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Haiku Club Challenges, Book II

Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "haiku (Shakespeare's tragic tale)"
an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets

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Comment from marybell1
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I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 haiku (my favourite syllable count). All your syllables were correct. (What...no horror scary music to make me jump)
All the best
Marybell1

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
    Nope, no music or sounds with this one, marybell.
    Thanks for reading. :)
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reply by marybell1 on 04-Jul-2017
    You are most welcome. I look forward to reading different works.
    Marybell1.
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Comment from Mitchell Brontė
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Very clever Dean, great wit and genius within this 5-7-5, I knew you would find away to put scream into something you write.
Shakespeare would be laughing at this himself.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
    If he's not already turning over in his grave, poor chap.
    Thanks for reading, Mitchell.
    Have a Happy 4th of July, buddy.
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Comment from LIJ Red
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Never read any Shakespeare longer than a sonnet except--at the point of a report card--Julius Caesar and Macbeth. I think you make Romeo and Juliet sound more interesting than it was. So Romeo was a pedophile... Excellent Haiku, Dean, but you know what my opinion is worth...

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
    Well, your opinion is worth quite a bit to me, Elijay, and I thank you for taking the time to share it with me.
    Have a Happy Independence Day, my friend.
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Comment from Zinnia48
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Too, too clever! Shakespeare is probably turning over in his grave! Your ability to reconceptualize such a classic story, and morph it not only into a haiku, but a "scary " haiku is amazing! Thanks to you and your muse! Caroline

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
    Hahaha, I'm glad you got a kick outta this, Caroline. I sure had fun putting it together, lol.
    I sincerely appreciate your comments and the six stars.
    I hope you have a wonderful 4th of July!
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Comment from thonnigford09
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Very cute Dean. I love this. Very smart. How do you make a Haiku look so great. Great artwork. I will have to check out more of your latest. I would recommend this. Theresa.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
    Thanks a bunch for reading my haiku, Theresa. Haiku is fun to write, at least for me.
    I deeply appreciate the positive feedback and the six.
    Haiku Hugs!
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Oh yes my friend this did make me smile I thought you were going all romantic for a second I enjoyed very well done love the art work to regards Jill

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
    Thanks for reading and reviewing my haiku, Jill. I'm glad it made you smile.
    Happy Independence Day to you & yours.
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Comment from DR DIP
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I really liked the play on words of shakespeare's play a midsummer's night's dream great accompanying picture as usual Dean, well done. I really finding reviewing haiku and 5-7-5 poetry hard. I said that to gypsy once and she was quite offended.
then she gave an explanation on the points of review. as if I didn't know how to review a poem. Its just the shortness of both of these forms of poetry doesn't give you a great scope for a long interpretation or critique. oh well each to their own its just my opinion Thousands would disagree.

respectfully dip

Nonetheless I enjoyed the pun in your write

dip

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
    I didn't understand haiku at first myself, Dip. In fact, I avoided reading it because I felt if the review had to be longer than the poem I was reviewing, it really wasn't worth my time.
    But the more I researched Japanese short forms, and after taking a couple of Haiku Poetry classes here at FanStory, I learned a much greater appreciation of the form and its history.
    Thanks for taking the time to read mine, mate.
    As always, it's appreciated.
    ~Deano :)
Comment from lyenochka
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This is a fun one, Dean. I like the reference to a comedy "Midsummer's Night Dream" in this poem about the tragedy of Romeo and Juliet. Was there screaming?

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
    There was screaming in my version, lyenchoka, lol.
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A poignant write about a tragic tale filled with speculation and sadness, 'Midsumer Night's scream', very appropriate! Maybe it was the end of spring and the beginning of summer? He he he, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
    Well, in the play, Romeo & Juliet, is set in mid-July. Juliet's 14th birthday was coming up in two weeks on Lammas Eve, and Lammas Day is August 1. So...it actually was midsummer.
    Thanks for reading, Dolly. :)
Comment from Joy Graham
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Hahahaha! You have a zinger for an aha line :) That's my favorite part when I read haiku. I'm not up on all the rules, but I know a few. The more haiku I read, I learn a little more. Lines one and two set the scene, then your aha line clinched it. I guess Midsummer describes the season thing? No matter, I loved this. You nailed it straight into the coffin.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
    Yep, you got it, Joy. Midsummer is the kigo (or seasonal reference) and I stated as much in my author's notes, lol.
    I'm really glad you liked this and I appreciate the six stars.
    ~Dean :)
reply by Joy Graham on 03-Jul-2017
    Yes, i read your author notes after I came up with the idea on my own. I should have mentioned that. Sorry! smiling sheepishly...