for this big early morning smile.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Ahhhh SisCat: Here is another great piece from you that I truly appreciate and agree with. Yet this great poem is serenaded by this great song. I do know this great performer and song as they are both very prominent. (the song and the Singer. He was one of the Greats though. It escapes me though because I am still shaking off my wake up from an extremely long, long Sunday.
I do know about the love on the beach, leaving sand in the wrong places and yes, OUCH! You are awesome and this post is wonderfully awesome. It gave me a big smile. Thank you as usual for this great piece and for this big early morning smile.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Tier, for your touching review. I am glad my poem made you smile early in the morning.
Frank Sinatra sang "I've Got You Under My Skin" and also starred in "From Here to Eternity" in which he won a supporting best actor Oscar.
Thank you for your kind, supportive words.
Comment from Margaret Ford
Well, I have to say that this made me smile--not easy to do at 2:44 in the morning. I lived fourteen and a half years of my adult life in Miami, Florida, where I was young and bikini-clad quite often at the beaches. So I truly know of what you speak--I mean write. Thanks for a cheerful read and for jogging my memory banks. ;) Margaret
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Well, I have to say that this made me smile--not easy to do at 2:44 in the morning. I lived fourteen and a half years of my adult life in Miami, Florida, where I was young and bikini-clad quite often at the beaches. So I truly know of what you speak--I mean write. Thanks for a cheerful read and for jogging my memory banks. ;) Margaret
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Margaret, for your review. I am glad this poem made to smile at 2:44 in the morning and jogged your memory.
Comment from Susan Chetcuti
This is so what the beach is about, and what a well thought up piece.
Totally love it. The picture only adds to your lines in the feeling that comes through. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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This is so what the beach is about, and what a well thought up piece.
Totally love it. The picture only adds to your lines in the feeling that comes through. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Susan, for your generous, six star review. I am glad you totally love my well-thought up piece.
Comment from Spitfire
This is too too funny. How to take romance out of the moment. Excellent use of alliteration (love, leave; summer, sand)assonance (beach, leaves) and onomatopoeia in the last line. Love the reference to Sinatra's song in the author's notes.)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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This is too too funny. How to take romance out of the moment. Excellent use of alliteration (love, leave; summer, sand)assonance (beach, leaves) and onomatopoeia in the last line. Love the reference to Sinatra's song in the author's notes.)
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Spitfire, for your review which provided the nitty gritty details on my poem. I wanted a poem that got under the reviewer's skin and have achieved it. Thanks.
Comment from Marykelly
There is a humor here that is hard to achieve in the confines of a haiku, but in this short poem you have said much and created smiles.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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There is a humor here that is hard to achieve in the confines of a haiku, but in this short poem you have said much and created smiles.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Marykelly, for your review. I am glad my humorous haiku made you smile.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is terrific, Andre. lol Oh my God, I love Frank Sinatra! "From here to eternity" amazing movie. Oooo love the music, just wanted to get up and dance. lol ~Kerry
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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This is terrific, Andre. lol Oh my God, I love Frank Sinatra! "From here to eternity" amazing movie. Oooo love the music, just wanted to get up and dance. lol ~Kerry
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Kerry, for your review. I am glad my poem made you laugh and that the music made you want to get up and dance.
Comment from pipersfancy
Ah, yes! The pragmatist points out the obvious--all that summer beach lovin' on the beach comes with a price! (Nothing like rolling about on sandpaper!)
Perfect song to accompany the work!
pf
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Ah, yes! The pragmatist points out the obvious--all that summer beach lovin' on the beach comes with a price! (Nothing like rolling about on sandpaper!)
Perfect song to accompany the work!
pf
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Oh, I HATED that sandpaper!. Thank you, PF, for your review of my pragmatic poem.
