The Forest Seer
Looking into the future17 total reviews
Comment from Ann Philips
This was a delightful story. I liked the picture; it fit perfectly. It was a simple tale with a very nice use of dialogue. The word limit makes it almost impossible to add much description, but you managed to develop a clear and concise plot and a sympathetic character.
I might suggest replacing "hawk" with something else in the simile. I liked the simile hear but it suffers a little from being overused. Minor issue.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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This was a delightful story. I liked the picture; it fit perfectly. It was a simple tale with a very nice use of dialogue. The word limit makes it almost impossible to add much description, but you managed to develop a clear and concise plot and a sympathetic character.
I might suggest replacing "hawk" with something else in the simile. I liked the simile hear but it suffers a little from being overused. Minor issue.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Thanks for reading and for your suggestion, Ann.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written and beautifully presented I liked the way you weaved the story I enjoyed good luck in the contest regards Jill
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Yes this is well written and beautifully presented I liked the way you weaved the story I enjoyed good luck in the contest regards Jill
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Thanks for reading, Jill
Comment from emptypage
Haha. Interesting take. Not like any other entry, for certain. Ugly baby. Except for that mouth. Has a great mouth.
Seers are so wrong, right? I mean, they talk a lot of trash. And boy, they charge exorbitant fees. Like weathermen, they get paid for being wrong most of the time.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Haha. Interesting take. Not like any other entry, for certain. Ugly baby. Except for that mouth. Has a great mouth.
Seers are so wrong, right? I mean, they talk a lot of trash. And boy, they charge exorbitant fees. Like weathermen, they get paid for being wrong most of the time.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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You're so right. At least about weathermen, I've never visited a seer.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Awesome 100 words story, I like it a lot. It's so endearing and with a good ending too, my favorite. You did a good job with the challenge.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Hello, my friend,
Awesome 100 words story, I like it a lot. It's so endearing and with a good ending too, my favorite. You did a good job with the challenge.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your review.
Comment from JDRBAR
Is that a short or long life span for an ogre? Without saying, it takes away any conclusion to the story. Art work is darling. He's too cute to be an ogre. LOL
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Is that a short or long life span for an ogre? Without saying, it takes away any conclusion to the story. Art work is darling. He's too cute to be an ogre. LOL
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, The Forest Seer, fulfills the requirements of the context and shows us that ogres are living longer but not getting any smarter.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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This one-hundred-word story, The Forest Seer, fulfills the requirements of the context and shows us that ogres are living longer but not getting any smarter.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Indeed! Thanks for reading
Comment from F. Wehr3
Nice work on this story. I write fantasy mostly, so I was engaged in your little world. Good luck in the contest!
hawk... till--I suggest a space before your three dot ellipsis and change till to 'til.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Nice work on this story. I write fantasy mostly, so I was engaged in your little world. Good luck in the contest!
hawk... till--I suggest a space before your three dot ellipsis and change till to 'til.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Hi Russell,
'til, until and till are the same thing.
Thanks for noticing the space.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Jumpin' Jeezus on a Painted Pony, Anonymous Author!
If Marla's little boy ogre live to be 900 years old, how old was Marla when he died?
What's the average lifespan of an ogre, I wonder, speculatively speaking, of course?
According to Ogre-PathfinderWiki, ogre children reach their full size within six years, although the child-like glee ogres evince when smashing bodies and breaking bones make some wonder if they ever reach mental maturity. This rapid physical development is a necessity as few ogres live to even thirty years of age.
I guess Marla and her son were unique in that aspect.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Jumpin' Jeezus on a Painted Pony, Anonymous Author!
If Marla's little boy ogre live to be 900 years old, how old was Marla when he died?
What's the average lifespan of an ogre, I wonder, speculatively speaking, of course?
According to Ogre-PathfinderWiki, ogre children reach their full size within six years, although the child-like glee ogres evince when smashing bodies and breaking bones make some wonder if they ever reach mental maturity. This rapid physical development is a necessity as few ogres live to even thirty years of age.
I guess Marla and her son were unique in that aspect.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thanks for your fun review, Dean.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from apky
Right you are, Mother Marla, you can't trust these seers.
Not when it comes to your own flesh and blood.
You've woven a wee little story with much humour and
some lessons to be learnt, all with just a hundred words.
Well done.
Apky
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Right you are, Mother Marla, you can't trust these seers.
Not when it comes to your own flesh and blood.
You've woven a wee little story with much humour and
some lessons to be learnt, all with just a hundred words.
Well done.
Apky
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from Curly Girly
To me, this is an excellent entry. Good, creepy, weird image to boot.
Off to a great start here.
This short story tells many other stories between the lines, but without dictating to the reader.
Wry humour, but pleasing.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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To me, this is an excellent entry. Good, creepy, weird image to boot.
Off to a great start here.
This short story tells many other stories between the lines, but without dictating to the reader.
Wry humour, but pleasing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thanks for your kind review.
