Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Bittersweet Memories"A Novel of the Breedline Series
6 total reviews
Comment from rwilliam
Oh, I like the photo for this chapter!!
When the call ended, Helen frowned deep enough to wrinkle her forehead.--LOVED this description SO MUCH! :-)
AWESOME chapter! I LOVED it! I love the twists and turns you take. Such wonderfully talented writing! I"m serious! BRAVO!!! *clap*clap*clap
I'm honored to say I know you. I'm so glad you had the courage to write. You sure did have a story in you and it's amazing that you're putting it out there for people to enjoy! SO PROUD of you! SO PROUD!!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Oh, I like the photo for this chapter!!
When the call ended, Helen frowned deep enough to wrinkle her forehead.--LOVED this description SO MUCH! :-)
AWESOME chapter! I LOVED it! I love the twists and turns you take. Such wonderfully talented writing! I"m serious! BRAVO!!! *clap*clap*clap
I'm honored to say I know you. I'm so glad you had the courage to write. You sure did have a story in you and it's amazing that you're putting it out there for people to enjoy! SO PROUD of you! SO PROUD!!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you my friend! Your encouragement & helpful advice made the difference. I will keep writing & continue to do my best to grow as a storyteller. Thanks again for taking the time to help me. Let me know when you start your blog. Miss your stories!
Comment from ngage
Wow, Shana! I am entrigued by the new character, Dr. Kenneth Craven. He was Celina's surgeon, and now he might be Tessa's father. Very interesting. You"ve perked my interest. My favorite part is finding out Sebastian's twin brother's plans to introduce him to this person, Lilith. It sounds like alot is fixing to happen for the Breedline. Fantastic chapter!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Wow, Shana! I am entrigued by the new character, Dr. Kenneth Craven. He was Celina's surgeon, and now he might be Tessa's father. Very interesting. You"ve perked my interest. My favorite part is finding out Sebastian's twin brother's plans to introduce him to this person, Lilith. It sounds like alot is fixing to happen for the Breedline. Fantastic chapter!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you! Your such a positive & inspiring friend. Your reviews lighten my day & motivate me to leep telling my story. Shana :)
Comment from royowen
You're perception is amazing Shana. The longing one would have fto find missing daughter, would be extreme, I know, I fathered two. But they're safe. I love the imaginative way you are sewing this new plot together is very well "plotted". The introduction of fresh faces and the interwove connections, is both creative and thoughtfully brilliant, I love the missing twin concept, and undulating undercurrent of anticipation, well done my friend, excellent design, blessings, Roy PS your dear man OK?
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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You're perception is amazing Shana. The longing one would have fto find missing daughter, would be extreme, I know, I fathered two. But they're safe. I love the imaginative way you are sewing this new plot together is very well "plotted". The introduction of fresh faces and the interwove connections, is both creative and thoughtfully brilliant, I love the missing twin concept, and undulating undercurrent of anticipation, well done my friend, excellent design, blessings, Roy PS your dear man OK?
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Roy :) I thought bringing in new characters, especially from Tessa's past would give my story a new twist. I think as readers get into thr story more, they will find it touching. I'm a sucker for heartfelt stories & good endings. Thank you for your kind & gracious review. Yes, my Carl is doing well. Thanks for asking. Always your fan & friend. Shana :)
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I'm glad dear Shana
Comment from Ricky1024
I liked this chapter gives the first time reader a nice flow.
Theme and imagery blend well here.
Adjective Content was superior and Objective Content was excellent
Grammar no errors...
Thanks,
Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I liked this chapter gives the first time reader a nice flow.
Theme and imagery blend well here.
Adjective Content was superior and Objective Content was excellent
Grammar no errors...
Thanks,
Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Ricky :) Your review is truly inspiring to me. I really enjoy hearing I don"t have any mistakes. Thanks again! Shana :)
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. I have been following your story for some time now. It is interesting and a great read. You handle the dialogue in an excellent manner that makes it believable and easy to follow. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Excellent. I have been following your story for some time now. It is interesting and a great read. You handle the dialogue in an excellent manner that makes it believable and easy to follow. Nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Oh thank you! :) Its always a pleasure hearing from you. You give me confidence & inspiration. Thank you for following my story. I"m honored. Shana :)
Comment from Mistydawn
What a great chapter it's well written, descriptive. The characters are so strong, so well developed that you can picture them in your mind. The dialogue is smooth, flowed naturally, not forced, something your characters would say. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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What a great chapter it's well written, descriptive. The characters are so strong, so well developed that you can picture them in your mind. The dialogue is smooth, flowed naturally, not forced, something your characters would say. Great job.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Mistydawn :)
Your feedback is very helpful. I'm glad to hear you say that about my characters. There is a piece of me in each one. I want them to be real to the reader as if they actually exist. I work so hard on each one... they are my babies. LOL! Thanks again for the fantastic review. Very inspiring.
Shana :)
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Characters do become your babies, your friends. I get so attached to some that I bring them back in another story. This is why my Three detectives and Captain has been with me from the beginning, lol.
