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Unwanted Dog

Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Chapter One: Chance Encounter"
A short autobiography

26 total reviews 
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Brett,
You made your Dad proud retelling this story. I enjoyed it. I can't imagine how a 12 year old boy survived on the street alone. Thank God Mr. West came along & entered your life. I look forward to reading more [I see several more chapters posted].

Leaving Dusty West to clean up . . . How was I to now [know] he was nowhere . . . ? Jan

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
    Thankfully Dad came into my life.

    At Wal-Mart he could very easily have just shooed me off and completely ignored me.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This is a great introduction to a life story. It makes me wonder what occurred in the twelve years before meeting your dad. Perhaps that will come later or gas appeared sometime earlier.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of my autobiography.

    Much more to come along so I invite you along for the ride.

    Your comments, support, and reviews appreciated.
Comment from Sankey
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God bless you mate. I wish I had a Dad like you had. So enjoyed reading your story. Can't help feeling Cody has been influenced by a lot of your time with your adopted Dad. I am working through getting some of my poems and stories up, most of the Revive Certificates have probably run out now. Look forward to the next chapter of this.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
    Thanks you.

    Also appreciate the six stars.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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What a wonderful story Brett. It is true. Any man can be a father but it takes a special sort of man to be a dad. It sounds like your dad was heaven sent to take charge of your life and send you down the right path. Well done. Nancy

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this posting.

    Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from MizKat
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Hi Brett,

This is a very nice story about your Dad. I really enjoyed reading it. You are great at writing all kinds of things and I always love to read them.

Kat

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
    Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.

    Your support always appreciate.d
reply by MizKat on 22-Jun-2017
    You're welcome Brett. Kat
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Brett, as I'm adopted myself I can totally empathise with you. My adoptive father was my hero as well.
A well written piece that comes from the heat. That is obvious. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
    Thanks.
Comment from pome lover
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Wow!
You write this to your dad, which is wonderful, while also presenting yourself in a whole new light. I remember, now, from some of your other posts your talking about taking YOUR son with you places and the things he learned, etc -now I realize - following in your dad's footsteps! - completing the circle.
This meaningful story tells of your beginning - your basis for what you are today.
It is very moving and I, for one, am impressed with your accomplishments.
pome lover

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this posting.

    Appreciate your comments and support, as well as the review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Brett; this is a beautiful sharing of a slice of your life. You were so lucky to have this man come into your life. I have taken the time to buy a stranger a meal, but I didn't follow up or make their problems mine.

Hearing your story gives me hope about the money I send to Boystown every month. I know they spend time with boys and girls who need parenting. Your story is a true success.

Big hugs to you as I know you must miss the man who literally saved your life - God bless and keep you,

~patty~

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this posting.

    Always appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from BeasPeas
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Your story is well written and clear. I am assuming it is true because you have listed it as such--non-fiction. It sounds like you hit the jackpot with this man taking you under his wing and adopting you. You say that you were 11 years old, the same age as one of my grandsons. The reader needs to know why you were on your own at such a young age. As you say, that may be the topic of another write. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this posting.

    Always appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.

    Several have asked me to tell more of my story, so I plan to write at least two more pieces on the topic.
Comment from Halfree
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This posting needs editing, lots of grammer errows that kills the flow of the story. Do not know why the phrase "yours truly" is used...seems so out of place, "Not all that far." not a sentence...no subject or verb. "A street urchin" not a sentence, no subject or verb.
"Leaving Dusty West to...who is Dusty West? "and nowhere near done...really off the wall writing.
Biggest Country Stars! Why the capitals?
I think you have a good story waiting to be told and I suggest you make an outline of the story and then rewrite this story.



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 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
    Your spelling in this so called review you wasted time writing, "errows" for errors, and the tone of the review prove beyond doubt that you need a refresher in beginning writing and one in grammar school spelling.

    Your question about "who is Dusty West?" after having read the posting, indicates your need for a refresher on comprehending what you have read because obviously you lack in this fundamental concept as well.

    While these are proven facts there must be another reason for your bitterness. For general knowledge sake, can I garner by the evidence presented in this completely ridiculous, and incoherent review, your raging bitterness is the result of your miserable failing in life?
reply by Halfree on 21-Jun-2017
    Sorry about the spelling thing. My only response to your message is from The Bard....Methinks thou dost protest too much.