Old Garden
naani contest entry18 total reviews
Comment from Taffspride
An excellent entry for this contest. I really like the poignant picture you conjure up with your well penned words. Gardens are always such special places, when I read this I thought of my mother's garden and my own special little plot.
You have met all the rules of the contest four lines and under 25 syllables.
I wish you good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing .
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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An excellent entry for this contest. I really like the poignant picture you conjure up with your well penned words. Gardens are always such special places, when I read this I thought of my mother's garden and my own special little plot.
You have met all the rules of the contest four lines and under 25 syllables.
I wish you good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing .
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Oh, Ann, thank you so much! I hope I didn't make you feel you had to review this. We will have to discuss naani, as it is a great form. Hugs I hope your pool is okay. You are a dear friend at a distance.
Comment from crich
Change the name to Alma and you will have written about my grandmother's garden. After she died and the house was sold, the new owners let her roses grow wild then cut them down. It was as sad as your poem implies. And inevitable. Great job!
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Change the name to Alma and you will have written about my grandmother's garden. After she died and the house was sold, the new owners let her roses grow wild then cut them down. It was as sad as your poem implies. And inevitable. Great job!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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What a wonderful and insightful review. You are exactly the person I wrote this for, as I have lost some many old gardens in my life. Thank you for the review.
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Thank you. i love the bittersweet memories evoked by a great poet!
Comment from Irish Rain
Aww, so sad. Sounds sorta like 'The Secret Garden'....which was neglected for years. This is a lovely entry in this contest, good luck, blessings...
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Aww, so sad. Sounds sorta like 'The Secret Garden'....which was neglected for years. This is a lovely entry in this contest, good luck, blessings...
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from sharonlshelley
good little poem enjoyed reading it every thing said in a few lines, just getting used to all the different types of poetry on here learning fast as i read more
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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good little poem enjoyed reading it every thing said in a few lines, just getting used to all the different types of poetry on here learning fast as i read more
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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A naani is an Asian form, which like haiku and tanka used to be popular on this site. But unfortunately it has become a "dying" form on Fanstory. There are so many beautiful pieces in these forms, so I thank you for taking an interest int my nanni and for your review.
Comment from donforclearn
This poem is a well written and about life's changes. The image of roses shows initially care for and love. Then, the lack of care of the roses demonstrates a change in life. Thank you for sharing your work. Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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This poem is a well written and about life's changes. The image of roses shows initially care for and love. Then, the lack of care of the roses demonstrates a change in life. Thank you for sharing your work. Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Exactly, it is about life changes. I just hope people see it as you do, and this a very well thought out review. Thank you.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Poet speaks about the children visitors use to visit, pass time in laughter at Laura's old garden, but today none attends the beautiful roses but the poet who enjoys,
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Poet speaks about the children visitors use to visit, pass time in laughter at Laura's old garden, but today none attends the beautiful roses but the poet who enjoys,
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Yes, the poet misses Laura's garden, but she has passed on. So glad you reviewed my little naani.
Comment from RodG
A very nice Naani which tells a surprisingly detailed story of a once happy garden now unattended perhaps because everyone's too old and/or gone.
"Bubbled" is the perfect word to describe the garden as it once was.
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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A very nice Naani which tells a surprisingly detailed story of a once happy garden now unattended perhaps because everyone's too old and/or gone.
"Bubbled" is the perfect word to describe the garden as it once was.
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Thank you, this is exactly the kind of review I was hoping for.
Comment from Janet Foor
In Laura's old garden
which once bubbled
with children's laughter
roses grow unattended
This is a somber thought provoking Naani poem for the contest.
Well done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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In Laura's old garden
which once bubbled
with children's laughter
roses grow unattended
This is a somber thought provoking Naani poem for the contest.
Well done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Thank you, this is exactly the kind of review I was hoping for.
