Lovely Flowers
a story inspired by Pierre-Auguste Renoir23 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good poem. Is there any language more beautiful, or filled with more unnecessary letters than French?
"Merci beaucoup."
Holy moly, how does anyone learn how to spell in France?
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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A very good poem. Is there any language more beautiful, or filled with more unnecessary letters than French?
"Merci beaucoup."
Holy moly, how does anyone learn how to spell in France?
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Thank you for sharing my story.
Comment from JDRBAR
Very well written, leaving a wealth of imagery in its wake. You've packed a lot in such few words. The art work is absolutely ideal for this story. Good luck with this.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Very well written, leaving a wealth of imagery in its wake. You've packed a lot in such few words. The art work is absolutely ideal for this story. Good luck with this.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my interpretation of Renoir's wonderful painting. Thanks for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your one hundred word story inspired by the painting by Renoir. Your story is lovely, and I could see the characters in the painting come to life in my mind's eye.
~patty~
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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thank you for sharing your one hundred word story inspired by the painting by Renoir. Your story is lovely, and I could see the characters in the painting come to life in my mind's eye.
~patty~
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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I am so pleased you like my interpretation of Renoir's wonderful painting, Patty.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Such polite society and mutual respect with hope of getting under the covers! If flowers do the trick then the ploy is to be admired, I enjoyed your 100 words story and wish you luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Such polite society and mutual respect with hope of getting under the covers! If flowers do the trick then the ploy is to be admired, I enjoyed your 100 words story and wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Dolly. I truly enjoyed interpreting Renoir's wonderful painting. Glad you enjoyed my story.
Comment from oliver818
Nice story. You captured a very interesting scene here, one I guess most people person would like to have when they are old. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Nice story. You captured a very interesting scene here, one I guess most people person would like to have when they are old. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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It was fun to interpret this wonderful painting of Renoir's. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment from apky
I think you did a marvellous job with this story, managing to convey entire tapestries by using very few word:
- In dark blue mourning clothes, she'd stroll by my garden every day. (Here, you tell the reader the gender, that she must be widowed or lost someone dear to her, whom she possibly visits every day at the cemetery)
-I arose, brushed damp loam from my knees, and smiled. ( at once we see a passioned gardener...)
Brilliant. Sorry I'm out of sixes; this would have deserved one in my opinion.
Apky
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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I think you did a marvellous job with this story, managing to convey entire tapestries by using very few word:
- In dark blue mourning clothes, she'd stroll by my garden every day. (Here, you tell the reader the gender, that she must be widowed or lost someone dear to her, whom she possibly visits every day at the cemetery)
-I arose, brushed damp loam from my knees, and smiled. ( at once we see a passioned gardener...)
Brilliant. Sorry I'm out of sixes; this would have deserved one in my opinion.
Apky
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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I am so delighted you enjoyed my short-short and felt it worthy of six stars. I truly enjoyed interpreting this wonderful Renoir painting. Thank you for your very kind praise.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes indeed, a lonely man gives a lovely woman a rose, hoping she'll return for more . . . of something, heh-heh.
Okay, so the gardener/owner's gesture wasn't an out and out blatant type of flirting. But it was still flirting nonetheless.
Good flash fiction story; tender, yet sublime.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Yes indeed, a lonely man gives a lovely woman a rose, hoping she'll return for more . . . of something, heh-heh.
Okay, so the gardener/owner's gesture wasn't an out and out blatant type of flirting. But it was still flirting nonetheless.
Good flash fiction story; tender, yet sublime.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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I am very pleased you enjoyed this short-short, Dean. it was fun to interpret Renoir's wonderful painting.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from crich
As a fan of the painter, your story made me smile! I have often stood in front of one of his paintings and wondered about the people he paints. Your dialogue was imaginative and sweet. Good luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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As a fan of the painter, your story made me smile! I have often stood in front of one of his paintings and wondered about the people he paints. Your dialogue was imaginative and sweet. Good luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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I, too, love to gaze at Renoir's works. This one was fun to interpret although I only had 100 words to work with. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from WalkerMan
This 100-word story is a perfect match for the Renoir painting, and I like the way you left it open-ended with the last sentence, "Yes, Monsieur, it's possible." The resultant effect is heartwarming. This brief encounter could be the start of a romance that would fill a full-length novel, with this story as teaser and a print of the painting on the cover. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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This 100-word story is a perfect match for the Renoir painting, and I like the way you left it open-ended with the last sentence, "Yes, Monsieur, it's possible." The resultant effect is heartwarming. This brief encounter could be the start of a romance that would fill a full-length novel, with this story as teaser and a print of the painting on the cover. Well done.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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I am delighted you think the story and the painting are a "perfect match." Renoir's art always speaks to me and I love using it to inspire my poems & stories. Thanks so much for sharing and your very kind praise.
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You are welcome. You are a good writer, and I am serious about recommending that you consider turning this into a novel. I think it even has film or television series possibilities. -- Mike
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Thank you, Mike, for your encouragement. I don't know if I have another novel in me (I've written 5). I do, however, think it might make an interesting regular length story (2500 words). We'll see.
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As this is a blind contest, I do not yet know who you are; so, if you do write more of this story, please send me notice by PM so I can read it. I even understand some French. -- Mike
Comment from Kazzawin
A little period love story.
Based in the innocent times when conversation was measured and the tiniest gesture was greeted with enormity.
Renoir's inspired artwork fits this piece beautifully.
Good luck, I enjoyed it very much : )
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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A little period love story.
Based in the innocent times when conversation was measured and the tiniest gesture was greeted with enormity.
Renoir's inspired artwork fits this piece beautifully.
Good luck, I enjoyed it very much : )
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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I am pleased you recognized the "innocent times" I was trying to recreate in this short-short. Renoir's art often inspires me to tell his stories. Thanks so much for sharing.
