Unwanted Dog
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Inferno"A short autobiography
18 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Your story is interesting and well written. It's outrageous that you had to
undergo all that in your young life with these unprofessional and horrible
people. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Your story is interesting and well written. It's outrageous that you had to
undergo all that in your young life with these unprofessional and horrible
people. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Brett; while this chapter was a bit violent for me - I felt it was an important part of the story, so I wanted to read it. You did justice to the piece and while I imagine it was somewhat difficult to recall the incident, you managed to convey the imagery.
My only suggestion is to find a different way to show the internal thought. Either use italics or something else in order to differentiate it from your other quotations.
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Brett; while this chapter was a bit violent for me - I felt it was an important part of the story, so I wanted to read it. You did justice to the piece and while I imagine it was somewhat difficult to recall the incident, you managed to convey the imagery.
My only suggestion is to find a different way to show the internal thought. Either use italics or something else in order to differentiate it from your other quotations.
~patty~
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Ulla
Brett, I'm following the story as it is. If you want to continue is up to you. You've started to write it, so I would have thought that's what you want to continue doing.
'That I extract great pleasure in = That I extract great pleasure from.
It was a cruel treatment. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Brett, I'm following the story as it is. If you want to continue is up to you. You've started to write it, so I would have thought that's what you want to continue doing.
'That I extract great pleasure in = That I extract great pleasure from.
It was a cruel treatment. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Glad you are enjoying my autobiography.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from pome lover
well, of course, this is horrible. The man should've been put in jail.
Your descriptions of the beatings are realistic and leave no doubt as to your suffering and his cruelty.
I look forward to the part of your autobiography when something good happens to you.
pome lover
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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well, of course, this is horrible. The man should've been put in jail.
Your descriptions of the beatings are realistic and leave no doubt as to your suffering and his cruelty.
I look forward to the part of your autobiography when something good happens to you.
pome lover
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Anio
GaliaG's picture sure sets the scene for the ghastly thing to come. My heart is pumping like a heart does when it is in sympathetic pain and knowingness with another. I am a girl, but when I was 5, my mother mad my Dad, whip my bare bum with an electric cord -twice. I didn't yelp either. Nothing like yours. I had welts and couldn't sit down at school the next day - I sat on my thighs. I've winced my through this with you - and I mean WITH you my friend. I know your childhood, I've had bits of it myself. But yours has my mouth hanging open and waiting to hear more. How do those bastards get away with it? I still don't get it, and I'm a psychologist :) Anita
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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GaliaG's picture sure sets the scene for the ghastly thing to come. My heart is pumping like a heart does when it is in sympathetic pain and knowingness with another. I am a girl, but when I was 5, my mother mad my Dad, whip my bare bum with an electric cord -twice. I didn't yelp either. Nothing like yours. I had welts and couldn't sit down at school the next day - I sat on my thighs. I've winced my through this with you - and I mean WITH you my friend. I know your childhood, I've had bits of it myself. But yours has my mouth hanging open and waiting to hear more. How do those bastards get away with it? I still don't get it, and I'm a psychologist :) Anita
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come and I invite you to ride along.
Before I am finished with my autobiography, perhaps I will give a summation of what transpired to him.
Unfortunately, in many instances a blind eye is turned and people like him get away with maltreating their charges.
Comment from Spitfire
I hope this place is out of business now. I cringed each time that whip came down on you. Why did Tubbo not touch your bare back?
It was a good thing I had put on clean white undies that morning after returning to Hermitage Hall. -- Did you really think that at this horrible moment?
I felt this broke the tension, yet it shows something about your values and self-respect.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I hope this place is out of business now. I cringed each time that whip came down on you. Why did Tubbo not touch your bare back?
It was a good thing I had put on clean white undies that morning after returning to Hermitage Hall. -- Did you really think that at this horrible moment?
I felt this broke the tension, yet it shows something about your values and self-respect.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hermitage Hall was closed in the middle of the 1980s.
Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
All I had in that instant was my self-respect.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I look forward to King Tubbo's comeuppance believe me! Why do evil people seem to gravitate toward orphanages and reform schools? You would think those people would be screened before being hired. You were a very stubborn brave boy Brett. It would have been easy to give in but you denied old Tubbo the satisfaction. Instead you gave him pleasure but you were too young to know. Kudos Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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I look forward to King Tubbo's comeuppance believe me! Why do evil people seem to gravitate toward orphanages and reform schools? You would think those people would be screened before being hired. You were a very stubborn brave boy Brett. It would have been easy to give in but you denied old Tubbo the satisfaction. Instead you gave him pleasure but you were too young to know. Kudos Nancy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Always appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from country ranch writer
Cruel and unwanted punishment is the evil delights of bastards like those who run schools like that. The get off beating young men into submissions.cruilty arises to its heights when they are angered.
young men,to their
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Cruel and unwanted punishment is the evil delights of bastards like those who run schools like that. The get off beating young men into submissions.cruilty arises to its heights when they are angered.
young men,to their
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
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Smiles and best wishes
Comment from Heather Knight
This was well written and interesting, but as I haven't read any previous chapters I guess there's a lot I'm missing. Who is this King guy? How are you related to him?...
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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This was well written and interesting, but as I haven't read any previous chapters I guess there's a lot I'm missing. Who is this King guy? How are you related to him?...
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from patcelaw
You have described this punishment in such graphic detail, I could almost feel the lashes and as I read I became more angry at King Tubbo. I greatly admire your ability to withstand the lashes without crying out. I do hope you will continue to tell your story, because it is giving me real insight into your strength. Patricia
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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You have described this punishment in such graphic detail, I could almost feel the lashes and as I read I became more angry at King Tubbo. I greatly admire your ability to withstand the lashes without crying out. I do hope you will continue to tell your story, because it is giving me real insight into your strength. Patricia
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Appreciate your comments, support, and the six stars.
