Everyday Heroes
Even Strangers can touch your heart47 total reviews
Comment from Hansel1
I really enjoyed the layout of the piece; it reads smooth and effortlessly. A lovely truth to the read as well. People, while full of so many flaws, have the ability to be such beautiful creatures in times of need.
Thank you for sharing your work with us - Cheers!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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I really enjoyed the layout of the piece; it reads smooth and effortlessly. A lovely truth to the read as well. People, while full of so many flaws, have the ability to be such beautiful creatures in times of need.
Thank you for sharing your work with us - Cheers!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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These people had no idea the impact they had on my life at that moment, yet that moment became important to them. Thank you for encouraging me to write.
Comment from Oatmeal
The arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. Thoughts are expressed and described well. The words you chose worked very well. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental and thought provoking.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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The arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. Thoughts are expressed and described well. The words you chose worked very well. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental and thought provoking.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Non-judgmental in your words stuck with me. When i speak my words listen because, more than anything, I have ever said, I need and want to hear your words, your stories, your beliefs, because then I can still try to understand who we are.
Comment from Thal1959
This is a very well written free verse, and is also presented attractively. The arrangement of stanzas gives it a kind of rhythm. Personally, though, I fond that when something has saddened me, I prefer to be alone and not have to tell numerous people about it. But it can be almost "heroic" of people to care and try to help.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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This is a very well written free verse, and is also presented attractively. The arrangement of stanzas gives it a kind of rhythm. Personally, though, I fond that when something has saddened me, I prefer to be alone and not have to tell numerous people about it. But it can be almost "heroic" of people to care and try to help.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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You just opened up your heart to me. You just said, sadness limits you and will not allow you to share, yet, you understood my need to be open. I am sure you have so many stories to tell. Wow, I would love to read them.
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure. I'm not sure sadness limits me. Loneliness and I are old companions. At 58, I am actually use to it, and I prefer solitude. When people try to "help," they are really only irritating me by unintentionally intruding.
Comment from crich
I'm sure everyone reading this can relate. The kindness of acquaintances and pure strangers when we are in need (sometimes we don't even know what we need!) is the soul source of our humanity. Your form is interesting - a few sentences together on the left - the rest running away. It seems to go perfectly with the mixed feelings of an ex-husband's death. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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I'm sure everyone reading this can relate. The kindness of acquaintances and pure strangers when we are in need (sometimes we don't even know what we need!) is the soul source of our humanity. Your form is interesting - a few sentences together on the left - the rest running away. It seems to go perfectly with the mixed feelings of an ex-husband's death. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for understanding the format. You put it perfectly, sometihing I didn't even know when I wrote it. I am so grateful for the son from the marriage, but it was so hard living with his constant criticism and abuse. Thank you for clarifying what I didn't even know I did . So special to me.
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You are welcome! And thank you for the reviewing vote, that was so kind. I'm glad I could help you see something that might help you sort out those feelings. I have 2 exes. I understand completely.
Comment from gudbjorg
This is a poem of my liking, The flow is great and the story sequence is impressive. There are no heroes who aren't also everyday heroes for it takes much courage and willingness to give your life for someone else. That takes a lot of self-denial, love and courage. That's what I feel is expressed in your fine write. These are humble people who simply do things that need to be done without even knowing themselves as you express so well in your last stanza that they are heroes.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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This is a poem of my liking, The flow is great and the story sequence is impressive. There are no heroes who aren't also everyday heroes for it takes much courage and willingness to give your life for someone else. That takes a lot of self-denial, love and courage. That's what I feel is expressed in your fine write. These are humble people who simply do things that need to be done without even knowing themselves as you express so well in your last stanza that they are heroes.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Thank you. I so agree. As a teacher i have students who come to me ten years later and talk about a small moment in my class when I made them feel good about themselves. They surprise me with the moments I never even knew were important to them. Every child needs those moments. I am now 62 years old and needed help and these simi strangers were truly there for me with understanding and love.
Comment from smbau
The poet narrates in first person the heroes seen daily yet never known. The poem is more of story about the loss of an ex husband. Despite ex-husband battering the main character, she mourns his death. She finds solace and comfort from those who talk to her in act of kindness. I gave a four because the poem read more like a story to me than a poem. Suggest the following;
"and never even know[n]"
minimization of repeats like 1st stanza line 3 and 4 could be "People who listen, never judge"
This a great poem that would be further enhanced by more ending rhyme words.
Overall, the structure, the content and chosen words brought the poet's everyday heroes to light.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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The poet narrates in first person the heroes seen daily yet never known. The poem is more of story about the loss of an ex husband. Despite ex-husband battering the main character, she mourns his death. She finds solace and comfort from those who talk to her in act of kindness. I gave a four because the poem read more like a story to me than a poem. Suggest the following;
"and never even know[n]"
minimization of repeats like 1st stanza line 3 and 4 could be "People who listen, never judge"
This a great poem that would be further enhanced by more ending rhyme words.
Overall, the structure, the content and chosen words brought the poet's everyday heroes to light.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Thank you smbau, I do like writing free verse. Sometimes they rhyme in my mind and some don't . i too love the ones that rhyme. I will look it over and see what might be changed.
Comment from Leena
Wonderfully penned down reality of life; the good Samaritans are often strangers. Enjoyed reading your realistic, believable and meaningful poem. Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
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Wonderfully penned down reality of life; the good Samaritans are often strangers. Enjoyed reading your realistic, believable and meaningful poem. Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
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Thank you , people are wonderful and they truly understand and care.
Comment from Curly Girly
I am sorry for your loss.
This is an honest, simple statement:
To say I am confused at my emotions is obvious
I don't miss him
I wish things were different
We can feel despondent when we feel powerless to make a difference, and that is hard.
I am glad you were surrounded by caring people. The support of others always helps us feel better.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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I am sorry for your loss.
This is an honest, simple statement:
To say I am confused at my emotions is obvious
I don't miss him
I wish things were different
We can feel despondent when we feel powerless to make a difference, and that is hard.
I am glad you were surrounded by caring people. The support of others always helps us feel better.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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thank you, confusion is part of grief and these people were wonderful to help me.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Heroes are everywhere. Sometimes they only appears when the need for them to be there arise. To grieve is something each one have to find their own way to deal with that emotions.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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A very well-written poem. Heroes are everywhere. Sometimes they only appears when the need for them to be there arise. To grieve is something each one have to find their own way to deal with that emotions.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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I will cherish what you just said.
Sometimes they only appear when the need for them to be there
wow, you nailed it. they are there for us.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I have to say that this is one of the saddest yet uplifting writes I've read in sometime! Heroes are everywhere. Funny that though the best ones are the ones who are just there and don't expect any return. Your flow and smooth reading is phenomenal. I think there would have to be something else submitted to this contest that was particularly and utterly incredible for this beauty not to win! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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I have to say that this is one of the saddest yet uplifting writes I've read in sometime! Heroes are everywhere. Funny that though the best ones are the ones who are just there and don't expect any return. Your flow and smooth reading is phenomenal. I think there would have to be something else submitted to this contest that was particularly and utterly incredible for this beauty not to win! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 16-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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thank you so much. Small kindnesses change the world. A smile, a simple, " I understand" is wonderful. Thank you for helping me feel like my words are understood.
