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Comment from nancy_e_davis
It must have been awful to be alone in the world at twelve years of age. I guess you grow up fast when you must click into survival mode. Now I suppose you will be sent back, unless you do escape. Can't wait to see what happens. Good job. NAncy
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It must have been awful to be alone in the world at twelve years of age. I guess you grow up fast when you must click into survival mode. Now I suppose you will be sent back, unless you do escape. Can't wait to see what happens. Good job. NAncy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come and I do invite you to ride along.
Comment from Ulla
This was good writing, Brett, when we're desperate and feel it's a question we'll do a lot of things to achieve that goal. I will be looking out for more. All the best. Ulla:))
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This was good writing, Brett, when we're desperate and feel it's a question we'll do a lot of things to achieve that goal. I will be looking out for more. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter in your life story. When we need to survive and we have no other option as to do what we have to do. If it means we have to take what we need without permission, so be it.
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A very well-written chapter in your life story. When we need to survive and we have no other option as to do what we have to do. If it means we have to take what we need without permission, so be it.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Your words you use keep me enthralled and begging for more. And to know it is true makes it even better. I can picture you running as if hell were after you.
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Your words you use keep me enthralled and begging for more. And to know it is true makes it even better. I can picture you running as if hell were after you.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come and I do invite you to ride along.
Comment from royowen
You certainly had a penchant for survival Brett. a bit scary, perceiving that you needed a switchblade to protect yourself or even a weapon of survival to be use in whatever circumstance. Absorbing story and what must be a miraculous young life, blessed by survival, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo His stubble covered left (check) cheek?
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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You certainly had a penchant for survival Brett. a bit scary, perceiving that you needed a switchblade to protect yourself or even a weapon of survival to be use in whatever circumstance. Absorbing story and what must be a miraculous young life, blessed by survival, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo His stubble covered left (check) cheek?
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come and I do invite you to ride along.
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Well done Brett,
Comment from patcelaw
Brett, having read other works from you and now your autobiographical offering I am totally amazed at your intelligence and your writing ability. You are impressing me with the strength you show and your survival instincts. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Blessings, Patricia
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Brett, having read other works from you and now your autobiographical offering I am totally amazed at your intelligence and your writing ability. You are impressing me with the strength you show and your survival instincts. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Blessings, Patricia
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come and I do invite you to ride along.
Comment from Sis Cat
Brett, this is excellent, gripping writing. Once I started reading your tale of stealing a knife from a transient, I could not stop. Your rummaging was filled with danger:
I also found a dirty, used, hypodermic syringe. All I would have needed to do was accidentally poke myself with that needle.
I love your use of speed, stealth, and humor, as in this passage:
As he grabbed his pack, I made tracks as fast as I could lay them down away from there. All the time, I crammed my new prized possession deep into the right front pocket of my denims. Jesse Owens in the 1936 Olympics had nothing on the smoke I left in my wake.
Finally, I love the quality of your voice that is at once casual and witty. You even make humorous asides to the reader, as in this passage:
Perhaps that was why I did not initially see the reason for the sword of Damocles, or its clear and imminent threat. (I know, at 12 years old, I would not have used that idiom, however, I always wanted to manipulate that expression into my writing, so now I have.)
You end with a cliffhanger ending which left me wondering if you are going to escape:
Where was Greyhound when I desperately needed the vaunted carrier to transport me out of harm's way?
This is one of the best non-fiction chapters I have read in a while. You have quite a story to tell and the skills to make it pay off for the reader. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Brett, this is excellent, gripping writing. Once I started reading your tale of stealing a knife from a transient, I could not stop. Your rummaging was filled with danger:
I also found a dirty, used, hypodermic syringe. All I would have needed to do was accidentally poke myself with that needle.
I love your use of speed, stealth, and humor, as in this passage:
As he grabbed his pack, I made tracks as fast as I could lay them down away from there. All the time, I crammed my new prized possession deep into the right front pocket of my denims. Jesse Owens in the 1936 Olympics had nothing on the smoke I left in my wake.
Finally, I love the quality of your voice that is at once casual and witty. You even make humorous asides to the reader, as in this passage:
Perhaps that was why I did not initially see the reason for the sword of Damocles, or its clear and imminent threat. (I know, at 12 years old, I would not have used that idiom, however, I always wanted to manipulate that expression into my writing, so now I have.)
You end with a cliffhanger ending which left me wondering if you are going to escape:
Where was Greyhound when I desperately needed the vaunted carrier to transport me out of harm's way?
This is one of the best non-fiction chapters I have read in a while. You have quite a story to tell and the skills to make it pay off for the reader. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.,
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is an easy-said (essay) autobiographical state of affairs shared well about a specific event, rummaging through a bum's property, how author absconded with the switchblade knife (bonanza gold), and aftermath; I liked.
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This is an easy-said (essay) autobiographical state of affairs shared well about a specific event, rummaging through a bum's property, how author absconded with the switchblade knife (bonanza gold), and aftermath; I liked.
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
