Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Your title and picture set the mood beautifully for your message. This is a fine cinquain which has fine syllable count in each line. Your message will resonate wih many readers that struggle with depression. It's good to reach out through poetry to help our fellow friends. Poetry is an excellent tool to reach people beyond our circle of family and friends.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Joy; thank you for the lovely review and kind words. Your encouragement means a great deal to me,

~patty~

Comment from bmethner

Exceptional

So beautiful. So sad. The artwork draws you down like the words of the poem. Beautifully linked. It is amazing that the few words can plung you so deploy. Excellent job

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you SO much for this lovely review. This poem was written from the depths of a depression. Writing it helped to bring me out of it, and I was able to reflect on the light instead of the darkness,

~patty~
ps; thank you for the lovely sixth star

reply by bmethner on 28-Jun-2017

You are welcome. What a wonderful therapist writing is

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi Patty, very nice imagery and description. Excellent line and syllable count. The artwork does give a sense of darkness and spiraling out of control.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Mel; thank you so much for the lovely review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,

~patty~

reply by MelB on 28-Jun-2017

You're welcome.

Comment from Celtic Angel

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem--its subject, its imagery, and the apropos pattern. It take the reader on a spiraling journey into the darkness. Perfect accompanying artwork! This poem achieves the mood and tone intended on the trip down the rabbit hole.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review,

~patty~

Comment from Misternubcakes

Excellent

I am quite speechless.
I am in LOVE. The poetic choice of words match perfectly with the Chinquain guideline.

This is poem is very deep, dark, and just true.
I love the image chosen as well. In those very dark moments, humans tend to only look upon the dark rooms within their chambers near their heart and poison it with doubt and negativity. There are only the few thousands that can overcome their own prejudices... so I do agree with the poem. It is just really good.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for reading and the lovely review. I'm glad you were able to see so much within the words of the poem,

~patty~

Comment from Margaret Ford

Excellent

This is very good use of the cinquain form, with your description of descent matching the downward movement of a readers eyes, and with your words growing more intense with each line. This has been very cleverly thought through. Excellent work. Margaret

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Margaret; thank you for reading and the lovely review. I appreciate your encouraging words,

~patty~

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

MPatty,

This poem was arranged very well. The theme was well thought out. The theme flowed well all through your poem. The line count is correct. Telling things very plainly and comprehensibly.

There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Camille; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and concept,

~patty~

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Down the Rabbit Hole is an excellent cinquain poem Patty with perfect artwork to accompany this piece. Despair is an ugly feeling and you have captured the essence of that feeling.

Well done
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi Janet; thank you so much for the lovely review of this piece. I found it very therapeutic to write from the depths of the depression. It helped me to deal with things and bring myself up,

~patty~

reply by Janet Foor on 28-Jun-2017

Writing is an excellent way to cope and bring oneself back from depression.

I happy it works for you too.

Janet

Comment from Auto-Manic

Excellent

Dark, dream-like, I can imagine how this might relate to a coma or maybe even dark depression...no light at the end of this tunnel. Free fall without end just a cosmic black hole. Whew.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you for your thoughtful review. This is about a dark depression. I suffer from them off and on. I just came out of a doozy,

~patty~

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

Am guessing this is possibly feelings of long ago?
It is spooky to me because although my childhood was fine, I used to have a recurring nightmare that I was running home across a broad stretch of thatchy grass and a claw would reach up and grab my foot and pull me down into a hole. This went on for quite a long time, but I never said anything about it. I don't remember why I didn't, but I still remember the horror of it. Brrrr. Hadn't thought of that in years. Your descriptive words did the trick! :)
pome lover

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

hi there; unfortunately, this is the words of my depression speaking. I am bipolar and often suffer from extreme depressions and it is very dark indeed. I'm doing much better now - writing is very therapeutic,

~patty~

reply by pome lover on 28-Jun-2017

I'm glad you're doing better and writing helps.
PL