Tony
a missed friendship23 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a missed friendship that Roger found his friend Tony had leukaemia and soon became thin and bony and thereafter Roger missed a friend in Tony; I liked.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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This speaks about a missed friendship that Roger found his friend Tony had leukaemia and soon became thin and bony and thereafter Roger missed a friend in Tony; I liked.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Some of life's lessons are learned the hard way as illustrated by this poem.
Does not pay to be a bully.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Some of life's lessons are learned the hard way as illustrated by this poem.
Does not pay to be a bully.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from royowen
An excellent entry in this contest! It's good if a bully meets his/her accountability, in life, it's one thing to teach right from, another to administer it. Well done, written in easy to read rhyming verse, that flows extremely well, the narrative story is great, the abcb rhyming carries it rhythmically along, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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An excellent entry in this contest! It's good if a bully meets his/her accountability, in life, it's one thing to teach right from, another to administer it. Well done, written in easy to read rhyming verse, that flows extremely well, the narrative story is great, the abcb rhyming carries it rhythmically along, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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thank you very much for your very kind words.
Comment from Natali Holden
This is such a good poem for the "Learning Right From Wrong" contest. Good luck! Roger was such a bully at the beginning, so mean to Tony. Then after learning he was going to die he was nice to him. Great job!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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This is such a good poem for the "Learning Right From Wrong" contest. Good luck! Roger was such a bully at the beginning, so mean to Tony. Then after learning he was going to die he was nice to him. Great job!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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thank you very much.
Comment from aryr
This was an absolutely amazing piece of writing and so very well done. It addressed and presented a good moral story of two issues. The first being to discourage bullying which unfortunately has swamped the social media. And the second is not to prejudge a person. It brings to mind the old saying 'walk a mile in my shoes.' This was definitely deserving of the six stars. Well done, thank you and good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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This was an absolutely amazing piece of writing and so very well done. It addressed and presented a good moral story of two issues. The first being to discourage bullying which unfortunately has swamped the social media. And the second is not to prejudge a person. It brings to mind the old saying 'walk a mile in my shoes.' This was definitely deserving of the six stars. Well done, thank you and good luck.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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thank you so much! I truly appreciate your very kind words and six stars!!!
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You are so so welcome.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a wonderful poem about compassion and empathy. Worded and rhymed well and with a positive message. What I like about it most is that Roger decided on his own that his actions were wrong. That is huge in the step toward personal growth. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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This is a wonderful poem about compassion and empathy. Worded and rhymed well and with a positive message. What I like about it most is that Roger decided on his own that his actions were wrong. That is huge in the step toward personal growth. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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thanks so much.
yep - as I learned in the first writing seminar I ever attended, the protagonist has to do the changing, himself.
I appreciate your kind review.
pome lover
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi MO, This is a good entry for the contest and yes a lesson for a bully. I womder if it would be different thought if Tony didn't get sick if he would have continued being a bully. However I thought this was a good lesson learn't. Best wishes in the contest Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Hi MO, This is a good entry for the contest and yes a lesson for a bully. I womder if it would be different thought if Tony didn't get sick if he would have continued being a bully. However I thought this was a good lesson learn't. Best wishes in the contest Cheers Christine
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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He probably would have, I guess, until something happened to change him.
Hate to be a dummy, but what is the "MO"?
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Mystery Author
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Hi it should be MA LOL
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Aha!
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This is a wonderful heartfelt poem.
Which describes the Tony's illness with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which strengthens your words so well.
and a lovely picture to accompany
Mitchell
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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This is a wonderful heartfelt poem.
Which describes the Tony's illness with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which strengthens your words so well.
and a lovely picture to accompany
Mitchell
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for your great review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem for children to see it is better to make friends than to be a bad bully. We cannot call others names and think it is okay. Even adults do it sometimes judging others on face value, without taking the trouble to find our why the person seems different than the rest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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A very well-written poem for children to see it is better to make friends than to be a bad bully. We cannot call others names and think it is okay. Even adults do it sometimes judging others on face value, without taking the trouble to find our why the person seems different than the rest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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thanks very much. I agree. I wrote a middle grade book addressing this very subject.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. I think that the content is good and the message is very powerful and clear. Nice rhyming scheme. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, lava
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. I think that the content is good and the message is very powerful and clear. Nice rhyming scheme. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, lava
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much.
