Scattered Like My Thoughts
My thoughts are scattered and they're cloudy.89 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Andre, this is a beautiful and well composed 5/7/5 haiku. I love the imagery and the satori made me smile.:) good job, sweetie pie.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend
Andre, this is a beautiful and well composed 5/7/5 haiku. I love the imagery and the satori made me smile.:) good job, sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Gypsy, for your generous, six star review. When I stepped outside my door one morning during a heatwave to walk my dog before it got too hot, I was struck by the sight of these promising, scattered clouds. I took this picture on my iPhone and proceeded to compose my poem on my phone while I walked. By the time I returned home, I had completed this 5/7/5 inspired by haiku's concision and concrete language. Thanks again.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is a great analogy. The picture describes your words perfectly. I could stare at these clouds for hours and never see anything in them, but you make it obvious.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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This is a great analogy. The picture describes your words perfectly. I could stare at these clouds for hours and never see anything in them, but you make it obvious.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Yes, Thomas, the picture describes my words perfectly. When I stepped outside my door one morning during a heatwave to walk my dog before it got too hot, I was struck by the sight of these promising, scattered clouds. I took this picture on my iPhone and proceeded to compose my poem on my phone while I walked. By the time I returned home, I had completed this poem.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from Heather Knight
Lovely poem and photo, Andre. I know how you feel. The weather has been extremely hot here in Spain these past few days. Fortunately, the temperatures have gone down today and we've even had rain.
I like the comparison between the clouds and your thoughts.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Lovely poem and photo, Andre. I know how you feel. The weather has been extremely hot here in Spain these past few days. Fortunately, the temperatures have gone down today and we've even had rain.
I like the comparison between the clouds and your thoughts.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Maria, for your encouraging review. When I stepped outside my door one morning during a heatwave to walk my dog before it got too hot, I was struck by the sight of these promising, scattered clouds. I took this picture on my iPhone and proceeded to compose my poem on my phone while I walked. By the time I returned home, I had completed this poem.
Thank you for wishing me the best in the contest. Please keep cool and safe in Spain.
Comment from nomi338
A bright and inspired idea at just the right time can be as refreshing as a cooling drink of water to a man thirsting for refreshment. Inspired writing can also refresh the reader who is thirsting for something wonderful and meaningful to read. Perform your magic and refresh the world with your inspired creativity.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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A bright and inspired idea at just the right time can be as refreshing as a cooling drink of water to a man thirsting for refreshment. Inspired writing can also refresh the reader who is thirsting for something wonderful and meaningful to read. Perform your magic and refresh the world with your inspired creativity.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Yes, nomi338, when I stepped outside my door one morning during a heatwave to walk my dog before it got too hot, I was struck by the sight of these promising, scattered clouds. I took this picture on my iPhone and proceeded to compose my poem on my phone while I walked. By the time I returned home, I had completed this poem. Thank you for your refreshing, intuitive review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A very nice poem in the 5-7-5 style I prefer to Haiku. It is still about nature which is nice. I think this is very well written and makes for very pleasant reading kindest regards and best wishes Meia xx
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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A very nice poem in the 5-7-5 style I prefer to Haiku. It is still about nature which is nice. I think this is very well written and makes for very pleasant reading kindest regards and best wishes Meia xx
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Yes, Meia, I like the flexibility of the 5-7-5 style because haiku purists would have criticized me for using the past tense in the first line and referring to myself in the second and third lines. Thank you for your review and best wishes.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written and thought out 5-7-5 poem. Each word and syllable count here to make the best of the limited syllables and tells a sensible thoughts scattered like the clouds.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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A very well-written and thought out 5-7-5 poem. Each word and syllable count here to make the best of the limited syllables and tells a sensible thoughts scattered like the clouds.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Sandra, for your review. I make the best of the limited syllables to tell a story.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love to watch the formation of the clouds, they are like scattered thoughts. A great metaphor for this 5-7-5 entry. Really well done, and good luck in the contest!! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I love to watch the formation of the clouds, they are like scattered thoughts. A great metaphor for this 5-7-5 entry. Really well done, and good luck in the contest!! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Sandra, for your review and for wishing me the best for the contest.
Comment from JDRBAR
Scattered like my thoughts,
clouds invade summer heatwave.
Tongue awaits raindrop.
I really like this. Great analogy. I remember sticking my tongue out waiting raindrops as a child.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Scattered like my thoughts,
clouds invade summer heatwave.
Tongue awaits raindrop.
I really like this. Great analogy. I remember sticking my tongue out waiting raindrops as a child.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Yes, JDRBAR, I still stick my tongue out waiting for raindrops! Thank you for your review of my analogy.
Comment from Dean Kuch
When our mind's all a'clutter and we're as parched as the Sahara desert, we'll settle for whatever tiny tid-bits of moisture we can get.
It also helps us to focus and swipe away those cobwebs that have invaded our brain.
Nature is good to us.
Shouldn't we, as human beings, be good to her in return?
Excellent writing, Andre.
I enjoyed your 5-7-5 entry.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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When our mind's all a'clutter and we're as parched as the Sahara desert, we'll settle for whatever tiny tid-bits of moisture we can get.
It also helps us to focus and swipe away those cobwebs that have invaded our brain.
Nature is good to us.
Shouldn't we, as human beings, be good to her in return?
Excellent writing, Andre.
I enjoyed your 5-7-5 entry.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dean, for your heartfelt review. When I stepped outside my door one morning during a heatwave to walk my dog before it got too hot, I was struck by the sight of these promising, scattered clouds. I took this picture on my iPhone and proceeded to compose my poem on my phone while I walked. By the time I returned home, I had completed this poem.
Thank you also for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Clouds as you described always make me want to reach up and grab them from the sky. LOL I wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Clouds as you described always make me want to reach up and grab them from the sky. LOL I wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Barbara, for your review of my poem about these cotton candy clouds. Thank you also for wishing me the best in the contest.
