Comment from BOO ghost

Exceptional

'Quack --quack -- quack -- quack! I'm all quacked up! favorite paragraph: With that they swoop down towards Old Man Elder who looks on in amazement. All he can hear is an incredible racket of quacking. They swoop close overhead and let go an amazing squirt in unison, covering Elder from head to toe. Elder learns then and there, ducks don't poop, they squirt. Colorful, admirable presentation. Ha ha! Entertaining, Lion King. I got a cat named ducky with 6 toes. Count your doubloon. BOO-riffic!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2017

Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

I've never seen a cartoon script before and this works in spades. I could even hear the narrator telling us how Pepe was running off to well nowhere in particular. The scene with the turtle is vivid and super cartoon. The deadpan humour is right up my alley.

These being the Queen's ducks makes it all the more interesting. Specially the rare orange Duck. I hear it they make for a nice Oriental dish.

Lots of fun with this treat, Mav.

two knitters:

who decided a duck diner (dinner) would be better than fish

'bout how he'd wandered off and got hissself (hisself) lost ...

Thanks for the laughs. haaaa.

Ange

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hey, Ange. You point out some things I was hoping might come across and that is rather encouraging. I was going for a kind of deadpan humour which WOULD come through if SEEN, but I wasn't sure if one could perceive it written like this. :))

I'm a bit clueless as to what I'm doing or where I'm going, but this is sorta fun. I'm actually in no hurry for the adventure to end, so I expect Pepe and his friend will meet more critters and have more scenarios while Billy and his pal just miss catching up to them or something. I'm so organized.

You're too sweet and generous as always and I thank you so much.

Mav

Comment from Number11

Exceptional

This had me belly laughing and the characters are so alive for me! The personality of Pepe against the darker personality of the turtle was delightful! I'm curious to follow him along on his great adventure!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2017

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Wow this is becoming an epic still to be continued so many new characters are coming into the equation This would make a great illustrated children's book Michael. well done

looking forward to the next chapter

dip

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 Comment Written 02-Jul-2017

Comment from nordicgirl

Exceptional

This is the most darking story, Michael. Kids would be delighted with it, but so would adults I think. I cannot say what it is, but this is compelling and I cant wait for more. I felt the same way after. Art one. Love it, truly. NG

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2017

Comment from country ranch writer

Exceptional

Hope ya find your duck befor he becomes someone's dinner. It would be a shame if he did so Billy's got some help with the girl tagging along so there is hope for him yet

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2017