The True Test
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Survival in the office. "Teachers are left to survive
10 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Judy, great chapter, and I'm sure the storms won't be too severe. Not what they need after a quake. I hope they will be out the next day. Looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2017
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Hi Judy, great chapter, and I'm sure the storms won't be too severe. Not what they need after a quake. I hope they will be out the next day. Looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2017
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You were one of the first people who gave my writing validity and I cherish that. I am working hard on this story and will try to finish by the end of summer. thank you for believing in me.
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Judy, thanks a lot for your words. That's what happened to me. I've received invaluable help, and still do. I like your writing a lot. :)))
Comment from frogbook
Good story progression and an ending that leaves the reading waiting for more. Good length for a chapter and good descriptions.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Good story progression and an ending that leaves the reading waiting for more. Good length for a chapter and good descriptions.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you, I'm continuing to work on this every day this summer. Thanks for the needed encouragement
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Great chapter. They are a resourceful group, as you would hope teachers would be. This is one bad storm.. Just what they didn't need after a quake.Surely the winds will die down in the morning.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Great chapter. They are a resourceful group, as you would hope teachers would be. This is one bad storm.. Just what they didn't need after a quake.Surely the winds will die down in the morning.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Yes, the winds will and they will venture out. Thank you so much for your support.
Comment from Aiona
Oo! Oo! Oo! EXCITING THRILLER. About teachers! In a school! This is better than "Snakes On a Plane!" I love the setting, and the insight into the characters' lives. This would make a fantastic disaster movie.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Oo! Oo! Oo! EXCITING THRILLER. About teachers! In a school! This is better than "Snakes On a Plane!" I love the setting, and the insight into the characters' lives. This would make a fantastic disaster movie.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much. I am working hard on it every day and hope to be finished by the end of summer. Thank you for your support.
Comment from Joan E.
I used to teach and also live in California, where earthquakes are always a possibility; so, your background notes were intriguing. I admired your description of the disaster and your characters' reaction to it through the realistic dialog you created. The positive advice was reassuring as well. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I used to teach and also live in California, where earthquakes are always a possibility; so, your background notes were intriguing. I admired your description of the disaster and your characters' reaction to it through the realistic dialog you created. The positive advice was reassuring as well. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Teachers are such wonderful people . We would find a way to survive.
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Teachers are some of our unsung heroes. Here's to survival! -Joan
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I truly love the way you prepare us for the next chapter by making the intrigue unbearable. Nicely written and I see no problems. Why is it going to take a week to get help?
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I truly love the way you prepare us for the next chapter by making the intrigue unbearable. Nicely written and I see no problems. Why is it going to take a week to get help?
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I'm basing how long it takes on the disaster at Katrina. It took five days to help those people. this is supposed to have destroyed as far out as forty miles from the school on all sides. I am going to have their phones eventually work. Hellicopters will also help soon. They just have to keep living there for now
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Now I understand. good real life
Comment from Sasha
I originally thought they experienced an earthquake but clearly it was a severe storm, possibly a hurricane. The damage is horrific and not being able to contact anyone from the outside only adds to the concern. It is amazing how a disaster can bring out both the worst and best in a person. Very nice work with this one. You did a very nice job with this.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I originally thought they experienced an earthquake but clearly it was a severe storm, possibly a hurricane. The damage is horrific and not being able to contact anyone from the outside only adds to the concern. It is amazing how a disaster can bring out both the worst and best in a person. Very nice work with this one. You did a very nice job with this.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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thanks smurph , I am working on it every day this summer for at least two hours. It helps so much to have your encouragement.
Comment from Sugar Cube1
The characters were nice to read and I really found myself liking them. They were believable, and realistic. The dialogue was also very believable. I enjoyed the story and plot line in this chapter, as well. It kept me interested.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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The characters were nice to read and I really found myself liking them. They were believable, and realistic. The dialogue was also very believable. I enjoyed the story and plot line in this chapter, as well. It kept me interested.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you Sugar cube. I am spending the summer finishing this by working on it at least two hours a day. I so appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from patcelaw
Judy, this was an excellent read and I enjoyed it very much. It reads like a really life event and it is so true that in the times of disaster we as people do draw closer and encourage each other. Patricia
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Judy, this was an excellent read and I enjoyed it very much. It reads like a really life event and it is so true that in the times of disaster we as people do draw closer and encourage each other. Patricia
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you , The short novel is coming together well with the encouragement of people like you.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Would be a good idea to include what's happened previously or synopsis.
Good solid chapter here getting to know some of the other women.
Watch out for passivity in the right. A lot of usage of 'was'.
opened the door to her bosses office - boss's (what you've written means multiple bosses).
You have a change in font size about half way too.
Through the open doorway, they could see straight through Carolina's office into Tommy's and the open space that used to be his window - why would they have left this open during the storm?
The innocence in the question touched Maria's, heart- delete the comma from here.
For example; The teachers never have - should be a comma here rather than a semi colon and the teachers.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Hi there,
Would be a good idea to include what's happened previously or synopsis.
Good solid chapter here getting to know some of the other women.
Watch out for passivity in the right. A lot of usage of 'was'.
opened the door to her bosses office - boss's (what you've written means multiple bosses).
You have a change in font size about half way too.
Through the open doorway, they could see straight through Carolina's office into Tommy's and the open space that used to be his window - why would they have left this open during the storm?
The innocence in the question touched Maria's, heart- delete the comma from here.
For example; The teachers never have - should be a comma here rather than a semi colon and the teachers.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I will fix it, I promise. Always appreciate your critiques, I forgot to put the synopsis on this one. I will add that too.
