Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written poem you have penned for the picture this challenge. You used very good descriptive wording and the format you used very nice. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017

thank you for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Hey Patty, I've noticed this picture poem by a few of our poets. I'm loving that you used this Monchielle form of poetry and you gave us the lesson in you Arthur notes. Thank you for this education.

Your poem is great and I could picture you walking in that rain, the splash of the cars in the puddles as rush by and your shoes getting wet as you walk.

Your poem is thorough. I've been there. I even remember myself planning to hit the sauce ( have a drink) once you I would get home. I would be running out of the freezing rain and finally arriving to your door out of the winter blast weather into the heat full blast.

YES! I remember days like this so your poem is awesome.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

Mustangpatty,

Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental, thought provoking, very enjoyable and thrilling. Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive.

There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Patty
This is a wonderful 'picture this' monchielle poem.
Which describes the scene with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which strengthens your words
and a lovely picture to accompany which you have married with your words wonderfully well.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Hi Mitch; thank you so much for the wonderful review of this poem. I had a great time putting this poem together.

~patty~

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Hi, Patty! So far, yours is the best rainy poem that I have read.
I really enjoyed the first stanza:

Cold rain runs down the streets
I need my umbrella
Water on ev'ry lash
I just want to get home
Cars rush by with a splash.

And I like the rush towards the heated room in the last stanza. You have portrayed a cold, rainy day exceptionally well.

Nicole

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from pbomar1115

Exceptional

I know this feeling very well. It happened to me just the other day. I hate getting caught in the cool rain where my feet are wet with soaking, squishy socks, and tennis shoes when I happily enter my apartment.


Phillip

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

reply by pbomar1115 on 08-Jul-2017

You're welcome.

Phillip

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

You could almost be writing about England - we have considerable rain-falls - a well written Monchielle poem, which has an unusual rhyme pattern, but works really well.
all in all, most impressive, Patty.


Margaret

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017

Hi Margaret;

thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem - it rains a lot here in the Pacific Northwest, too. So, I just wrote of the adventures of walking in the rain,

~patty~

Comment from rosehill (Wendy)

Excellent

What a fun take on the Picture This challenge. You have done the form to perfection and the subject is quite clever. I too felt soaked by the end of the piece. I also liked your snarky comments that punctuated the descriptions with your emotion. - Wendy

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017

Hi Wendy; thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I appreciate your kind words about the poetic form and my interpretation of the picture,

~patty~

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Thank you for introducing us to this delightful form of poetry! I have tried the diatelle, but I'll have to give this one a shot. You painted a rainy day experience in a very clever way. Well done.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017

Thank you so much for your thoughtful and kind review,

~patty~

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

this form is very different and one I have never seen before. Nicely done in the strong repeated line that sets the scene for the rest of the stanzas. Nice rhyming and good flow.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017

Hi Barb; thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the Monchielle form,

~patty~