Sky on Fire
Some sunsets set the sky on fire.11 total reviews
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend you have painted a beautiful picture full of imagery and the picture chosen works very well good luck in the contest regards Jill
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Yes my friend you have painted a beautiful picture full of imagery and the picture chosen works very well good luck in the contest regards Jill
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your very positive comments.
Comment from Oatmeal
You did a wonderful job with this challenge. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental and thought provoking. Full of vivid images. The artwork complemented your poem.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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You did a wonderful job with this challenge. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental and thought provoking. Full of vivid images. The artwork complemented your poem.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Thank you for such a thorough and complimentary review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Better fire in the sky than spreading like wildfire (please excuse the pun) on the ground.
Of course, there was once a science fiction movie titled 'Fire in the Sky' about aliens who abduct a lumberjack from an Oregon logging crew, subject every orifice in his body to probing and tests, then release him.
I think he would have much preferred fire on the ground instead.
By my count (and most likely yours too), I counted 17 syllables used to compose this haiku. That's within the limits stipulated by the form.
Nicely presented.
Best of luck!
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Better fire in the sky than spreading like wildfire (please excuse the pun) on the ground.
Of course, there was once a science fiction movie titled 'Fire in the Sky' about aliens who abduct a lumberjack from an Oregon logging crew, subject every orifice in his body to probing and tests, then release him.
I think he would have much preferred fire on the ground instead.
By my count (and most likely yours too), I counted 17 syllables used to compose this haiku. That's within the limits stipulated by the form.
Nicely presented.
Best of luck!
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Thank you, your reviews always bring me a smile.
Comment from Irish Rain
Well, wow. This is ANOTHER great entry. This is going to be quite a challenging contest. Beautiful picture, love your haiku!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Well, wow. This is ANOTHER great entry. This is going to be quite a challenging contest. Beautiful picture, love your haiku!! Blessings...
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Thank you, your praise means a lot to me since I respect you as a writer.
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Wow, thank YOU!!
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the haiku contest on fire
Exact syllables to the 5-7-5 form of haiku
and excellent imagery of the tree silhouettes/sunset
The three lines appear to be connected,
but I don't know if that is a problem
as almost anything goes in haiku on FS
A solid satori third line works well
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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This is a fine entry for the haiku contest on fire
Exact syllables to the 5-7-5 form of haiku
and excellent imagery of the tree silhouettes/sunset
The three lines appear to be connected,
but I don't know if that is a problem
as almost anything goes in haiku on FS
A solid satori third line works well
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your detailed analysis and positive comments.
Comment from sharonlshelley
nice poem like you use of silhouettes of trees that lovely wording for the start of the poem. good luck for the contest and thanks for sharing you work Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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nice poem like you use of silhouettes of trees that lovely wording for the start of the poem. good luck for the contest and thanks for sharing you work Sharon
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for your good comments and good wishes.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. A red firy sunset color the sky, the background for silhouetted trees. A beautiful colorful scene to remember and enjoy. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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A very well-written haiku. A red firy sunset color the sky, the background for silhouetted trees. A beautiful colorful scene to remember and enjoy. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your very positive comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend,
si/lhou/ettes of trees
back/lit by fla/ming sun/set
keep fire in the sky .............................good syllable count
technically, the sun is not a fire but I get what you mean.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend,
si/lhou/ettes of trees
back/lit by fla/ming sun/set
keep fire in the sky .............................good syllable count
technically, the sun is not a fire but I get what you mean.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your analysis and compliments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a beautiful, colourful and eternal view of flaming sunset at the back of the silhouettes of trees as seen upto the horizon in the west and gives a fire view in the sky; I liked.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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This speaks a beautiful, colourful and eternal view of flaming sunset at the back of the silhouettes of trees as seen upto the horizon in the west and gives a fire view in the sky; I liked.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your positive comments.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your haiku for this contest. In spite of the limited syllable count, you've given us a great description of a kind of fire - the one at the end of the day in the sunset. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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thank you for sharing your haiku for this contest. In spite of the limited syllable count, you've given us a great description of a kind of fire - the one at the end of the day in the sunset. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Thank you for such kind words.
