The Enchanted Forest
Child's Acrostic16 total reviews
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've written a great poem.
I tried to read it to my baby girl, hoping she'd fall asleep. She listened but she's still awake.
Beautiful artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the art and the color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Acrostic Poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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You've written a great poem.
I tried to read it to my baby girl, hoping she'd fall asleep. She listened but she's still awake.
Beautiful artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the art and the color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Acrostic Poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, I'm honored.by your review. How old is she?
Comment from Mustang Patty
Your lovely acrostic poem is enhanced by both your picture and the elegant wording. With a nice flow, you describe the enchanted forest with precision and grace. I felt like I was there - among the fairies. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
~patty~
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Your lovely acrostic poem is enhanced by both your picture and the elegant wording. With a nice flow, you describe the enchanted forest with precision and grace. I felt like I was there - among the fairies. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
~patty~
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Thank you patty, you're very generous. I'm glad the imagery was there for you. It's always better when you ,as the reader , gets pleasure from reading my poetry. I always appreciate your reviews.
Trisha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm enchanted by your write, the elves and fairies, the laughter and the hideaways. You made me laugh about the advanced editor! It's a bit of a mare, good luck with the contest,love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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I'm enchanted by your write, the elves and fairies, the laughter and the hideaways. You made me laugh about the advanced editor! It's a bit of a mare, good luck with the contest,love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Thanks so much Dolly, It was just an idea for an acrostic . I appreciate your supportive review
Hugs Trisha
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
You did The Enchanted Forest very well and I loved the fact that I would not realize it was an acrostic, it flowed so nicely for a child to read.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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You did The Enchanted Forest very well and I loved the fact that I would not realize it was an acrostic, it flowed so nicely for a child to read.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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I have the same problem as you with advanced editor. I'd love to do more. Oh well, it is what it is,thanks for a good review
Comment from Ann Philips
I like the selection of the subject of fairies for the acrostic. It was playful which I personally enjoy in acrostic poetry ( or; I suppose I enjoy playfulness in any poetry, if I'm being honest.)
The images and ideas are delightful and very enjoyable to read.
You have occasional ending rhymes which I wish you could have used more consistently. I think a modest rhyme scheme would have contributed to the playful nature of the poem.
I particularly liked the lines: "All adorned in green" and "Sends pollen into flight". I like the touch of alliteration in the first and the imagery in the second.
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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I like the selection of the subject of fairies for the acrostic. It was playful which I personally enjoy in acrostic poetry ( or; I suppose I enjoy playfulness in any poetry, if I'm being honest.)
The images and ideas are delightful and very enjoyable to read.
You have occasional ending rhymes which I wish you could have used more consistently. I think a modest rhyme scheme would have contributed to the playful nature of the poem.
I particularly liked the lines: "All adorned in green" and "Sends pollen into flight". I like the touch of alliteration in the first and the imagery in the second.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thank you for a positive review. I not your opinion about rhyming. I appreciate your comments
Comment from Poetic Friend
Oh, I just love this! The poem offers magic and then some. Amazingly, you managed to produce such a strong enchanting story given the restrictions of the poetic form you used to tell this story.
Your acrostic is perfectly written, not a single line seemed forced or lags for the sake of the poetic form. Personally, I dislike when a line in the acrostic ends with a preposition or with "the" (the line seems to lags). Your acrostic avoided this. However, I seen such in many acrostics written on FanStory. Of course, this is just my preference.
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Oh, I just love this! The poem offers magic and then some. Amazingly, you managed to produce such a strong enchanting story given the restrictions of the poetic form you used to tell this story.
Your acrostic is perfectly written, not a single line seemed forced or lags for the sake of the poetic form. Personally, I dislike when a line in the acrostic ends with a preposition or with "the" (the line seems to lags). Your acrostic avoided this. However, I seen such in many acrostics written on FanStory. Of course, this is just my preference.
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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What a wonderful and complimentary review! I am delighted that you enjoyed reading the acrostic. Your review made my evening, thanks so much.
