Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

I know that I've read a few of your posts in the past and enjoyed them all. Now, I just can't imagine why the heck I haven't read more, other than I just don't see them. Thanks for the pleasure of reading your well written story, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Great job, and best of luck in the contest. :-)

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Hopefully, you will continue to see more of my pieces - I usually promote pretty well, so they are front and center on the welcome page. Thank you for your well wishes in the contest,
~patty~

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is an excellent contest entry. Dean will be pleased. I would wish you well in the contest, but since I entered too I hope you crash and burn.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Wow. I love you too. Lol. Good luck to both of us!

Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

The best entry for Dr. Terry I've read yet! Well done!!!

...leaving a mess( Do you need the ; here? would it be a comma since there's an 'and'?)

Maybe switch to ...luxuriant tri-color coat...?

breeds; (she'd instead of she) found...

...and scraped up(end sentence here to avoid repeating 'places'?)

...flooded the path(end sentence here to avoid repeating 'woods'?)

He ran (into) the woods and...place (where he'd) found the creature (delete 'in' this/that) morning.

Oh, poor Jimi!!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi Kathleen; thank you so much for stopping by and the very thorough and concise review. I have looked at the edits you suggested and gone back to the piece and did some massaging. THANK YOU for your help - the piece feels much tighter now.
~patty~

reply by kathleenspalding on 12-Jun-2017

You're welcome. Thanks for being my source of entertainment today, LOL.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Good introduction of what is to follow.

Well written storyline with plenty of high rising action to keep the tale moving along.

Several different directions you could travel this story in from this point forward.

Will admit though, you had me with the puppy.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi Brett;
thank you so much for the review of my horror story. I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~

Comment from kriver

Excellent

Hi Patty,
Good write with a different
kind of ending for you
pretty dark story
compared to what you usually write.
Over all it is a good story
Best regards
K River

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi KR; thank you so much for reviewing my attempt at a horror story. It was a fun write, but I'm not sure if I really like the genre,
~patty~

Comment from Stacia Ann

Excellent

Well, that was a sad ending!
Beautiful description throughout, of the dog, his idyllic life with his lady, and how it was all spoiled with the entry of the werewolf--the man that smelled like a wolf.
I felt edge-of-the-seat suspense when Jimi went out to confront the werewolf.
Very sad ending, but perhaps Jimi is happier that way--some dogs don't recover from the loss of their master, and some people don't recover from the loss of a dog; the bond is that strong. I think you captured that here.
What do you think about giving the lady a name? I think Jimi would be aware of it, as he is of his own, apparently. This would emphasize the bond between them, if he has an attachment to her that is personal.
Thanks for sharing this!
Stacia

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your time and positive comments.
~patty~

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Patty, you've done well here and told a story that starts out as an everyday thing, only to be met with the horror of your life. Well done. I enjoyed the story, and good luck. All the best, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing,
~patty~

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

All the way and in neat terms, this speaks about the good dog, it has been a cause of passion; how far and how much sensible, loyal and good, expressed naturally; I liked.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

I didn't realize when I started reading this that I was reading a horror story. I thought I was just reading another one of your loving pet stories.
But boy did it turn quickly.
You did an excellent job connecting us to Jimi and his lady and the ending was truly sad.
Great emotional tug.
Michael

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi Michael; yes - this was a surprise to many who tuned in for a typical 'Bernie and Howie' story and got a twisted ending!
Thank you for reading,
~patty~

Comment from MaggieF

Excellent

I know exactly what you mean, I'm much happier with fairies and magic dust! But I do love a good horror story which in my mind is setting a happy scene and life style that we would be happy in, enjoy that for a while then put an 'evil force' in it. Your story reminded me of early Deane Koontz or James Herbert. I used to read a lot of horror. I enjoyed this and it had a sort of happy ending, they both died together! I loved that we don't know who or what or where the 'thing' would go back to. Enjoyed. MaggieF

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~