Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

MUSTANGPATTY,

The title needs some capital letters. The style is a new one for me. I have never seen it before. I like it a lot. The words you chose worked nicely together. The flow is smooth.

There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Oatmeal; thank you for the suggestion about the title. I did the edit to capitalize the important words. Thank you for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done Patty, an excellent progressive, it combines well to make a, what appears to be a western style work, but skilfully engineered to fit the strict form that it conforms to. Beautifully done, my friend, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Thanks, again, Roy for a wonderful and kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. It was a fun write and I liked working with this poetic form,

~patty~

reply by royowen on 28-Jun-2017

Well done

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

True love is difficult to find, but when it is, it is something to behold. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I think sometimes we all need some reassurance, but the doubters have a very hard time accepting anyone's love,

~patty~

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Interesting poem form Patty I like it Self doubting another's ongoing integrity and commitment is not an uncommon thing in a relationship you always want to be reassure if one is going to commit to it full on.

dip

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi dip; thank you so much for the lovely review. I hope you will use the notes on the poetic form to try one yourself. This was a fun piece to put together,

~patty~

Comment from francesca7

Excellent

Wow..this is great. I admit I had no idea what a katauta poem was until I read about it. (Gee..I have soooo much to learn!) However, even before learning of it's origin and style, I loved it. For myself, I can relate to the questions asked of the lover..
" Why do you love me?
I am so unlovable
What can you possibly see?" Great writing ....relatable for those of us who got started in life with abusive parents. It is difficult to trust or believe that someone would or could actually love us flaws and all. (even after 25 years of marriage!) The lover continues to reaffirm his unending and undying love for her..over and over again.Just what we doubters need. I can't wait to be able to write like this someday. Many blessings my friend. Namaste. Francesca Great. Wow. I keep reading it...

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Francesca; thank you so much for the lovely compliment. You CAN write like this - you simply need to practice and write from your heart. You wouldn't be on this site if you weren't willing to hone your craft.

~patty~

Comment from BOO ghost

Excellent

Lover-boy poetry. Lovely presentation. Colorful. Nice combination of words. First time I seen one of these varieties. Is charming. On Poetry Soup you can create hallmark type cards. Whatever the words you write makes the card. This type of poetry would be great for post cards self created. BOO likes something different once in a blue moon and this is it. favorite clause:
Your soul speaks to mine
Our kindred spirits entwine
You are my everything
Terrific! BOO is out of nuggets. BOO-riffic!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Boo; thank you so much for the lovely review. I've often thought about sending some of my poems to a greeting card company, but I keep them for my own use. (Most of the people around me get home-made cards for all occasions.)

~patty~

reply by BOO ghost on 28-Jun-2017

Yep, it is easy to do on Poetry Soup. greeting cards. Love your nickname. you like horses?

Comment from crich

Excellent

I'm not familiar with this form of poetry but I am now a fan! I love the lyrical duet, the call and response and you are right, the artwork is perfect! Nicely done!!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for this lovely review. I hope you will use the notes I included about this poetic form to write one of your own,

~patty~

reply by crich on 28-Jun-2017

I will give it a try one of these day!

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

The katauta - Japanese poetic form is another new poetry form for me. From your description, I think you have completed the requirement perfectly.

Very nice and with an excellent sentiment.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Janet;
thank you so much for the lovely review. I had a lot of fun putting this piece together,

~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lovely dialog of love and commitment and reassurances of love done in the katauta format! I like the structure that the one asks the questions and the other answers.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for this lovely review. This was a fun piece to write,

~patty~

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks a love story, a salutation to love, a graceful recognition of love, a heavenly gift of love as a gift, a confession and glorification of love on this mortal planet for love; a blended work of art; I liked.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you