Enjoy Expanding Joyfulness
It envelops while it develops10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This DwaRazy poem, Enjoy Expanding Joyfulness, does what is expected with possibly a less coherent second stanza than the first.
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This DwaRazy poem, Enjoy Expanding Joyfulness, does what is expected with possibly a less coherent second stanza than the first.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
Comment from BeasPeas
Good job. You have made your DwaRazy rhyme which is unique. I like it. Is that your painting there to illustrate? I like the colors. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
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Good job. You have made your DwaRazy rhyme which is unique. I like it. Is that your painting there to illustrate? I like the colors. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This is a poem that will stand the test of time. It uses very lovely language and seems very polished to me. It is unpretentious, graceful off the lips and gracefully done. I like this very much. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a poem that will stand the test of time. It uses very lovely language and seems very polished to me. It is unpretentious, graceful off the lips and gracefully done. I like this very much. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
Comment from MaggieF
Love impressionist painting. I know this is about expanding and developing but is it also about a flower being in a flower show? where did I get that from? I think I'll read it again. Made me think. MaggieF
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Love impressionist painting. I know this is about expanding and developing but is it also about a flower being in a flower show? where did I get that from? I think I'll read it again. Made me think. MaggieF
Comment Written 31-May-2017
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed your poem. It flows well and has nice rhythm and pace. I like the imagery of happiness too, it makes it pleasant to read. Thanks for sharing and best of luck with the competition
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I enjoyed your poem. It flows well and has nice rhythm and pace. I like the imagery of happiness too, it makes it pleasant to read. Thanks for sharing and best of luck with the competition
Comment Written 31-May-2017
Comment from Ricky1024
Beatification is here.
Really loved the style.
Theme works well with imagery
Adjective content was excellent and Objective Content was scaled at 100.
Thanks,
Ricky...
Xoxoxoxo
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Beatification is here.
Really loved the style.
Theme works well with imagery
Adjective content was excellent and Objective Content was scaled at 100.
Thanks,
Ricky...
Xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 31-May-2017
Comment from Heather Knight
This type of poem must be difficult to write, but you've done very well. I also like the picture you've chosen. It's very original.
Good luck in the contest.
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This type of poem must be difficult to write, but you've done very well. I also like the picture you've chosen. It's very original.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks hope brings in new hopes and hope is unending ever, as the joys over things seen or felt go expanding like anything coupled with hope joys unfold more joys; I liked.
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This speaks hope brings in new hopes and hope is unending ever, as the joys over things seen or felt go expanding like anything coupled with hope joys unfold more joys; I liked.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
Comment from lyenochka
The painting looks joyful. I think the poem fits the rules of two different forms of a word in each line. The last line is long in syllables but I feel like it should have "more of life's natural win." But it's all up to you as you probably want to shorten it to keep the meter more regular.
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The painting looks joyful. I think the poem fits the rules of two different forms of a word in each line. The last line is long in syllables but I feel like it should have "more of life's natural win." But it's all up to you as you probably want to shorten it to keep the meter more regular.
Comment Written 30-May-2017
Comment from jusylee72
okay, I have to admit I have to look up DWARAZy poem. So that part of the equation I cannot review. You do have pretty words and images in this poem. I am not sure exactly what you wanted to get across spiritually or intellectually. Nice illustration also.
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okay, I have to admit I have to look up DWARAZy poem. So that part of the equation I cannot review. You do have pretty words and images in this poem. I am not sure exactly what you wanted to get across spiritually or intellectually. Nice illustration also.
Comment Written 30-May-2017
