The Perfect Man
Too good to be true?20 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! What a story! At first I thought, I want one of those! But as the end approached, I think these robots need a little tweaking before being released on the market! You made me smile, I really enjoyed your story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Wow! What a story! At first I thought, I want one of those! But as the end approached, I think these robots need a little tweaking before being released on the market! You made me smile, I really enjoyed your story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Thanks for reading my story, Dolly. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from giraffmang
Well, it's all there,
Be careful what you wish for. They should have put his controls on the inside! I wonder what kind of warranty she got?
which make all the procedure - made?
From now on, I'll give the orders.- need closing speech marks here.
Good, strong entry.
GMG
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Well, it's all there,
Be careful what you wish for. They should have put his controls on the inside! I wonder what kind of warranty she got?
which make all the procedure - made?
From now on, I'll give the orders.- need closing speech marks here.
Good, strong entry.
GMG
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Thanks for reading and for noticing the typos.
Comment from Leena
Emotions, technology and creativity all in one! An absolutely amusing and thrilling read. Enjoyed every bit of it, right through the end. Wondering, what if it had it been for real? :D Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Emotions, technology and creativity all in one! An absolutely amusing and thrilling read. Enjoyed every bit of it, right through the end. Wondering, what if it had it been for real? :D Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Thanks for your review. I´m glad you enjoyed the story.
Comment from JDRBAR
I should only give you two stars and the rest when you post the rest of the story, LOL. You CAN'T end it there. I'll have to put my own ending to it and it might be as imaginative. Boo hoo.
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reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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I should only give you two stars and the rest when you post the rest of the story, LOL. You CAN'T end it there. I'll have to put my own ending to it and it might be as imaginative. Boo hoo.
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Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Do feel free to finish the story yourself ;)
Thanks for your review.
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Aaarrrrgggghhhhhh!
Comment from Mustang Patty
Pesky robots! It seems that they always try to get the upper hand. Especially the ones with artificial intelligence. You wove this tale well, and you gave us quite the twist at the end. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
A nit: 'I've fried some chops and I don't want then (them) to get cold.'
~patty~
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Pesky robots! It seems that they always try to get the upper hand. Especially the ones with artificial intelligence. You wove this tale well, and you gave us quite the twist at the end. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
A nit: 'I've fried some chops and I don't want then (them) to get cold.'
~patty~
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Thanks for reading and for noticing the typo. I´ll correct it immediately.
Comment from apky
I had to nod to myself with satisfaction when I got to the para below:
The prototype was everything I had expected and more. He looked so real it was impossible to tell he was not human. And he was a very handsome non-human. Tall and dark-haired with green eyes, just a dream come true.
At least there's that option - good to know. I might include a story of undying love and devotion from this kind of prospect.
Apky
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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I had to nod to myself with satisfaction when I got to the para below:
The prototype was everything I had expected and more. He looked so real it was impossible to tell he was not human. And he was a very handsome non-human. Tall and dark-haired with green eyes, just a dream come true.
At least there's that option - good to know. I might include a story of undying love and devotion from this kind of prospect.
Apky
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Thanks for reading. BTW, have you ever watched Humans?
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Erm, not quite sure. I see humans the way I've been conditioned to see them.
Does that make sense?
Apky
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I was talking about a tv show called Humans ;)
Comment from oliver818
What a great story. I've heard of that kind of robot, and your story really brings them to life. It would be terrifying to have your robot who is so perfect turn on you like that. Best of luck with the competition and have a great day
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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What a great story. I've heard of that kind of robot, and your story really brings them to life. It would be terrifying to have your robot who is so perfect turn on you like that. Best of luck with the competition and have a great day
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Thanks for reading. Have a nice Sunday.
Comment from pome lover
good grief! what a story.
I don't know what others for the contest will be like, but that was a winner!
Let's hope technology doesn't go there, but it made a great, original entry.
Kind of modern day Edgar Allen Poe-ish.
good job.
pome lover
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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good grief! what a story.
I don't know what others for the contest will be like, but that was a winner!
Let's hope technology doesn't go there, but it made a great, original entry.
Kind of modern day Edgar Allen Poe-ish.
good job.
pome lover
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading.
Comment from zanya
Well done - a most interesting and possible scenario portrayed here -amid the driverless cars and clicks that dominate our daily life this could well be the 'final frontier' - a machine of our very own to love !!!- but wait there is a snag - the machine turns on us and we are happy to reconnect with the world of 'old'Mrs Miller's crochet curtains fluttering'.
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Well done - a most interesting and possible scenario portrayed here -amid the driverless cars and clicks that dominate our daily life this could well be the 'final frontier' - a machine of our very own to love !!!- but wait there is a snag - the machine turns on us and we are happy to reconnect with the world of 'old'Mrs Miller's crochet curtains fluttering'.
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Thanks for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this begs for a sequel. My heart is pounding from anticipation, wanting to know what happens next.
In this first chapter, the reader connects with the characters, especially Miss Lawson (I don;t you mentioned her first name).
I like the approach you took with this contest. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Wow, this begs for a sequel. My heart is pounding from anticipation, wanting to know what happens next.
In this first chapter, the reader connects with the characters, especially Miss Lawson (I don;t you mentioned her first name).
I like the approach you took with this contest. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Thanks so much for reading.
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You are welcome. Are you going to write a sequel?
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I hadn't thought about it... maybe one day.
