Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello estory
I don't think you missed anything about the media and reading the newspaper. When I open my newspaper or the TV news there is sad reports and scary things and not enough of good new (except for Robin Mead on HLN

Gert

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thank you for the five star review and for your comments supporting the poem. It is really about the helplessness we feel when confronted by these events in the media, and the dehumanizing, matter of fact, electronic way in which they are presented. estory

reply by Gert sherwood on 09-Jun-2017

You are welcome estory
thank you for your reply to my comments
Gert

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a barrage of news topics for sure. You did a great job capturing the feel of being inundated by news form all media. Your lines flow well & do make one realize that news is a competition among the different aspects of media sources. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thanks for the great review and for all your comments supporting this poem. I am glad you got something from this spin on the news. It is a bit unsettling, but a big part of our lives today, this electronic dissemination of news events. estory

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written summary of the daily news in the newspapers. There is nothing but bad news and deaths of innocent children and youth.

Typo
A five year (five-year-old) child was shot in a drive by

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thanks for the excellent review and for supporting the poem. The news is what it is , but the endless barrage of it, the dehumanizing, matter of fact way in which it disseminated, and the helplessness we feel under the unslaught of it is a big part of life today. estory

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning estory: You have accomplished your poem in the way you set out to do it. You didnt leave anything out either. The world is full of chaos and danger. It has surly become the Devil's playground.

Yet there is so much warning about these things same things, not only in the news channels and news papers but in our bibles. God has given appropriate warings and prophesy about it all.

This poem is very informative and creative. I hope this information will wake others up regarding it all. Most people are so in fear of this world's condition, they are afraid to watch or read the news. So they just go on trying not to pay attention. I am paying attenton though. Thank you for this awakening piece.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thank you for the excellent review and for your interesting comments supporting the poem. It is very unsettling, even challenging, dealing with the barrage of news on the media today. It is so matter of fact, sometimes disseminated with an eye to growing audiences and profits, and we are so helpless in the onslaught of it. It is a big part of life today. estory

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

"A five year child was shot in a drive by
While the governor is being investigated for
The lawsuit filed on behalf of
Four runs in five innings

How sad. No one actually reports the news.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thanks for the excellent review and for your comments supporting the poem. In this stanza, I was trying to capture the matter of fact, rapid fire way the news is disseminated today. Murder, corruption, sports and weather all jammed together like a collage of life kind of dehumanizes the human experience. And we are so helpless in the onslaught of it. estory

Comment from rosehill (Wendy)

Excellent

It sings like a piece of performance art. I watched the phalanx of TV screens with their snippets, the 50 foot newspaper with revolving headlines, the silent actor/mime trying to understand, whirling from image to image, finally lying in a heap on the ground . . .sobbing or, worse yet, a sort of comatose indifference. Nicely done. - Wendy

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thank you for the excellent review and for all your interesting comments supporting this poem. I think you got what I was trying to say. The world is so dehumanized today, everything revolves around profits and sensation, the rapid fire dissemination reduces these events to their lowest common denominators. and we are helpless under the torrent of it. estory

Comment from Ruth Ann Kaimuloa

Exceptional

Very well written. This was very poignant with everything going on these days. It is so true with all that is in the news this poem is appropriate. It is true - we are all victims of the news. The only thing newsworthy these days has to be apocalyptic.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thanks again for this amazing six star review and for supporting this poem. I am glad you were moved by what I was trying to say and how I said it. I appreciate all the wonderful comments estory

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

You certainly achieved your goal. I felt as though I could be flipping channels and hearing snippets of reports. It was very true to life.

I loved the rhythm of the poem best, though. When I like a poem, it is usually because my ear catches a rhythm or a cadence, and I did that here easily. It was almost a drumbeat. Beautifully done.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thank you for the excellent review and for all your comments supporting the poem and its construction. I am glad you were so moved by what this poem had to say, and how I said it. Rhythm is very important to poetry, and in this poem I tried to create this almost mechanical music out of the computerized rapid fire dissemination of news and related images, that dehumanizes the experience. estory

reply by emptypage on 09-Jun-2017

You succeeded. As to my review, feel free to nominate me as reviewer of the month ANY time!

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Being aware of the news does not make us helpless.
Not knowing what's going on does.
Is the 'news' always accurate? Complete?
Nope. but that's why we have brains.
How we 'read' the news makes the difference.
Sheep don't read the news, but they know when they're threatened.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thanks for the excellent review and for your interesting comments. We are all moved by the news in different ways. But in many ways, there is little or nothing we can do about these events. What have we really changed about the world in the last few years? in fact, I think the evidence shows the world is getting worse. Terror attacks everyday, corruption rampant, foreign intervention in democracy, corperate control of government; I would argue there is no real democracy. Who picked Trump and Clinton to run in the election? What real choice do we really have? And what can we do about it? All the demonstrations in the streets haven't changed anything. estory

reply by humpwhistle on 09-Jun-2017

Like you, I'm on high alert.
But I've seen other dark days.
The 60s demonstrations in the streets concerning civil rights, and the Asian war didn't change much--at first.
It took time to get us where we are. It will take time to get us someplace else.
Stay vigilant, and speak up. Change requires contagion. L

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Your poem captures exactly how I feel as I listen/watch the new on TV, or peruse the pages on Facebook. I cringe and my blood pressure rises. Its a mess.
Thank you for sharing and giving the swirling thoughts in my head a focus,
~patty~

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 Comment Written 07-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Thanks for the great review and for your comments supporting this poem estory