What Do I Do Now
It pays to keep the faith!26 total reviews
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
After reading 'What Do I Do Now', I find that it is a great story.
Well-written.
Interesting.
The dialogue is believable.
Great artwork. The image shown supports the story.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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After reading 'What Do I Do Now', I find that it is a great story.
Well-written.
Interesting.
The dialogue is believable.
Great artwork. The image shown supports the story.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Nikki-Nicole
You wrote a very academic review which featured most
of the writing elements. I appreciate your thoughts the time
you took to read and review my story.
Best regards,
gnewton75
Comment from royowen
I guess Jesus is the absolute centrality of scripture, "He said to Philip, "if you've seen me you've seen the Father" John 14:9. It's not really "religion" that's the problem, the world is an errant world that does not love God or their neighbour, well...not like God does. And the blame game was invented to divert judgement, but it's the personification of "sensual". Love is not religion, (they are merely rules, as given to a child, for an orderly society) everyone practises religion to a degree, Jesus was the propitiation for law's penalty, but love is the only requirement-Biblically, everything else will kill us. We must hide ourselves in Christ by faith, Eph. 2:8-9. But then....how is that religion? I'm sort of agreeing with you, it has taken me many years to arrive at understanding what is incredibly simple, God loves us! Heheh, excellent post, well done, good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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I guess Jesus is the absolute centrality of scripture, "He said to Philip, "if you've seen me you've seen the Father" John 14:9. It's not really "religion" that's the problem, the world is an errant world that does not love God or their neighbour, well...not like God does. And the blame game was invented to divert judgement, but it's the personification of "sensual". Love is not religion, (they are merely rules, as given to a child, for an orderly society) everyone practises religion to a degree, Jesus was the propitiation for law's penalty, but love is the only requirement-Biblically, everything else will kill us. We must hide ourselves in Christ by faith, Eph. 2:8-9. But then....how is that religion? I'm sort of agreeing with you, it has taken me many years to arrive at understanding what is incredibly simple, God loves us! Heheh, excellent post, well done, good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Thank royowen for reading and reviewing my story.
Best regards,
gnewton75
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Welcome
Comment from Patricia A. Shaw
There is nothing like riding down the road with the word of God and Him. Whether it is in our dreams or our reality. I am not going to comment on individual interpretation of the Bible but I will say He gives us free will. Now, what we do with that to determine what is right or wrong is our life's struggle. Your story was very well written and illustrated. It kept me engaged in its description, searching, color and changes. When we are put in the wilderness to think with Him, what choices do we have? The reality is people don't realize something can happen to them that can change their life completely just like everyone else. There is only one sentence that I would change though in your story. I would have said- I saw a sign ahead that said... I would have just switched the sentence around a little bit. Thanks for a great story in the country and on the road.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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There is nothing like riding down the road with the word of God and Him. Whether it is in our dreams or our reality. I am not going to comment on individual interpretation of the Bible but I will say He gives us free will. Now, what we do with that to determine what is right or wrong is our life's struggle. Your story was very well written and illustrated. It kept me engaged in its description, searching, color and changes. When we are put in the wilderness to think with Him, what choices do we have? The reality is people don't realize something can happen to them that can change their life completely just like everyone else. There is only one sentence that I would change though in your story. I would have said- I saw a sign ahead that said... I would have just switched the sentence around a little bit. Thanks for a great story in the country and on the road.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Hi Patricia A. Shaw
Thank you for the time to read and write a review of my story.
I appreciate your comments very much.
Bless you,
gnewton77
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Great
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Interesting. He had plenty of time to think, and he decided to go home. But the story started with him having NO PLACE TO GO. So how could he decide to go home at the end? Perhaps if you had said WHY he left home and felt he had no chance of returning, the story might have fit together better.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Interesting. He had plenty of time to think, and he decided to go home. But the story started with him having NO PLACE TO GO. So how could he decide to go home at the end? Perhaps if you had said WHY he left home and felt he had no chance of returning, the story might have fit together better.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Hi Phyllis:
Home, wasn't his previous physical location.
Thanks for reading the story and for your comments.
Best wishes,
gnewton77
Comment from Ricky1024
This was an interesting and Spiritual piece.
As if you were passing, reflecting on the past, and seeing the vision of God.
"Death brings us no recourse to reflect on our past ddeds. Our victories and our sins.
This was rich in your thoughts of life and being alone.
"Alone for Life, The Ultimate Curse....
Ricky1024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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This was an interesting and Spiritual piece.
As if you were passing, reflecting on the past, and seeing the vision of God.
"Death brings us no recourse to reflect on our past ddeds. Our victories and our sins.
This was rich in your thoughts of life and being alone.
"Alone for Life, The Ultimate Curse....
Ricky1024
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Ricky1024
Thank you for taking the time to read and review my story.
I appreciate your comments.
Best regards,
gnewton75
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
quaking duck songs while swimming (quacking)
God's plan for salvation and penitence be accomplished (and) man needs God to do it
Discovere a new respect for love, (discover)
somethings in our life that we would like to have, (some things--two words)
Wild flowers (one word)
The signed said, "WELCOME TO MY HOME TOWN." (sign)
A good story. Great descriptions in the first part. The last part seemed a bit long and wordy to me although I am sure to you that is the important part. Is there a way to shorten it a bit for the reader and still convey the same message?
Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
stain window (stained glass)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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quaking duck songs while swimming (quacking)
God's plan for salvation and penitence be accomplished (and) man needs God to do it
Discovere a new respect for love, (discover)
somethings in our life that we would like to have, (some things--two words)
Wild flowers (one word)
The signed said, "WELCOME TO MY HOME TOWN." (sign)
A good story. Great descriptions in the first part. The last part seemed a bit long and wordy to me although I am sure to you that is the important part. Is there a way to shorten it a bit for the reader and still convey the same message?
Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
stain window (stained glass)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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dejohnsrid (Debbie)
Thank you for your comments and taking the time to point out
mistakes. I appreciate your comments very much.
Cordially,
gnewton75
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written life story. Most of us ask us this question when we reach the age of about forty. We realize that our only chance to get through the rest of our life is to get closer to God.
Typo picked up
....Discovere(discover) a new respect for love,
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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A very well-written life story. Most of us ask us this question when we reach the age of about forty. We realize that our only chance to get through the rest of our life is to get closer to God.
Typo picked up
....Discovere(discover) a new respect for love,
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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HI Sandra du Plessis,
Thank you for your comments and for taking the time to read
and review my story. I appreciate you.
gnewton75
Comment from Fridayauthor
This is an interesting story of self analysis and reevaluation. It is easy to follow and holds the reader's attention as the narrator searches for answers.
I think the piece could be more tightly written, minimizing some of the detail. A few sentences are overly long,
Paragraph break after...on our old Emerson radio.
Very nice posting.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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This is an interesting story of self analysis and reevaluation. It is easy to follow and holds the reader's attention as the narrator searches for answers.
I think the piece could be more tightly written, minimizing some of the detail. A few sentences are overly long,
Paragraph break after...on our old Emerson radio.
Very nice posting.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Hi Fridayauthor:
Thanks for your comments and for taking the time to
read and review my story.
I appreciate all you have to say.
gnewton75
Comment from bhogg
Well, I didn't do my duty and look for areas that need to be revisited. All your fault though. I got caught up in your narrative and just stayed along for the ride. I very much like the way the 'journey' is centering, with the religious thought intersperced throughout. A very good writing technique.
Funny - I wrote an essay with every intention of entering this contest. Had an oops moment and just posted as a stand-alone.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
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Well, I didn't do my duty and look for areas that need to be revisited. All your fault though. I got caught up in your narrative and just stayed along for the ride. I very much like the way the 'journey' is centering, with the religious thought intersperced throughout. A very good writing technique.
Funny - I wrote an essay with every intention of entering this contest. Had an oops moment and just posted as a stand-alone.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
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bhogg
Thank you for the compliment. I appreciate you taking the time to
read and review my story.
God Bless,
gnewton75
Comment from Bill Schott
I have to describe the story of Adam and Eve as one that presents God as powerful, men as children, easily led astray, women as a distracting influence needing to be suppressed, and man's choice to know more as a sin, instead the natural, God-given desire to grow.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I have to describe the story of Adam and Eve as one that presents God as powerful, men as children, easily led astray, women as a distracting influence needing to be suppressed, and man's choice to know more as a sin, instead the natural, God-given desire to grow.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thanks Bill for your review.
gnewton75
