Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Aw, that is so sweet. And extremely well done - from the writing to the visual presentation, and that last stanza is so beautiful! I was not aware of this form, so really appreciate the informative authors notes. Great job!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Kathleen; thank you for reading. I appreciate your lovely review and encouraging words. This was a fun form to work with - it made for a great vehicle for this particular piece,

~patty~

reply by kathleenspalding on 28-Jun-2017

You're welcome. yes -Excellent vehicle!

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Katauta is a form I had not heard of, although it makes sense in the context of
centuries old Japanese poetry. You follow the form you describe in your notes very well. Excellent.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

I really like the form. I also like the presentation, the way you changed colors helps with the conversation. I it is very romantic. Good job my friend.

Gypsy hugs

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Gypsy; thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece - it was fun to put it together,

~patty~

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

This is beautiful, having never written one, I'll really have to study it. I'm glad yours comes with directions, ha ha. Loved this, blessings...

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Karyn; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I always try to include the 'directions' for a different poetic form - it gives readers a real chance of critiquing the piece. Maybe you will try one of your own?

~patty~

Comment from BlueTiger

Excellent

I really like this, Patty. Great work creating a personal and touching piece, the last stanza especially is powerful. I haven't read many poems in this style, and enjoyed reading the description you gave.
Have a great day,
-Blue

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Blue; thank you so much for the thoughtful and kind review. I had a good time putting this one together,

~patty~

Comment from Lindagail Hall

Excellent

Hi, Patty.
I've never heard of this style before, and I thought it was a person looking for wisdom and the replies were her inner soul. Strange how we doubt our lovers response towards each other. The words hold a depth that travels until eternality giving ones everything that they hold dear. I love the question answer routine. It tells a lovers path together. Until they are called home. Very nicely done.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for reading and the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece - I had a good time putting it together,

~patty~

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Very good. This sounds like a conversation between Carol and me except it would go on for hours. She requires a lot of reassurance. Thanks for writing this.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Thomas - oh, I thought YOU would be the one that needed assurance *smile*

~patty~

Comment from Gert sherwood

Exceptional

Hello ~patty~
definitely a six rating for you.
I really like your katauta Japanese poetic
format
It's the first time I've read one.
You, indeed, did wonders using this format

Gert

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Gert; thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the katauta poetic form.

The six stars made me smile,

~patty~

reply by Gert sherwood on 28-Jun-2017

You are so welcome ~patty~
Smiles and take care.

Gert

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written katauta poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Teri; thank you so much for your lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

I'm afraid you have chosen the worst color combo possible, Patty. I can't read a word on the left side whatsoever which makes it impossible to draw an opinion.

After revising I was able to get more out of it. It sounds Japanese just reading it.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi there; I went in and changed the color of the font. If you get some time, could you go back and read and review again?

Thank you so much,

~patty~